Lonely

Silent tree with an empty hammock, swings to the sour perfume of life.

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Bill Baker

Date: 10/28/2023 11:37:00 AM

Even in the limited form of a Monoku, your imagery is eloquent, my friend. The sour perfume of life ... loneliness is exquisitely displayed. Congratulations on your, well-deserved, contest win! Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/20/2023 6:15:00 PM

Ah, dear Empress, gifted poetess, your golden pen spills such lovely melancholy. Even in the restricted space of a monoku, your poetic brilliance radiates well beyond its confines. Soulful imagery that stirs the heart so poignantly. Congratulations for your excellent win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes, my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Ink Empress
Date: 10/21/2023 1:39:00 AM

Awwn truly blessed to receive your encouraging and kind feedback. Thank you so very much always

Debjani Mitra

Date: 10/20/2023 8:38:00 AM

this is so good, I wonder who is more lonely the tree or hammock..words cut the soul to feel the pain

Ink Empress
Date: 10/21/2023 1:39:00 AM

I wondered the same. Thank you so much for your kind feedback truly grateful for your support

Karen Jones

Date: 10/20/2023 1:03:00 AM

Love your poetic power in pinning and in winning. Congrats!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/20/2023 3:00:00 AM

Thank you so much truly

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/19/2023 12:40:00 PM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading it again. Have a blessed/great day writing away.................

Ink Empress
Date: 10/20/2023 3:00:00 AM

Thank you so much dear Paula im so glad you enjoyed reading this

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/19/2023 12:36:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Ink Empress.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/20/2023 3:01:00 AM

Thank you so much dear sweet Andrea.

Silent One

Date: 10/19/2023 11:41:00 AM

I hope you are not feeling lonely today.. Congratulations on your placement.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/20/2023 3:01:00 AM

Awwn loneliness is a state of mind…. Thank u for placing me truly an honor to be placed as a winner

Jan Allison

Date: 10/19/2023 11:08:00 AM

you captured the moment so perfectly, thanks for sharing Ink Empress:-) hugs jan

Ink Empress
Date: 10/20/2023 3:02:00 AM

Dear Jan thank you very much for your kind feedback, so grateful for your visit. Im so glad u liked it

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2023 12:36:00 PM

you said SO much in such a short line of poetry. masterful!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/20/2023 3:02:00 AM

Ah thank you sooo much so happy you think so

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/18/2023 8:58:00 AM

Sad one. Maybe it will be filled again with life and love. Thanks for sharing this one and for dropping by. Sara K

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 10:41:00 PM

Awwn thank you dear kind Sara, appreciate you

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/18/2023 2:32:00 AM

Perfect Monoku, with deep meaning. Blessings

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:41:00 AM

Thank you so much

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 10/17/2023 9:59:00 PM

This vividly descriptive poem, evokes the feeling of profound loneliness in few words. This is a fave.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:41:00 AM

Thank you so very much always and for the fave too

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/17/2023 9:50:00 PM

Touching imagery, Ink, I have been through this... hope you feel wonderful soon:)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:42:00 AM

Thank you so much for your well wishes and also for your visit. Appreciate you always

Sam Scott

Date: 10/17/2023 8:24:00 PM

How this speaks of absence! For a short piece it speaks volumes. I use too many words typically, so your restraint here, Ink, is inspiring to me. What is your secret? :))

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:43:00 AM

Hah i was just sitting, looking at the palm tree with an empty hammock and thought to myself, how ironic, palm tree and i silently felt the same! Thank you so much for always encouraging me be it long or short poem.

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/17/2023 3:01:00 PM

What a visual, perfect imagery for loneliness, this is so good, Ink! Love it, a fav. xoxo

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:43:00 AM

Thank you kind anaya i appreciate your fave and support always

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/17/2023 2:28:00 PM

what a lovely Monoku, Ink. The imagery was quite powerful--the silent tree, the empty hammock...You have such a special way with words and imagery that I admire. The ending was powerful; I paused remembering times in my life when I was lonely swinging to the sour perfume of life. Just outstanding. Gotta fav this one. Have a pleasant evening, Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:54:00 AM

Thank you so very much for your fave your kind thoughts and for your encouraging words that left me so happy! So glad this is good in your eyes, coming from you means so much to me

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/17/2023 2:11:00 PM

You captured the thought so perfectly dear Ink, I m utterly impressed by your excellent depiction of a significant subject . Within its meditation, the empty hammock generates heartfelt poetry. You demonstrated mastery of this art form by conveying various sentiments and thoughts in just a few syllables. Empty hammocks represent the intense loneliness that one experiences when alone, and I like the last shift “perfume of life”

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:55:00 AM

Dear Sotto i am so happy to read this comment thank you so very much for your thoughtful and uplifting comment, i am always grateful for your support

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/17/2023 1:13:00 PM

Your "Lonely" told a story in one line. A wonderful write. "Good Luck"... Have a great/fun day writing away...................

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:58:00 AM

thank you so very much for your generous and kind thoughts

Paige Hind

Date: 10/17/2023 12:21:00 PM

You captured the feeling well. I loved this. I don't have one, but I would like a hammock. :) Lovely monoku...

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:58:00 AM

Thank you sweet soul I appreciate you always

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 10/17/2023 12:20:00 PM

Lovely penning IE, so insightful wording too, Gordon

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 6:58:00 AM

Thank you so very much truly

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/17/2023 10:36:00 AM

Dear Inky, the silence and the empty hammock speaks a poignant story! So much said in seventeen syllables. You have really mastered this form like you have mastered every other form that you write! Impressive. Always love your imagery. What a gift you are. Sending you blessings, a hug and best wishes for the contest!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/18/2023 7:02:00 AM

Dear Sam your visits are always soul warming and lifts me up immensely! You have a very encouraging spirit that i truly am grateful to be connected with, readers and poets like you are so very precious! Thank you so much