O Precious Sleep

Heavy and low, the fog remains,
the muffled sound, in part explains.
The sun cannot quite pierce, and so
the fog remains, heavy and low.

Ethereal, a trance-like state;
seems clarity will have to wait.
He slips from the material,
a trace-like state, ethereal.

And so it does begin again:
a waking stupor settles in.
Soon will the auditory buzz
begin again, and so it does.

Much confused, disoriented,
deprivation, firm-cemented,
has rocked his world and left his muse
disoriented, much confused.

O precious sleep! Where art thou now?
To close the eyes and dream somehow,
And roam the hills in slumber deep.
Where art thou now, o precious sleep?

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for the Swap Quatrain Poetry Contest
sponsored by Emile Pinet
written on 09/05/2022
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Messina Avatar
September 9, 2022 at 2:36 AM
Reading this after waking up on just 4 hours of sleep makes me want one of those C-Cap machines (lol) Great write and well done on this form, Jeff. Belated Congrats on POTD. Sleep well my friend. Charlie
Nicole Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:40 PM
You wish to stay, the moment you drift on a cloud and embrace that precious sleep, but that's not always possible. Such a wonderful feeling indeed, when you're finally able to sleep like a dream. Congratulations Jeff, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Brandy
M  Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:07 PM
Congratulations Jeff on POTD! A great poem on such a relatable topic. Glad you are now getting some sleep…..Sweet Dreams Jeff! Debx
Anaya Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 3:30 PM
Congratulations on POTD Jeff! Love that you did well on this challenging form! No sleep...tinnitus, leg cramps, re-flux, snoring, so many reasons why...but I can't wait to get to bed. "Wee" :)
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 3:41 PM
Thanks, Anaya, I hope to finally make peace with my C-PAP, that or have a ceremonial burning... teehee
George Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 9:58 AM
When mind is pre occupied with poetry, sleep will keep a distance. It happens so often. Congratulations Jeff on your POTD, quite deserving for this beautifully composed poem.
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 1:08 PM
Thanks so much, Valsa! I hope I'm beginning to turn a corner with the new C-PAP machine - it has been rough!
La France Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 8:51 AM
Jeff, great poem, oh I have had nights like that, too many actually and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor, God Bless
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 1:08 PM
Thanks so much, Constance!
May Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 8:33 AM
Very nicely penned, Congrats on POTD..
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 1:08 PM
Thanks, Joseph!
Hankins Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 8:18 AM
I enjoyed your poem the first time I read it, Jeff, and I am so pleased that it has earned P.O.T.D. We're all trying to figure out how this honor is achieved, but your poem is certainly a worthy recipient! Congratulations! Enjoy your day!
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 1:09 PM
Double-secret algorithms, no doubt! eenie-meenie...
Baker Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 8:08 AM
Congratulations on your POTD, Jeff. I'm not familiar with this form, but have read several lately and it is intriguing. Enjoy this honor with a good night of sleep! A poet friend in Texas, Bill
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 1:09 PM
Had never run across it before either, Bill - interesting, for sure!
Wolf Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 7:03 AM
I see that Poetry Soup and I agree: This FAVE is POTD. Way to go, JK! Keep on sleeping and smiling! :) gw
Lawless Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 6:59 AM
great job Jeff....it took me ten minutes to figure out the "swap"......gotta look into that contest. You slipped it in there unnoticed...at least by me.
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 1:10 PM
lol, I had to go look at several to get an idea of what was going on and try to figure out how to keep it from just sounding like an echo...
Heman Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 6:26 AM
A nice piece Jeff. I love how it's structured and the flow. Poet friend. Heman~
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 6:34 AM
Thanks, Heman, thanks indeed!
Fowler Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 6:07 AM
Awesome write Jeff! This flows so well with such expression! Congratulations on your POTD honor! Linda
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 6:34 AM
Thanks so much, Linda!
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September 7, 2022 at 5:47 AM
Seems to by a fairly common problem amongst the soup community Jeff, maybe our minds are sometimes overcooked and stewing in poetry, but your poem is brilliant. if not painstakingly written from lack of Zs, congratulations on a totally deserving POTD, cheers David
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 6:33 AM
Thanks, David, yes, I am amazed at the number of people I know who have C-PAP machines. Somebody is selling a lot of equipment!
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:40 AM
Oh wow, POTD, what a pleasant surprise to wake up to!
Sands Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:20 AM
I can relate to this. Congratulations for this great POTD :)
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:40 AM
Thanks so much, Heidi!
Logan Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:08 AM
I share your angst over lack of sleep, Jeff. Congratulations on your quatrain being recognized by so many as the POTD.
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:41 AM
Thank you, Jenna, a very nice surprise!
Tor Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 4:53 AM
Congratulations Jeff with This Swap Quatrain. To win with this form is a feat in itself. You have Certainly Mastered this form. Achieving POTD. So sorry for not being able to get some sleep. Best wishes to fall asleep. Thanks for sharing...
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:41 AM
That's an interesting form, isn't it? Thanks, Michael, I'd never run across that before. Yes, to sleep, perchance to dream...
Kitchin Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 3:58 AM
Jeff, wonderfully penned, congratulations on POTD!
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:42 AM
Thanks so much, Tania, you're very kind!
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September 7, 2022 at 1:55 AM
It’s awful when precious sleep is deprived at night, but why does it often appear in daylight. Congratulations Jeff on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Belle
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:43 AM
Honestly, I really struggle to be pleasant when I'm tired. It affects me more than not eating and being hangry! I guess we are indeed creatures of habit!
Seeker Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 12:46 AM
Great Swap Quatrain z Jeff ~ congrats on POTD. May the sleep that eludes you, now envelop you!
Cunningham Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 12:39 AM
Nothing worse than being deprived of sleep. Counting sheep just doesn't work. Congratulations Jeff on POTD, enjoy the honour. Tom
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:45 AM
Indeed, a very pleasant surprise/honor for the morning, thanks, Tom!
Wolf Avatar
September 5, 2022 at 7:42 PM
Love the classic form and the penetrating question! Bravo. A FAVE for me, Jeff. Thank you, Gershon
Kyser Avatar
September 7, 2022 at 5:44 AM
Ah, Gershon, I actually got a night last night that fell into the "didn't suck" category. I guess that's an improvement, lol. Thanks, friend, for the fave.
Hankins Avatar
September 5, 2022 at 8:19 AM
Another winning poem. Methinks you are on a roll, Jeff. I really liked your reversed lines. Very nice. I also think Emile will like this.
Hankins Avatar
September 5, 2022 at 6:12 PM
I have been told I need a C-Pap, Jeff. But, they put this apparatus on me in the hospital, and I had to tell them to take it off. I was smothering to death. I'll never try THAT again! They say I have sleep apnea, but sleep apnea won't kill me...that apparatus would!!!
Kyser Avatar
September 5, 2022 at 8:42 AM
Thanks, Milt. I know this too shall pass, but I am really struggling right now!
Rhymer Avatar
September 5, 2022 at 7:13 AM
I am experiencing the same thing including the buzz.The other day I worked like a fiend and was spared though my sleep was broken and dream filled.Perhaps the coal miners daughter had the answer at night we slept cause we were tired.
Kyser Avatar
September 5, 2022 at 7:21 AM
I'm on day 10, having had to get a C-PAP machine, and I simply cannot sleep with it. It is really rough! Everyone says it will be "the best thing ever," but I don't see the light at the end of the tunnel yet, in fact, I don't even see the mountain the tunnel goes underneath! Thanks for your commiseration!
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