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Like a Baby's Birth

Writing a poem is like giving birth to a baby. With the copulation of fancy and thought, Comes the moment of conception! It swims into you as a seed, so tiny, so inconspicuous Once pregnancy is confirmed, comes irritation, nausea Lethargy and loss of appetite All the while you begin to realize That a new life, independent of you Has begun growing inside you Then all the care taken to foster the young life You withdraw, take rest and relax in solitude Slowly the fetus moves, the first stirring of life! With fond fingers, as you pat your belly, Your pen pats the paper. The first line comes like the first beating of the heart! Then words….like little harness bells tingling Fall in line, line after line! Drawing nourishment, the embryo grows limb by limb The miniscule of insight, grown after months of waiting, Into a mature body of illumination! A stretch of your dreams! A suffusion of light! After the labor pains of scribbling and scrawling, Writing and rewriting, deleting, adding and editing, With time stretching and contracting, A baby, nay, a poem is born…… August.4.2022 ~Placed Seventh~ Simile Poetry Contest Sponsor- Hilo Poet

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Date: 8/16/2022 3:47:00 PM
Valsa, beautifully penned poem and congratulations on your win in the contest, blessings ~Constance
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Date: 8/16/2022 9:59:00 AM
Wonderful metaphoric write Valsa comparing the birth of a poem to the pregnancy and birth of a baby. Ultimate creativity - so relatable to any woman who has had children. Congratulations on your win my friend. Blessings for all of your poetic "babies" to come.
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Date: 8/15/2022 9:13:00 AM
Poetic work is beautifully compared with a baby's birth. Great narration. Beautiful flow. Figures of speeches are generously used. Congratulations!
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Date: 8/14/2022 2:01:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. A "Creative/Wonderful" write. I have said this for many years. It is so true, writing and giving can be the same. Have a blessed day writing away...............
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Date: 8/13/2022 6:55:00 PM
Who was that famous guy who recently said, "I wish we men could birth babies and feel new life forming inside us." He would enjoy your poem...most exceleent Valsa.
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Date: 8/13/2022 2:30:00 PM
“A stretch of your dreams! A suffusion of light!” Gorgeous writing my friend. Congratulations on this creative beautiful poem being on the premiere contest winning list Valsa. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 8/13/2022 10:45:00 AM
Perfect Valsa. Crafted and expressed so well! "Then words….like little harness bells tingling Fall in line, line after line!" Love it! Congratulations on your win! Linda
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Date: 8/13/2022 9:34:00 AM
Professional craftsmanship, Valsa, breathes true my friend! Thanks for your participation and my compliments on your high placement in my contest, Aloha~William
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Date: 8/13/2022 7:51:00 PM
Thanks a lot dear William ! Feel so happy about my win. Thank you for placing my poem in the winner's list. Also thanks for the lovely comment !
Date: 8/6/2022 3:31:00 PM
Valsa, the analogy you've created is really fantastic since it's so detailed. Your metaphors and diction are excellent.
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Date: 8/5/2022 4:47:00 PM
Nice Simile poem for the contest, Valsa. Good choice for your comparison to writing a poem. I enjoyed your effort. Good luck in the contest! Bill
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Date: 8/6/2022 9:32:00 AM
Thanks a lot dear Bill for your lovely response to my poem and your Best wishes ! Stay blessed, dear friend .....
Date: 8/5/2022 2:25:00 AM
Your metaphors excel. So great comparisons. Hugs.
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Date: 8/5/2022 2:28:00 AM
Thank you so much Victor !
Date: 8/4/2022 6:34:00 PM
Only one question after reading your fine poem, Valsa: How do men give birth to a poem? ... Oh, excuse me! I forgot. The Congress of the U.S. has discussed this question. Many Democrat representatives tell us that men CAN give birth. Pardon my naivete. ~ Keep smiling, gw
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Date: 8/4/2022 10:00:00 PM
Oh.... I didn't think of it ! Howevr you raised the question and you have answered it ! Glad, my job is over....! Thanks a lot Gershon for your witty comment !
Date: 8/4/2022 2:31:00 PM
A wonderful poem, Valsa, Loved it all but the last stanza was the clincher. Beautiful allegory. Bravo "Baby"!
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Date: 8/5/2022 2:21:00 AM
Thanks a lot Terrel ! Glad I got acquainted with your poetry !
Date: 8/4/2022 2:09:00 PM
Valsa, this vividly decriptive comparison is nothing short of a masterpiece! Janice
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Date: 8/5/2022 2:23:00 AM
Wow... feel so delighted by this comment ! Thanks a lot dear friend , Janice!
Date: 8/4/2022 10:00:00 AM
Brilliantly articulated with grace. I agree from first to last line. A FAV for me.
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Date: 8/4/2022 9:58:00 PM
Thank you so much Jez. Glad to see you back after a long period of staying away ! Thanks a lot !I feel honored that you have made this a Fave of yours.
Date: 8/4/2022 6:58:00 AM
A birth of baby--a birth of poem. To a poet both are precious. Well done Vala, apt for the contest theme . Best to you.
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Date: 8/5/2022 2:25:00 AM
Yes, indeed ! Both come to us after much effort ! Yet the joy that comes later is ample reward ! Thanks a lot Vijay !
Date: 8/4/2022 3:25:00 AM
Great use of metaphors Valsa and good luck in the contest. Hope your week is going well Tom
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Date: 8/5/2022 2:26:00 AM
Thanks a lot dear Tom ! Have a great weekend !

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