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You were found face down by a garden wall, It’s still a puzzle what had caused you to fall I saw you twisting and turning in the hospital bed, with a maze of messages trapped in your head The fall resulted in two huge bleeds on your brain, memories lost, you feared you’re going insane We trod short sinuous paths to help you to walk, playing memory games each day when we’d talk Mum is made of strong stuff, determined and plucky, she has got memory issues but in truth we’re so lucky Eleven years have flown by since mum fell in the street, thankfully her health is good, so my world is complete Maze - 10 Word Challenge Poetry Contest Sponsored by A Dear Heart 06/25/20

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Constance La France

Date: 7/1/2020 3:37:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my maze contest with this wonderful poem _Constance

Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/1/2020 2:29:00 PM

A heartfelt write of your mother's journey. Glad to know she is good. You have created a wonderful muse with metaphors of maze Jan. Congratulations on your win Blessings and love :)

Jenish Somadas

Date: 7/1/2020 12:43:00 AM

thankfully her health is good.. Beautifully penned Jan.. Great win.. Congrats..

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/28/2020 3:05:00 AM

So good to hear she is okay. Falls can create such damage. I am getting ready to hit the hay. I hope you have a nice day! Blessings xxoo

Eve Roper

Date: 6/27/2020 7:50:00 PM

A great way of expressing your emotions in this verse using the metaphor of a maze. Should score high. Hugs Eve

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 6/27/2020 2:00:00 PM

So glad your mom was alright. Hope all is well with you and your family. We are all keeping well here. Our virus count has been low so we are thankful. love phyl

M. L. Kiser

Date: 6/27/2020 12:12:00 PM

Wow, I'm glad she's better. Well penned.

John Watt

Date: 6/26/2020 6:48:00 PM

What a touching write of a resilient lady, Jan. Must have brought some anxious moments for you. Hope you have had some nice visits lately making up for lost time. You made the 10 words work so naturally for your account. Loved it! Perfect pic, too. Hugs ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2020 6:00:00 PM

Thanks John she is such a strong lady she doesnt realise how remarkable she is:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 6/25/2020 8:51:00 PM

That must have been very scary Jan, glad your mother is doing much better now, Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2020 5:59:00 PM

Our lives have never been the same since, but I am so lucky to have her:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 6/25/2020 2:09:00 PM

It is so easy for the elderly to lose their balance and fall; the tragedy is so few of them know to roll when they hit the ground, so too many bones and brains are shattered. Happy to hear you are finally able to give your mother an hug after such a long absence! Aloha! Rico

Rico Leffanta
Date: 6/26/2020 1:14:00 PM

A dive-bombing pigeon could cause an elderly person to quickly look up, lose their balance, and fall. Unless they roll, they could suffer head injuries as well as broken bones! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2020 2:30:00 PM

she was found face down in the street - we have no idea what caused the fall... she was on her way to help in a charity shop bless her, i got to hug her and tell her her bro in law had died and we rang my aunt. wanted to do it face to face with mum not ring her when it happened... we couldnt go to the funeral anyway it was in the UK and our border is closed unless you have to go for an emergency:-( hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/25/2020 11:37:00 AM

a wonderful poem about your mother, jan! i'm so happy to hear that you're now able to visit her - great news!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2020 2:28:00 PM

i want this poem to be a poem of hope that in time restrictions will be lifted:-) hugs jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 6/25/2020 7:19:00 AM

WOW and double wow!!! This is so good. I just love it and am glad you have your Mum. Bless you sweet lady. You're a gem and this poem should be a winner.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2020 9:09:00 AM

I am so lucky to still have her, can't believe it was 2009 since she had her fall many others of her age would not have survived. from today I am able to visit her with no restrictions - at last i can give her a hug after about 14 weeks!:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/25/2020 4:52:00 AM

At that age a fall can be devastating but thankfully she pulled through. It's great news you can now visit without restrictions. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2020 5:50:00 AM

Many would not have pulled through - was so bizarre as dad called to say she'd had a fall and was in hospital and they would get a taxi home - we dashed up to see her she was lapsing in and out of consciousness and her head was swollen like the elephant man - no way was she going anywhere ... she was in there 3 months!

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 6/24/2020 8:55:00 PM

Your journey with your mom is so loving and inspiring - that final couplet brought a tear (as my mother's health is not good) - glad she's such a plucky lady!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2020 4:14:00 AM

not many would have survived the fall - she was SO lucky that it was her short term memory that was affected. she is a remarkable lady such a shame my sister has cut all ties with the family since dad died over 5 years ago. I am so lucky to still have mum and as from today i can visit her without any restrictions!:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 6/24/2020 8:00:00 PM

I know the quality of care and love you give your Mum. I'm so glad you're able to visit her again, for your sake and for hers. Nicely written, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/25/2020 4:12:00 AM

thanks Lin and as of today I can see her without any restrictions! Cant wait to give her a hug:-) hugs jan xx

Robert L. Hinshaw

Date: 6/24/2020 7:07:00 PM

Glad to hear your Mum is doing fine, Jan! Great entry for the contest and a sure winner - Bob H

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2020 7:16:00 PM

Thanks Bob, all things considered she is doing very well, she is a very elderly lady and lives in a care home and up until lockdown I would see her every day. thankfully we are now virus free and I'm allowed to see her for 15 mins once a week but because they know how frequently i visited they let me put my name down for un used slots:-) hope all is good with you:-) hugs jan xx