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Bittersweet Jose cuts the canes one at a time cursed by poverty's grind What else does he want since he works on sweetness all around him and toils in fragrant nature perfumed by his sweat as he swings the blade of global consumption in which his desires and passion melt in the scorching mellifluous sun His focus is on sugar which whips his broken hands and soul Joseph strokes his flatulent belly robustly breaks wind and swings the bottle of fermented sugar one more 'Cuba Libre' before he is free from too much reflection of what goes on in his stupor his aims and purpose in life swirl in the sediment of the night Joseph’s focus is on how to move his obese corpse into bed yet again He cuts the chase from the flask and curses the price of the rum ‘Where the hell is Cuba’ is his one lucid thought before he succumbs to his slumber and maybe life would be easier if he licked Jose’s wounds straight from the levelling cane Until then his impotent life falters and 'surely' a bit of sugar will do him no harm 15th February 2017

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Date: 9/18/2017 2:20:00 PM
Masterclass here Kai. Totally worthy of that golden cup. I thought its time to check you out and lookee here. Im going to check out your other cupped poem now.
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Date: 4/2/2017 5:24:00 AM
A fine piece, with great imagery. Congratulations on a well-deserved win!
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 4/2/2017 7:16:00 AM
Thank you John. Kai
Date: 3/16/2017 10:30:00 AM
Sorry...also, congratulations on your well deserved win.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 4/2/2017 7:15:00 AM
Thank you so much for that. I appreciate it, Kai
Date: 3/16/2017 10:29:00 AM
I love your focus. The rejection of a social paradigm that has failed for hundreds of years. This is a great and important write. A Fav. Lots Of Love armand.
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Date: 3/9/2017 7:21:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Kai. I like how you gave the sugar theme this raw and profound spin.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 4/2/2017 7:14:00 AM
Thank you Agnes, Kai
Date: 3/7/2017 9:06:00 PM
This is superb, Kai. I can see why it has won. What goes on in the world...with the have and the have nots boggles the mind. Yet, you so versed this so well.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 3/11/2017 1:03:00 AM
Thank you Eileen. It always was a crazy world. And in many ways it is getting worse. May versing it change it a tiny little bit. Wishes, Kai
Date: 3/6/2017 11:03:00 AM
This is wonderful. you have once again produced another masterpiece which is a true testament of your reputation in this wonderful community. Thanks a lot for the share.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 3/11/2017 1:04:00 AM
Thank you Funon for that amazing and kind comment. "Sharing is caring". Many wishes and have a wonderful day, Kai
Date: 3/1/2017 4:51:00 AM
Kai, so well deserved trophy, I am happy for you :) And so happy also to see how a controversy is being rewarded.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 3/11/2017 1:00:00 AM
Thank you Darren."Sometimes controversies win". Let us hope. Many wishes, Kai
Date: 2/28/2017 5:56:00 PM
wow, Kai. I see how you got a trophy on this one. You really see into the eyes of humanity with your poetry. If you have Trump fatigue, just wait till tonight when he trumpets his stupidity on tv.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 3/10/2017 1:47:00 AM
Thank you Andrea. I watched Trump again and totally agree with you. Dumb and dumber. Sitting at the other side of the world, I do not know any longer, whether Zuma trumps Trump or not. But at least our idiot does not have world power and influence. Many wishes and hope though, Kai
Date: 2/27/2017 9:14:00 AM
Though changes impact more than the economy; the rising cost of living hits mankind hard between the eyes. Nicely woven with the two characterizations which you composed so well. Congratulations are in order.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 2/28/2017 1:34:00 AM
Thank you very much Reason A. Poteet. I appreciate that very much. Kai
Date: 2/27/2017 5:48:00 AM
I'm glad to see this one on top, well deserved:) congratulations, Kai:)
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 2/28/2017 1:35:00 AM
Thank you so very much Jo. Kai
Date: 2/26/2017 4:00:00 PM
Nicely done, Kai - great write and deserving win!
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 2/27/2017 1:22:00 AM
Thank you Greg, I appreciate this. Have a sweet day. Kai
Date: 2/26/2017 12:21:00 PM
A profound write Kai.
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 2/27/2017 1:23:00 AM
Thank you James. Be sweet, Kai
Date: 2/24/2017 4:45:00 AM
Two strata of society portrayed beautifully, Michael:) a 7:) P.s. If for the contest, you would have to change the title, as the contest requires your own title:)
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 2/24/2017 10:24:00 AM
Thank you Jo, for reading, liking and pointing out the title issue. I changed it to Bittersweet. Many wishes, Kai
Date: 2/17/2017 10:48:00 PM
Cool layout and interesting take on the contest theme...very creative with the two different viewpoints! Good luck in the contest...hugs, Rhonda
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Kai Michael Neumann
Date: 2/18/2017 12:48:00 AM
Thank you Rhoda. I am having coffee. With sweetener. Many wishes, Kai

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