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Poetry/Free Verse/Ocean Journey
Copyright Protected, ID 09-1568-817-15
All Rights Reserved, 2023, Constance La France

Written September 15, 2023
For the International Contest, Ocean
Sponsor, Ink Empress, Judged 09/15/2023

First Place

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I have lived a good life but now I am withered old and it is time for me to gasp my last breath there are no loved ones standing over my bed no one holding my hand I am all alone and my tears fall I expect darkness to wrap around me like a blanket but, instead I am in a sail boat on a vast unknown ocean the aqua waves kiss the boat and the wind whispers my boat is racing with the tide as the waves push there is a liquid murmur in this vast blue emptiness the water is sparkling and luminous in the blazing sun cobalt blue, deep, a place of whales and sharks I am on a watery journey but to what destination this ocean has no fences, nothing holding me my sails are flapping and I set my compass true north it is not cold blue gloom but I sail forward with peace the sea birds call to me from the crystal blue sky my ocean has no shores, no beginning and no end no clouds clutter the sky as the birds fly in a cosmic dance suddenly, the ocean is saturated with colors seared with light I gasp in the salty air and a cool mist licks my face I am veiled in a haze and all is quiet as my boat is still in the ocean my long hair blowing ... oh, I am no longer a withered old lady but young and beautiful, and God has painted lovely brushstrokes of ocean colors and now reaches out his hand that I clasp

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Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 9/23/2023 11:03:00 PM

Great ocean and great journey! Very enjoyed poem!

Constance La France
Date: 9/24/2023 6:43:00 AM

Abdullah, thank you so much for the compliment and comment.

I Am Anaya

Date: 9/19/2023 3:58:00 PM

I love this piece. I truly believe this and am overjoyed, so much stunning imagery! Congratulations on your well-deserved top win! Amazing, Constance ~ Anaya

Constance La France
Date: 9/21/2023 3:55:00 PM

Anaya, thank you so much for the compliment, lovely comment and for the congratulations.

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 9/18/2023 7:05:00 AM

An absolutely amazing write, Constance, the ocean transforming the ‘withered old lady’ into a young and beautiful lass! Warmest congratulations on your top win!

Constance La France
Date: 9/19/2023 12:17:00 PM

Seeker, thank you so much for the compliment, comment, and congratulations.

Ink Empress

Date: 9/18/2023 3:50:00 AM

Dear talented poetess, you’ve not just used oceanic wordplay, but also expressed such deep and poignant emotions in such sheer eloquence that left me truly in awe feeling every word you’ve woven here in such a poetic manner. I really love the opening lines and also how you’ve written “ no clouds clutter as.. cosmic dance” wow! The alliterations and creativity there is breathtaking! Brushstrokes of ocean colors you’ve splashed on your artistic canvas. Luv it Thank u for writing. CONGRATULATIONS!

Constance La France
Date: 9/19/2023 12:18:00 PM

Ink, thank you so much for the nice comment, compliment and congratulations.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/18/2023 3:09:00 AM

Gosh, what a stunning and breathtaking write this is, dear beautiful poetess.. It held my heartstrings with its poignant symphonies in the beginning and then elevated my soul to a higher dimension, just as evocatively described in these eloquent poetic words "my ocean has no shores, no beginning and no end", "God has painted lovely brushstrokes of ocean colors and now reaches out his hand that I clasp" Oh, I love this write, definitely a FAV, heartiest congratulations on the wonderful win :)

Constance La France
Date: 9/19/2023 12:20:00 PM

Hiya, thank you so much for the compliment, wonderful comment , FAV, and congratulations.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 9/15/2023 11:10:00 AM

I am grateful for your gift of words, which has inspired and uplifted me with your beautiful and moving exploration of death and the afterlife. Your use of imagery and symbolism is stunning, and your words paint a vivid picture of the journey.

Constance La France
Date: 9/15/2023 9:21:00 PM

Daniel, thank you so much for the nice comment and compliment on my writing and poem.

Jay Narain

Date: 9/15/2023 11:01:00 AM

Oh, what a beautiful oceanic journey

Constance La France
Date: 9/15/2023 9:22:00 PM

Jay, thank you so much for the nice compliment.