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Reality Begins To Blur

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Created by Gregory R Barden - at least three verses of the following rhyme scheme, ABBACCDD + refrain, (the refrain repeats after every verse), with syllable counts of 10,5,5,10,5,5,11,11 + 6, (6 is the refrain), and the LAST verse must have an extra line of rhyme (D, 11 syllables), and an extra line of refrain, (6 syllables), that is different but rhymes.

I felt so sad watching her fall apart though I wasn't spying I caught her crying, and I felt a pain deep within my heart. Flowing from her eyes, her tears mesmerize. A weeping angel, she took my breath away, and I struggle to find the right words to say and my heart starts to pound. I had never felt this way before now, I knew naught of love or angels above. Yet I felt our souls were once linked, somehow, and I just knew she felt the same in me. Compassion and hope both encourage me to inquire of her, what the matter might be, and my heart starts to pound. She noticed me, so I sat for a while. Outside of a dream, not even ice cream could possibly be sweeter than her smile. As she spoke with me I stared at my knee and asked if she felt the same I felt for her, and she said yes, she was happy to concur. We kiss, and reality begins to blur, and my heart starts to pound blocking out every sound.

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Susan Gentry

Date: 6/15/2018 12:12:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! Well done.

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/15/2018 7:14:00 PM

Thanks Susan, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Elaine George

Date: 6/12/2018 2:30:00 AM

Loved this, Emile. Many congrats on your win. Elaine

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/12/2018 8:13:00 AM

Thanks Elaine, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

John Hamilton

Date: 6/11/2018 2:13:00 PM

Back with congrats Emile, I knew this would place well in Greg's contest!

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/11/2018 6:20:00 PM

Thanks John, I appreciate it my friend, Emile.

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/31/2018 1:39:00 PM

Well executed, Emile.

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/11/2018 8:00:00 AM

Thanks Line, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

John Hamilton

Date: 5/9/2018 8:44:00 PM

I would never attempt such a daunting form like this, this new form of Greg's is a master stroke of genius, you're execution is unbelievable, one day when I get to your level I may try it, this is a winner to me!!

Emile Pinet
Date: 6/11/2018 8:00:00 AM

Thanks so much John, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Constance La France

Date: 5/9/2018 8:16:00 AM

Emile, you made the form so beautiful and your words are divine !

Emile Pinet
Date: 5/9/2018 8:54:00 AM

Thanks so much Constance, your support and comments are much appreciated my friend, Emile.

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/8/2018 4:43:00 PM

I enjoyed this Emile! You are a very creative writer with so many nice poems to read :)

Emile Pinet
Date: 5/9/2018 8:53:00 AM

Thanks Heidi, your comments and support always cheer me up my friend.