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The first time she saw him was at the coffee shop, He was staring at her with deep, dark fathomless eyes; Dressed entirely in black and with movie star looks, He made her uncomfortable like he could see her soul. Then one day walking to the store there he was again, Walking towards her, they passed, he touched her hand; Electric sparks were shooting up her arm to her brain, She turned to look at him but he never even turned around. Then one day on a park bench reading a book, she saw him, Approaching, she felt like running away but she didn't; He sat down smiling and introduced himself; he was nice, They talked for a long time and made a date for that evening. They had a good time, supper and drinks, she invited him in, Would you like coffee, she remembers saying; She was making the coffee and he was standing behind her, He brushed her hair away and was breathing on her neck. Kissing her hair, whispering things, his hands on her waist, Turning her around, their lips met, gently then deeply; His hands were strong and demanding, pulling at her clothing, He pressed his desire against her skin, his hands possessing. Soft bites became urgent and rough, painful; she was afraid, She was being lowered to the floor, his hands on her wrists; Gagging her mouth with his kisses, quenching his hunger, She was a captive, unable to resist; he was in control of her. His passion was uninhibited, and his words so cruel, There was no love or sweetness; it was evil obsession; He was brutal, sadistic, heartless, merciless and savage, And looking down at her those dark eyes were stone cold. She never saw him again except in her nightmares. _________________________ September 8, 2015 Narrative - Fiction For the contest, Controversial, sponsor, Charlotte Jade Puddifoot Seventh Place

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Date: 9/19/2015 5:13:00 PM
A deep, emotional piece this is.... Congrats on your WIN Broken Wings! ;-)
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Date: 9/19/2015 12:35:00 AM
Well done Broken Wings, amazing write....Seren
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Date: 9/18/2015 4:59:00 PM
I am glad this made it to the winners circle, you have talent for every subject...well done!
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Date: 9/18/2015 1:36:00 PM
well deserved win. SKAT
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Date: 9/18/2015 10:15:00 AM
Well done, Broken -- a trusted encounter that can turn to disaster in a blink of an eye...happens too often. Congratulations on your being on the winner's list. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/17/2015 11:09:00 PM
Superb take with this wonderful write broken! Congrats on big win! Thnx for visits to my page with ur very sweet words!
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Date: 9/17/2015 7:30:00 PM
a dark story of obsessive control...this is a more hard hitting write from you, which i like to see, and that final stand alone line is full of impact - congrats on your win in my contest!
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Date: 9/17/2015 6:55:00 PM
Congrats on your win Broken Wings
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Date: 9/17/2015 6:36:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/11/2015 6:40:00 PM
no one should have to go through that....that's no opinion, that is FACT....dark erotica, and you covered it well....when it comes poetry, your pen excels....;)
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Date: 9/9/2015 10:45:00 AM
Like the rest of the male comments here, I don't know what to say. Well written, BW.
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Date: 9/9/2015 7:41:00 AM
Fabulous tale Broken wings I found the ending quite chilling - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/9/2015 6:01:00 AM
BW, just coming back to make sure I gave you a 7:-) Alexis
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Date: 9/9/2015 5:55:00 AM
BW, this is a well written dark write. I was drawn into the piece due to your skillful pen. I could only imagine what that "monster" did to her. Great job. Good luck in the contest:-) Alexis
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Date: 9/9/2015 2:04:00 AM
Wow, I'm Speechless.
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Date: 9/8/2015 11:44:00 PM
Well thought out story, illustrated in detail by your words. Good luck
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Date: 9/8/2015 9:56:00 PM
Fabulous write,B.W., like always a 7. Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/8/2015 9:00:00 PM
You are a great story teller..I was expecting a sappy love story from the way it started, and you turned it and twisted it, gave me the freaks..awesomely done.
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