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December.1. 2023

Let Us Rhyme Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Shadow Hamilton

Marriage becoming a bondage, the couple longed for a riddance. And through a divorce, finally got freed of their alliance. Months passed on without any occurrence. Slowly, into their solitary lives began to creep silence The songs they heard, no more had any cadence. The sunsets, they watched didn't have any brilliance. Deep down, they felt a great annoyance, And longed to seek shelter in each other for deliverance. It was then that they met at a function by coincidence. Though a chance meeting, it turned out to be of great relevance. In a tone of deep regret she told, she was all repentance. Both felt, most of their notions on marriage were sheer nonsense. They, henceforth decided to live together in mutual acceptance, Seek shelter in each other in every turn of life with consonance. That night with the stars peeping and all anxiety kept in abeyance, They embraced each other, consummating their joyous confluence!

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Tonye George

Date: 12/12/2023 6:41:00 AM

What a nice read and message, I hope every marriage find solutions.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/10/2023 8:47:00 AM

Okay, I guess that is one way to go, but I have seen one couple try that and it did not work out for them. Thanks for sharing this contest entry with us and for dropping by my page. This one reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/2/2023 7:11:00 PM

Your poetry was written in a lovely manner, and the message it provides should be reassuring to a large number of people who have misconceptions about what marriage is all about. Your rhyming was of the highest quality conceivable, as was your usual. It's a lot of fun. I wish you good luck in the tournament. Sorry for missing commenting as I had surgery on my hand and you can imagine the rest. Blessings

Bill Baker

Date: 12/2/2023 5:45:00 PM

A FAV for this excellent entry for this contest, Valsa. Your poem was written in perfect form and the message should be reassuring to many that have misconceptions of what marriage is really about. Your rhyming was your normal, which is of the highest quality. Smiles ~ Blessings my dear friend. Bill

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/2/2023 6:58:00 AM

I enjoyed your wonderful write. Good Luck... Looks like we both did this one. Have a great weekend.................

Joe Dimino

Date: 12/2/2023 4:55:00 AM

"Both felt, most of their notions on marriage were sheer nonsense." -- a wonderful poem about love and maturity. And laziness...love requires work. Nothing of great value, something to cherish forever, comes without effort and caring -- spiritual-like sharing.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/1/2023 4:08:00 PM

Wow, an outstanding monorhyme, Valsa. Your words and images were captivating as the couple divorced and then transformed finding being single a meaningless occurrence. Like you said, sometimes our 'notions' about marriage get in the way of a realistic relationship. You've got such an awesome and beautiful poetic voice and talent. I appreciate you and your creativity, hugs, Sara

Silent One

Date: 12/1/2023 11:54:00 AM

Woah these verses flow so well.. those rhymes are excellent.. always nice to see rhymes that are different and other people do not use... well done Valso...these are the best monorhymes I have read for this contest... You tell a great poetic story and I love that last stanza... I hope you win top prize for this one dear...

Jay Narain

Date: 12/1/2023 9:57:00 AM

Nice monorhyme poem. A dose of reality.

Christina Bowring

Date: 12/1/2023 7:10:00 AM

This is such a beautifully written monorhyme dear Valsa with wonderful rhyming and expressed so well. ‘ The sunsets, they watched didn’t have any brilliance’ ‘ and I love the last two lines especially with a happy ending. So enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest. Have a lovely weekend. Hugs and smiles to you xx

Ink Empress

Date: 12/1/2023 1:14:00 AM

What a beautiful story you’ve told in seamless flow dear valsa, this also fits the theme of seek shelter contest. And divorce too, how creative is it. Sometimes we need a break from relationships to realize somethings and differences can be put aside to work on later with patience and understanding. I love the ending, its always good to read such endings. And I absolutely love your choice of rhymes they are brilliant, you can write on any theme and still leave your readers in awe. Best wishes

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/1/2023 12:51:00 AM

Oh my, this definitely gets tugged on one's heartstrings! The way so flawlessly you've described about how differences lead to a split in their blissful lives & after divorce, they dwelled through colourless horizons, seeking warmth & love.. Only to realise that a newer perspective & understanding lead both of them back to each other & this time, never to fade away! What an intriguing theme which describes how love ultimately finds its way in the end! Wow, dear Valsa, your words are soulful!