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Kelpie

Oh kelpie with your dripping mane seducing valiant men of heart, who by your spell would all be swain and every sense in them, depart. Why weep you by the loch and tide? What brought you from your kelpie depth? Sure no desire is kept aside from your cold, illusory breath. No longer do you haunt the bank, but mourn a clever witch of wile from whose enchanted cup you drank, now captive to her charm and guile. She'll bid you work a hundred years in slavery chains for nigh 'til kelpie legend disappears for proper penance, hue and cry. *In Scottish folklore, a kelpie is a malevolent water spirit in the form of a horse. Kelpies were believed to inhabit lochs and rivers, and to lure men to their watery graves by transforming into beautiful women, once drowned the kelpie would then eat the victim. The kelpie of this poem was the victim of a love enchantment, eagerly agreeing to a lovesick life of slavery for penance of past misdeeds. Ha, whoever heard of a repentant, lovesick kelpie?

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Date: 2/26/2020 3:11:00 AM
Heard of Kelpies, but; I have never heard of a lovesick one, I enjoyed this version of one, Thvia, . . . : )
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Date: 9/16/2017 3:06:00 PM
Loved this, Thvia. I often wonder if the Kelpie myth sprung from the Nessie sightings; that is of course if you believe in the legend of the giant "Water horse"! Really did enjoy this one, Thvia...please keep on writing. Cheers! :) john P.s Anyone who laughs at the possibility of a strange "denizen of the deeps" inhabiting Loch Ness just needs to quietly stand one early, misty morning overlooking the shoreline across from the towering slopes...and they will rapidly change their minds! :)
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Date: 9/11/2017 6:48:00 PM
A very intriguing topic to choose for a poem. Well written piece.
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Thvia Shetley
Date: 9/11/2017 6:52:00 PM
Thank you Patricia, I appreciate you taking the time to say so x
Date: 10/20/2010 8:48:00 AM
Congratulations Thvia on your win in Nikko Palmario's contest "Yah for "K"!". Love, Carol
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PATRICIA CRESSWELL
Date: 9/11/2017 6:47:00 PM
Date: 10/20/2010 8:07:00 AM
Thvia, I had never heard of a Kelpie, but I may want to find a loch if they transform into beautiful women...lol. Great write on an interestingly obscure topic. Congrats on your win. Dan C
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Date: 10/20/2010 6:28:00 AM
The infamous Kelpie Thvia. Wonderful poem on the subject if I may say so. Many congratulations on your win in Nikko's contest >> James
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Date: 10/20/2010 3:28:00 AM
A unique entry Thvia, congratulations on your win :) Wilma
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Date: 10/19/2010 8:03:00 PM
I like how you made it sound like a classic poem too in your description of the kelpie. Yes, I had heard of this creature a little bit before. Congrats on your fine win. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 10/19/2010 12:29:00 PM
Very unique and interesting poem Thvia..congrats on your placement in Nikko's contest! take care~Deb
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Date: 10/19/2010 10:47:00 AM
congrats on your win in the contest with this wonderful poem
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Date: 10/19/2010 10:31:00 AM
Really a great new subject to me. Congratulations on your win. Love, joyce
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Date: 10/19/2010 9:36:00 AM
"Congratulations Thvia on a poem well worthy of it's place in the top ten." Agape, Moses
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Date: 10/19/2010 7:53:00 AM
This was one of the best entries for the contest, Thvia. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/19/2010 7:09:00 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest, Thvia
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Date: 10/19/2010 7:09:00 AM
Hi Thvia! This was the first time that I even heard of the kelpie and I totally enjoyed it! ^_^ Such an interesting turn of events for that kelpie indeed! This was an informative yet also very entertaining read for me-- super congrats on your win :) Really love how you used Scottish folklore in your entry :) hugs, nikko :)
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Date: 10/19/2010 6:57:00 AM
I had heard of the kelpie..but hadnt thought of it for a long time. Enjoyed! congratson your win. BG
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Date: 10/19/2010 6:00:00 AM
Congrats Thvia on your big win in Nikko's K contest with this elegant write and outstanding piece luv.. hope u are enjoying a happy time with special one ... looking forward to your return ..as u enjoy a sweet victory with luv.. my friend...
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Date: 10/7/2010 7:19:00 PM
Great story well told. Loved it! Wayne
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Date: 10/7/2010 3:10:00 PM
Nice mythological poem here. New one on me! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Date: 10/7/2010 11:06:00 AM
It was a pleasure to read your poetry today Thvia. May your days always be filled with good health, love beyond expectation, and an overload of inspiration. The best to you in the contest should you enter it. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/7/2010 8:43:00 AM
LUV the poem and footnote..Thvia.. a great and interesting explanation of the subject of your poem.. sparks much interest to learn of other cultures and their lore...luv..
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Date: 10/7/2010 7:26:00 AM
awesome write, love it
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Date: 10/7/2010 2:01:00 AM
Smile ~ And sometimes they make me laugh with all of their amissful barkings as if someone were to find fear in their silliness?! Makes myself consider a little poochie barking so much that it starts to scare itself, kind of like seeing its own shadow upon the wall ~ Smile ~ Also, I love nerds dear & I have always thought that glasses were sexy? Probably because I wish that I would have been a nerd & saved myself & others a bag of from long ago...."Great Poem, 'Love Always,'" John!:) ~
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Date: 10/7/2010 1:53:00 AM
Smile ~ I do love gifted poets & their wonderful verses spoken from their creativities, hearts & souls covering many different emotions & so forth dear & also, from reading some poes this late night I see that the Halloween spirit is somewhat abounding once more & perhaps I should join such moments of expressive abandonment for the sake of the holidays reveries ~ Smile ~ I can spin a tale or two & I have always been quite intrigued with funny goblins & ghouls ~ ....Cont:)
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Date: 10/7/2010 1:46:00 AM
Smile ~ "Sweet!" ~ "Hello 'Dear Lovely & Gifted Thvia Shetley!" ~ What a wonderfully creative & fun poem dear lady & I see a lot of potential fascination to be found within "Your Beauties" poetic brushings I do believe...."Thank You" for "Your Treasures" kind coms as of late &, I am truly sorry that I have failed to return such kindness before now but, I am hoping that this shall somehow change soon for ~ ....Cont:)
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