Leaving

Helpless rocks rest on yesterday' s dreams hand crocheted articles of affection pile by my side where sole remembrance lies in wait of one more visitor to limp my way Chills carry with her the ache of night frost fills the horizon as sunshine falls yellow and blue fields barely hold life and memories of friends and fantasy I'll be leaving soon when the night calls a final guest surrendering to the cold the old breaking off bread with fragility words echo aimlessly a slow wind dies

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Paul Callus

Date: 8/31/2017 12:31:00 PM

Touched by the sadness that oozes out of these lines, Tim. The reader is drawn into your melancholic mood. // paul

Niall Fulham

Date: 8/27/2017 4:46:00 PM

Hi Tim , sad emotional write , your flow is so beautiful my friend ::)))

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/27/2017 9:55:00 AM

- Excellent, a poem touching feelings, Tim - Best wishes for a lovely Sunday - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 8/26/2017 4:08:00 PM

This poem of yours flows smoothly in my lung and beings the vivid imagery that pervades it to my sight. Lovely write my friend.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/26/2017 2:59:00 PM

leaves a lump in my throat , tim... quite wrenching though scribed in a sentimental, heartfelt way... huggs

Darren White

Date: 8/26/2017 8:21:00 AM

I love that last line my friend. Mo much melancholy.

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 8/25/2017 5:55:00 PM

This pressed against my heart! Dear Tim, say it's fiction, please!! Darkly lovely.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/25/2017 5:36:00 PM

So much imagery to impart this melancholy feeling, Tim. Very lovely.

Dean Wood

Date: 8/25/2017 5:05:00 PM

Tim, I seldom know exactly what your writing means but this carries the feeling of visitors paying their respects. A wake perhaps?

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/25/2017 4:44:00 PM

Oh...very sad. Don't leave this place though. You capture feelings and images come to life with your words.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/25/2017 12:14:00 PM

So smooth--deep in thought!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/25/2017 11:31:00 AM

Beautiful, I know is one word, but is true, and that first line, happens to be my front yard at the moment! :)

Lorna Caizley

Date: 8/25/2017 10:56:00 AM

Hi Tim this is really well written. The past is such a difficult thing to let go of Lorna X