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apologies for my absence, been unwell and life is a bit, hectic at the moment but i will slowly and surely read your poems ...thank you all for always being so supportive

Written for the contest "who am i" sponsored by Unseeking Seeker

 

Minus Identity, Who am I

When soft colors of  
the amethyst twilight,  
dance amongst shadows~
swirling through forlorn forests,  
I count sparkling syllables of  
pirouetting peridots,  
looking for metered refrains  
from the emerald empyrean,  
while wondering,  
what am I but a  
speck of astral dust;  
garnet silhouette of  
desert orchid dusk,  
hanging on thin threads  
of lilac-laced lines,  
seeking sanguine  
streaks between  
black and white realms,  
composed with rhythmic reasons,  
that reveal pristine pathways  
to still wander,  
like a soulful sojourner,  
sleepwalking through pilgrims 
perfumed with peace,  
to attain eternal nirvana,  
there, I’ll no longer 
be a wingless bird,
but will soar like a golden eagle,
feathered in fragranced faith,  
and porcelain-tailed promises.

And as the pink pearl moon  
unveils its hyacinth halo,  
I twirl to the tamarind tenors  
of twinkling topaz,  
that fall upon healing hills  
thriving with buttercup bliss,  
below funeral fogs,  
where melanin phases of faces  
lurk in sweltering silence,  
stimulating my quill to release  
pastel pigments of contentment,
like glowing galaxies of gratitude.  

Yet, I am an unfinished poem,  
completely incomplete,  
comfortably rhyme-less,  
misplaced in a melancholic  
meadow of magnolia metaphors,  
too vague for the eye  
that sees not beyond  
my sun-kissed skin.  
While from ethereal verses,  
scattered across  
seraphic spheres, I strive,  
wishing that phrases I weave  
across midnight skies,  
would calm the soundless storms  
beneath lunar-pillowed oceans,  
as this glistening ink on  
the ceremonial canvas  
of life and beyond,  
longs to be the epitaph  
that immortalizes my voice  
amidst ashes and stones,  
skeletons and bones,  
there I’ll slumber with  
light still flowing  
through poetic veins,  
amidst the  
piercing pandemonium  
and turmeric tranquility;  
yin and yang of existence,
I am both, earth and water;
  aura of intuitive seas~
  and cathartic currents
mirroring the crestfallen crescent,
soaked in infinite luminescence 
   from aesthetic lanterns. 
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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George Avatar
July 7, 2024 at 6:49 AM
This contest really helps us to understand ourselves beyond our names and what we are known for. You have done this so well Dear, Ink. "I am both, earth and water; aura of intuitive seas and cathartic currents mirroring the crestfallen crescent." You've implored the use of great metaphors to describe yourself. This is a soul's talk and it is powerful. "where melanin phases of faces lurk in sweltering silence." There are a lot of things lurking in both darkness and silence. Best wishes.
Hind Avatar
July 5, 2024 at 10:34 AM
Beautifully composed, dear Ink. You always turn pain into something hopeful, a beautiful voice there is in that head of yours....enjoyed reading <3
Beaufort Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 12:40 PM
IE, what you describe sounds like something of a wonderful soul...open to all that there is and appreciative. This is truly beautiful. It's really an interesting question. Who are we? You seen to be something mystical.
Mitra Avatar
July 3, 2024 at 1:01 AM
Congratulations on your win dear poet.... What a beautiful piece of poetry..... It left me spellbound :)
mysore Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 9:50 PM
Aesthetic thoughts too. Congratulations dear poet.
Anaya Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 1:25 PM
Congratulations on your win, Empress! I can always count on a plethora of emotive passion, your poetry immortalized and is seen beyond your beautiful sun-kissed skin, dear Ink. Virtual hugs~Anaya
George Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 8:35 PM
Like Crystol Woods who has just commented below me, I too repeat- What a rich wealth of vocabulary and imagery! This probing into your identity, your notion of your place in this universe, your desire to be remembered through your poetry even after you become bone and ashes, your existential angst, your longing to fly high into the vast horizons like an eagle, all these are deeply delved into, here in this poem. "there, I’ll no longer be a wingless bird, but will soar like a golden eagle, feathered in fragranced faith, and porcelain-tailed promises." Wow... you are a golden eagle, nay a winged Pegasus. With delight we watch your flight, while being rooted to the earth as an Empress. Congratulations on your great win.... ! Happy I could be with you in the winner's list, though lower.
Empress Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 1:39 AM
Thank you sweet valsa always for being so kind and generous! You are such a generous and supportive soul. Your poems are always worthy of all the accolades and your comments make me feel like my poems are good enough. Theres only few like you so sincere and sees good in everything . Sending you light always
Woods Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 4:43 PM
What a rich wealth of vocabulary and imagery... what a beautiful mind!
Empress Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 1:40 AM
Thank you so much for reading and for leaving such a beautiful comment dear crystol, so kind of you to say “ beautiful mind” truly grateful
Greenhough Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 10:36 AM
This is an endearing poem. I feel the presence of many layers of existence. Perhaps we can be two places at one time. Now I view myself in a different light too. Thank you for sharing these thoughts. Sending best wishes for your recovery.
Empress Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 1:41 AM
Awwn thank you so very much dear Hilda so kind of you
Onclaud Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 6:55 AM
This is an unlimited supply of your personhood wanting to stake a claim for all the poet you want to be....we are always in the process of becoming so you are on track...a great volume of work. Ink!
Empress Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 1:44 AM
Thank you so very much dear nette
Buhagiar Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 2:30 AM
I weave across midnight skies, would calm the soundless storms beneath lunar-pillowed oceans. There is much beauty in your poems. Your talent always excels. Great alliteration and beautiful imagery. Deserves first placement.
Empress Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 1:50 AM
Your comment made me smile so kind you are dear victor thank you so very much
Goff Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 9:29 PM
Imaginative beauty every line, Ink, Cascades with your talent, thanks for sharing!
Juju The Dragon Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 5:33 PM
This Is Multiple Dimensional Beyond the Milky Nile Worthy...Lit Lit Lit,!!! Line by Line Light!
Poet Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 3:32 PM
Dear Ink, This intriguing poem explores identity, existence, and the search for meaning in the universe. The poem contemplates many places, nature, and spiritual development. Images of heavenly bodies, hues, and nature evoke amazement and introspection.  You employ expressive words to create emotions and paint vivid scenes. Words like "peridots," "empyrean," "nirvana," and "fragranced faith" evoke mystery and beauty. Alliteration, assonance, and metaphors make language lyrical. I missed reading and commenting on your wonderful poetry as I was away on vacation.
May Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 2:05 PM
'Weaving phrases across midnight skies to calm the soundless storms", Wonderful write
One Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 1:15 PM
Who are you? Is there a metaphor or enough adjectives to describe you? This is an interesting contest and I wonder how many will delve into their soul like you have... Your poem beautifully captures a journey through vivid imagery and emotional depth. The use of colour, gemstones, and celestial elements evokes a sense of wonder and introspection. Themes of identity, existential reflection, and the search for peace resonate throughout.
Onpaper Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 11:22 AM
Omg opening line is like a poetic movie!!! When soft colors of the amethyst twilight, dance amongst shadows.. absolutely love!! soar like a golden eagle, feathered in fragranced faith, and porcelain-tailed promises… the power animating from this line is mesmerizing.. stimulating my quill to release pastel pigments of contentment, love the perspective this comes in aee.. calm the soundless storms beneath lunar-pillowed oceans, the strength in this is melodic. I am both, earth and water; soaked in infinite luminescence This piece oozes in gorgeous power
Empress Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 11:23 AM
Hahah u are such a drama queen papi
Rhymes Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 11:14 AM
Beautiful as always
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