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Lilith Poetry Contest

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* Line used from Lord Tennyson's poem "The Lady Of Shallot".
 
 
I whisper in Eve’s ear: “Listen to the serpent. He’s my friend and he’s wise.” That way I get my revenge. I hurried out of Eden Roam all around Targeting tender females. “Stand up for your rights”. Some understand me. Some do not. My daughter Naamah who hates me! Andras – Grand Marquis of Hell, discord and rage. Empusa was a shape-shifting female demon in Greek legends, Jezebeth was great. She knew. So did Herodias and her evil daughter, Oh, there are so many of them. Can’t mention them all. Until I was confined to a castle, No doors to get out. Just a window high up. I admire myself, Dark hair, dark eyes, Dark dress. My lipstick made from A serpent’s blood, dark red. I admire myself For a moment in eternity I feel the fire inside me Until The mirror cracked from side to side.* Can you hear a diabolic laughter? Darn, it’s a fiery furnace around here. Placed 2nd

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Date: 6/14/2024 8:51:00 AM
Congratulations on your finish Victor. I enjoyed your poem, full of vivid imagery and emotion, an engaging read. Well done
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Date: 6/13/2024 9:34:00 AM
"Until I was confined to a castle, No doors to get out. Just a window high up." - A beautiful writing. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/12/2024 12:51:00 PM
Your poem is full of information about Lilith.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 6/12/2024 9:33:00 PM
Thank you very much for my high placement.
Date: 5/26/2024 3:46:00 PM
So great how you came up with something for this theme. I remain clueless what to write
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Date: 5/24/2024 6:51:00 AM
- Excellent writing, Victor - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 5/23/2024 8:07:00 PM
She's scary and fierce. Lilith gives the uncontrollable storm vibes. Lovely piece.
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Date: 5/23/2024 7:41:00 PM
Spectacular piece dear friend! Although I must say, I love Lilith as much as I love pigeons. I hope you are well. Sending virtual hugs your way. xomo
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 5/23/2024 9:13:00 PM
I have news for you. French cuisine considers pigeon pie a delicacy. Might try it and get rid of their droppings which are dirtying our streets. But I have a tender heart and I hate to wring their necks to kill them :) So our streets remain dirty. Pesky pigeons. xovb
Date: 5/23/2024 3:12:00 PM
My dear Victor, this is captivating. What you've written is so beautiful. Nice story abou Lilith. I wish you best of lucks in the contest, since I know you don't need it as you arw unique. Hugs my dear!
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Date: 5/23/2024 1:53:00 PM
Dark and captivating, your words weave a marvelous and spine-tingling tale, with a satisfying ending, Victor. Nicely written.:)
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Date: 5/23/2024 9:39:00 AM
Hello Victor, You have really dug into the depths of darkness with a mesmerizing narrative. The interplay of characters and scenes evokes a sense of intrigue and foreboding. Your words lay bare the complexities of human nature and the allure of temptation. The mirror cracking is a chilling finale, leaving an indelible mark on the mind. It is a haunting masterpiece indeed. - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel
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Date: 5/23/2024 5:49:00 AM
Victor, Wow! I have been studying Dante and Milton for sone yrs now and this 2°24 penned portrait is a fantastuc' brilliant addituon'. A Fav! My love alwAys, sally
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Date: 5/23/2024 3:06:00 AM
An insightful write on the life of Lilith Victor, an excellent read… Beryl
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Date: 5/23/2024 12:11:00 AM
Interesting write, I really like.
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Date: 5/22/2024 2:28:00 PM
This circumstance would be frightening. I like it. The portrayal of hell would scare anyone. Thanks for this Poe-like tale.
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Date: 5/22/2024 9:25:00 AM
In eternity there lies Lillith alone. "The mirror cracked from side to side" she'll never see her own beauty again. You have shown me who Lillith truly is. Best for a win! xhugsx
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Date: 5/22/2024 8:44:00 AM
Evil also destroys the evil doer -- the Devil only relishes in pain and suffering -- has no other goal nor allegiance -- good one, Victor. Great poetry. Young people, full of beans and defiance...be not deceived!
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Date: 5/22/2024 7:17:00 AM
Victor, your exceptional insights endowed Lilith with the ability to speak. Flawlessly accomplished in capturing the fundamental nature of the contest prompt.
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Date: 5/22/2024 5:48:00 AM
Whoa!! A very dark one. Reads like a good contender for a contest to me. Way to go. Sara K..Your visit to my page was enlightening.
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Date: 5/22/2024 5:27:00 AM
This is an excellent take on the theme, Victor:)
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Date: 5/22/2024 5:16:00 AM
outstanding write, Victor. Your poem masterfully gave life and voice to Lilith. Putting yourself in her shoes was truly brilliant! Your poem is the best I've seen for the contest (including mine!) Wishing you a splendid and creative day. Sara PS Your muse definitely hasn't deserted you. Thanks for listening to yours :-)
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Date: 5/22/2024 4:16:00 AM
You gave her a voice through your splendid descriptions, Victor. Perfectly delivered to paint the essence of contest prompt.
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Date: 5/22/2024 1:58:00 AM
Loved this poem Victor!
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Date: 5/22/2024 1:53:00 AM
Superb take on the contest theme. All the best, Victor
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Date: 5/22/2024 1:50:00 AM
Dear Victor, this is so intriguing and insightful how youv written this in the perspectives of the lilith! How clever and creativ is this! I really cant get enough of the lines “ My lipstick made from A serpent’s blood, dark red. I admire myself For a moment in eternity” just brilliant! Well done! I loved it! Best wishes for the contest with this powerful poem
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