Lily Lost

We could barely see a touch of brow
And could not view the budding rose
Beneath the trellis of a veil
Where seeds and sprouts of courage grew
                          
Her innocence was pure with gold
But silenced by a brutal oath
Of ancient code, old oppression kept
Young girls like her, are used and spent
                          
How did it come to be this way?
That stalk, and rape, and make her prey
To tear a child, each piece by piece
No mercy for what she might have been
                          
The tears now dry, where smiles begin
Once shuttered tight, to hold and hide
Against the dark, against the tide
She'll rise up now to face the wind
                                                 
She stands here tall, against the rain
Determined now, to rise again
To give us hope, there'll be an end
Her strength is greater than the sky 
                         
A child, this lily in the bud
Has lost the youth, we can't forget
For change that comes at bitter cost
Was once a child that we have lost
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Sirak Avatar
April 23, 2014 at 6:15 AM
Fantastic! Congrats on your win.
Roberts Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 10:37 PM
Congrats Carrie ....Seren
Flach Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 4:45 PM
Thank you for entering the contest, Carrie and congratulations on your placement. It was, of course, no surprise to me to find your name on my list of winners. I simply love the last two line summation of your poem. Sadly there is the "brutal oath of ancient code" that we, as a society, have yet to break. I think poems such as these can help start to chip away at this brutality and help all our Lilies bloom brightly. Joe
Torres Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 1:36 PM
this is one great poem of our children who've been a victim in our society... they were raped, exploit, abused and robbed from their youth... You perfectly share their story... CongratuLations!!!!
Anglesey Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 10:12 AM
You have nailed the theme so perfectly with this stunning write. Gave me chills... Just brilliant :)
Ryerson Avatar
August 8, 2013 at 2:34 AM
Thank you for this Carrie...I once read that the majority of female prostitutes and porn actresses were sexually abused as children...Congratulations - Tim
Guzzi Avatar
August 7, 2013 at 6:51 PM
Carrie I felt as if every verse could have gone on to be a separate poem? For some reason they are not hanging together? [I just wrote a sonnet which i felt may have come out this way too grrr] You need a unifying element? Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Guzzi Avatar
August 7, 2013 at 6:55 PM
maybe repetition? LIne four carrying over into line five ? Line 8 into 9 and the ~ is making it seem more disjoint?
Jones Avatar
August 6, 2013 at 7:40 AM
Thank you Carrie for this awesome write....congratulations on its honored placement in the contest
Haick Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 9:00 PM
Congratulations on a wonderful win, Carrie! Love, Annalise
Manassian Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 12:08 PM
WOW....Carrie, this is so beautiful....The voice of those abused and raped...you have done them proud. Congrats on your excellent piece. :) I love rhyming pieces, so this really caught my attention.....Determine now to rise again.... :)
A  Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 9:50 AM
Love it- Congratulations!!! ~SKAT~
A   Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 9:02 AM
Carrie, ... Congratulations in Richard's "Girl Rising." contest.... always *LINDA
J.T. Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 10:21 PM
A well written poem. It reminds me of human trafficking ~Soup Mail~
Mohammed Avatar
July 27, 2013 at 6:19 PM
Impressive! This has winner written all over it.Absolutely beautiful I thought.
Sirak Avatar
July 27, 2013 at 6:05 AM
Wonderful! This one is a sure winner!
Gorelick Avatar
July 26, 2013 at 9:42 PM
Oh Carrie, this is stunning. Get ready for another win...BG
Jones Avatar
July 26, 2013 at 9:16 PM
I think your poem has a great message..good luck..in the contest
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