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Lilith Poetry Contest

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* Line used from Lord Tennyson's poem "The Lady Of Shallot".
 
 

Lilith

I whisper in Eve’s ear:
“Listen to the serpent.
He’s my friend and he’s wise.”
That way I get my revenge.

I hurried out of Eden
Roam all around
Targeting tender females.
“Stand up for your rights”.

Some understand me.  Some do not.
My daughter Naamah who hates me!  
Andras – Grand Marquis of Hell, discord and rage.
Empusa was a shape-shifting female demon in Greek legends,
Jezebeth was great.  She knew.
So did Herodias and her evil daughter,
Oh, there are so many of them.
Can’t mention them all.  

Until I was confined to a castle,
No doors to get out.
Just a window high up.

I admire myself,
Dark hair, dark eyes, Dark dress.
My lipstick made from
A serpent’s blood, dark red.
I admire myself 
For a moment in eternity
I feel the fire inside me
Until
The mirror cracked from side to side.*
Can you hear a diabolic laughter?
Darn, it’s a fiery furnace around here.


Placed 2nd
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Wraith Avatar
June 14, 2024 at 8:51 AM
Congratulations on your finish Victor. I enjoyed your poem, full of vivid imagery and emotion, an engaging read. Well done
Alex Avatar
June 13, 2024 at 9:34 AM
"Until I was confined to a castle, No doors to get out. Just a window high up." - A beautiful writing. Congratulations!
One Avatar
June 12, 2024 at 12:51 PM
Your poem is full of information about Lilith.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Buhagiar Avatar
June 12, 2024 at 9:33 PM
Thank you very much for my high placement.
Dietrich Avatar
May 26, 2024 at 3:46 PM
So great how you came up with something for this theme. I remain clueless what to write
Andresen Avatar
May 24, 2024 at 6:51 AM
- Excellent writing, Victor - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
George Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 8:07 PM
She's scary and fierce. Lilith gives the uncontrollable storm vibes. Lovely piece.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 7:41 PM
Spectacular piece dear friend! Although I must say, I love Lilith as much as I love pigeons. I hope you are well. Sending virtual hugs your way. xomo
Buhagiar Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 9:13 PM
I have news for you. French cuisine considers pigeon pie a delicacy. Might try it and get rid of their droppings which are dirtying our streets. But I have a tender heart and I hate to wring their necks to kill them :) So our streets remain dirty. Pesky pigeons. xovb
Fernandez-Garcia Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 3:12 PM
My dear Victor, this is captivating. What you've written is so beautiful. Nice story abou Lilith. I wish you best of lucks in the contest, since I know you don't need it as you arw unique. Hugs my dear!
Buehler Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 1:53 PM
Dark and captivating, your words weave a marvelous and spine-tingling tale, with a satisfying ending, Victor. Nicely written.:)
Rodgers Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 9:39 AM
Hello Victor, You have really dug into the depths of darkness with a mesmerizing narrative. The interplay of characters and scenes evokes a sense of intrigue and foreboding. Your words lay bare the complexities of human nature and the allure of temptation. The mirror cracking is a chilling finale, leaving an indelible mark on the mind. It is a haunting masterpiece indeed. - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel
Eslinger Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 5:49 AM
Victor, Wow! I have been studying Dante and Milton for sone yrs now and this 2°24 penned portrait is a fantastuc' brilliant addituon'. A Fav! My love alwAys, sally
Edmonds  Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 3:06 AM
An insightful write on the life of Lilith Victor, an excellent read… Beryl
Roper Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 12:11 AM
Interesting write, I really like.
Greenhough Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 2:28 PM
This circumstance would be frightening. I like it. The portrayal of hell would scare anyone. Thanks for this Poe-like tale.
Anaya Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 9:25 AM
In eternity there lies Lillith alone. "The mirror cracked from side to side" she'll never see her own beauty again. You have shown me who Lillith truly is. Best for a win! xhugsx
DiMino Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 8:44 AM
Evil also destroys the evil doer -- the Devil only relishes in pain and suffering -- has no other goal nor allegiance -- good one, Victor. Great poetry. Young people, full of beans and defiance...be not deceived!
Poet Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 7:17 AM
Victor, your exceptional insights endowed Lilith with the ability to speak. Flawlessly accomplished in capturing the fundamental nature of the contest prompt.
Kendrick Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 5:48 AM
Whoa!! A very dark one. Reads like a good contender for a contest to me. Way to go. Sara K..Your visit to my page was enlightening.
Daniel Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 5:27 AM
This is an excellent take on the theme, Victor:)
Pandit Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 4:16 AM
You gave her a voice through your splendid descriptions, Victor. Perfectly delivered to paint the essence of contest prompt.
Vaso Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 1:58 AM
Loved this poem Victor!
Seeker Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 1:53 AM
Superb take on the contest theme. All the best, Victor
Empress Avatar
May 22, 2024 at 1:50 AM
Dear Victor, this is so intriguing and insightful how youv written this in the perspectives of the lilith! How clever and creativ is this! I really cant get enough of the lines “ My lipstick made from A serpent’s blood, dark red. I admire myself For a moment in eternity” just brilliant! Well done! I loved it! Best wishes for the contest with this powerful poem
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