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Making Streams

Ohbard and Pell meet up over lifetimes and dimensions for exchanges and conversations: sat two men of opposite age on two boulders by a silted island in a stream the togas worn with wet darkened hems and the universe draped around their shoulders in mid voice in mid animation in progressive countering they charged the weight of day and swam through depths of night and two summers passed and two winters too came still frown and laugh and nods and shakes among words that painted a masterpiece as Zeus looked down transfixed and thought aloud did Ohbard his beard had whitened since and the silted island had banked further along he and Pell still had rocks to upturn and the universe edged ever closer to being solved

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Date: 11/1/2023 2:25:00 PM
I found your poem thought provoking and deep...as two men of opposite ages had rocks to upturn..and the universe edged closer. Like the Zeus reference. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
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Clive Culverhouse
Date: 11/1/2023 2:34:00 PM
Thank you Sara, your thoughts are really appreciated
Date: 11/1/2023 12:32:00 PM
Embarrassingly, I plead guilty to not reading you, Clive. But I will after reading this thought provoking take on life. Lines like "swam through depths of night" and "the universe edged ever closer..." that's poetry to me in the height of intensity.
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/1/2023 12:49:00 PM
My pleasure. I've been tied up with lots of things the last two weeks, but now I'll have more free time.
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Clive Culverhouse
Date: 11/1/2023 12:44:00 PM
So pleased you like my poem Lin, thank you for your time, I really appreciate your comment

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