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Lily Lost

We could barely see a touch of brow And could not view the budding rose Beneath the trellis of a veil Where seeds and sprouts of courage grew Her innocence was pure with gold But silenced by a brutal oath Of ancient code, old oppression kept Young girls like her, are used and spent How did it come to be this way? That stalk, and rape, and make her prey To tear a child, each piece by piece No mercy for what she might have been The tears now dry, where smiles begin Once shuttered tight, to hold and hide Against the dark, against the tide She'll rise up now to face the wind She stands here tall, against the rain Determined now, to rise again To give us hope, there'll be an end Her strength is greater than the sky A child, this lily in the bud Has lost the youth, we can't forget For change that comes at bitter cost Was once a child that we have lost

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 4/23/2014 6:15:00 AM
Fantastic! Congrats on your win.
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Date: 4/21/2014 10:37:00 PM
Congrats Carrie ....Seren
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Date: 4/21/2014 4:45:00 PM
Thank you for entering the contest, Carrie and congratulations on your placement. It was, of course, no surprise to me to find your name on my list of winners. I simply love the last two line summation of your poem. Sadly there is the "brutal oath of ancient code" that we, as a society, have yet to break. I think poems such as these can help start to chip away at this brutality and help all our Lilies bloom brightly. Joe
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Date: 4/21/2014 1:36:00 PM
this is one great poem of our children who've been a victim in our society... they were raped, exploit, abused and robbed from their youth... You perfectly share their story... CongratuLations!!!!
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Date: 8/9/2013 10:12:00 AM
You have nailed the theme so perfectly with this stunning write. Gave me chills... Just brilliant :)
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Date: 8/8/2013 2:34:00 AM
Thank you for this Carrie...I once read that the majority of female prostitutes and porn actresses were sexually abused as children...Congratulations - Tim
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Date: 8/7/2013 6:51:00 PM
Carrie I felt as if every verse could have gone on to be a separate poem? For some reason they are not hanging together? [I just wrote a sonnet which i felt may have come out this way too grrr] You need a unifying element? Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 8/7/2013 6:55:00 PM
maybe repetition? LIne four carrying over into line five ? Line 8 into 9 and the ~ is making it seem more disjoint?
Date: 8/6/2013 7:40:00 AM
Thank you Carrie for this awesome write....congratulations on its honored placement in the contest
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Date: 8/5/2013 9:00:00 PM
Congratulations on a wonderful win, Carrie! Love, Annalise
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Date: 8/5/2013 12:08:00 PM
WOW....Carrie, this is so beautiful....The voice of those abused and raped...you have done them proud. Congrats on your excellent piece. :) I love rhyming pieces, so this really caught my attention.....Determine now to rise again.... :)
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Date: 8/5/2013 9:50:00 AM
Love it- Congratulations!!! ~SKAT~
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Date: 8/5/2013 9:02:00 AM
Carrie, ... Congratulations in Richard's "Girl Rising." contest.... always *LINDA
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Date: 7/30/2013 10:21:00 PM
A well written poem. It reminds me of human trafficking ~Soup Mail~
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Date: 7/27/2013 6:19:00 PM
Impressive! This has winner written all over it.Absolutely beautiful I thought.
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Date: 7/27/2013 6:05:00 AM
Wonderful! This one is a sure winner!
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Date: 7/26/2013 9:42:00 PM
Oh Carrie, this is stunning. Get ready for another win...BG
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Date: 7/26/2013 9:16:00 PM
I think your poem has a great message..good luck..in the contest
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