Premiere Contest WinnerBittersweet

Bittersweet 
	
Jose cuts the canes one at a time cursed by poverty's grind

What else does he want since he works on sweetness all
       around him and toils in fragrant nature perfumed by his
           sweat as he swings the blade of global consumption in which
                his desires and passion melt in the scorching mellifluous sun
                   
His focus is on sugar which whips his broken hands and soul


Joseph strokes his flatulent belly robustly breaks wind and swings
       the bottle of fermented sugar one more 'Cuba Libre' before
           he is free from too much reflection of what goes on in his stupor
               his aims and purpose in life swirl in the sediment of the night
                  Joseph’s focus is on how to move his obese corpse into bed yet again

He cuts the chase from the flask and curses the price of the rum

          
‘Where the hell is Cuba’ is his one lucid thought before he 
       succumbs  to his slumber and maybe life would be easier 
          if he licked Jose’s wounds straight from the levelling cane


Until then his impotent life falters and 'surely' a bit of sugar will do him no harm

15th February 2017
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Breedt Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 2:20 PM
Masterclass here Kai. Totally worthy of that golden cup. I thought its time to check you out and lookee here. Im going to check out your other cupped poem now.
Michaels Avatar
April 2, 2017 at 5:24 AM
A fine piece, with great imagery. Congratulations on a well-deserved win!
Neumann Avatar
April 2, 2017 at 7:16 AM
Thank you John. Kai
Yvonne Avatar
March 16, 2017 at 10:30 AM
Sorry...also, congratulations on your well deserved win.
Neumann Avatar
April 2, 2017 at 7:15 AM
Thank you so much for that. I appreciate it, Kai
Yvonne Avatar
March 16, 2017 at 10:29 AM
I love your focus. The rejection of a social paradigm that has failed for hundreds of years. This is a great and important write. A Fav. Lots Of Love armand.
Krampe Avatar
March 9, 2017 at 7:21 AM
Congrats on your win, Kai. I like how you gave the sugar theme this raw and profound spin.
Neumann Avatar
April 2, 2017 at 7:14 AM
Thank you Agnes, Kai
Manassian Avatar
March 7, 2017 at 9:06 PM
This is superb, Kai. I can see why it has won. What goes on in the world...with the have and the have nots boggles the mind. Yet, you so versed this so well.
Neumann Avatar
March 11, 2017 at 1:03 AM
Thank you Eileen. It always was a crazy world. And in many ways it is getting worse. May versing it change it a tiny little bit. Wishes, Kai
Makama Avatar
March 6, 2017 at 11:03 AM
This is wonderful. you have once again produced another masterpiece which is a true testament of your reputation in this wonderful community. Thanks a lot for the share.
Neumann Avatar
March 11, 2017 at 1:04 AM
Thank you Funon for that amazing and kind comment. "Sharing is caring". Many wishes and have a wonderful day, Kai
White Avatar
March 1, 2017 at 4:51 AM
Kai, so well deserved trophy, I am happy for you :) And so happy also to see how a controversy is being rewarded.
Neumann Avatar
March 11, 2017 at 1:00 AM
Thank you Darren."Sometimes controversies win". Let us hope. Many wishes, Kai
Dietrich Avatar
February 28, 2017 at 5:56 PM
wow, Kai. I see how you got a trophy on this one. You really see into the eyes of humanity with your poetry. If you have Trump fatigue, just wait till tonight when he trumpets his stupidity on tv.
Neumann Avatar
March 10, 2017 at 1:47 AM
Thank you Andrea. I watched Trump again and totally agree with you. Dumb and dumber. Sitting at the other side of the world, I do not know any longer, whether Zuma trumps Trump or not. But at least our idiot does not have world power and influence. Many wishes and hope though, Kai
Poteet Avatar
February 27, 2017 at 9:14 AM
Though changes impact more than the economy; the rising cost of living hits mankind hard between the eyes. Nicely woven with the two characterizations which you composed so well. Congratulations are in order.
Neumann Avatar
February 28, 2017 at 1:34 AM
Thank you very much Reason A. Poteet. I appreciate that very much. Kai
Daniel Avatar
February 27, 2017 at 5:48 AM
I'm glad to see this one on top, well deserved:) congratulations, Kai:)
Neumann Avatar
February 28, 2017 at 1:35 AM
Thank you so very much Jo. Kai
Barden Avatar
February 26, 2017 at 4:00 PM
Nicely done, Kai - great write and deserving win!
Neumann Avatar
February 27, 2017 at 1:22 AM
Thank you Greg, I appreciate this. Have a sweet day. Kai
Inman Avatar
February 26, 2017 at 12:21 PM
A profound write Kai.
Neumann Avatar
February 27, 2017 at 1:23 AM
Thank you James. Be sweet, Kai
Daniel Avatar
February 24, 2017 at 4:45 AM
Two strata of society portrayed beautifully, Michael:) a 7:) P.s. If for the contest, you would have to change the title, as the contest requires your own title:)
Neumann Avatar
February 24, 2017 at 10:24 AM
Thank you Jo, for reading, liking and pointing out the title issue. I changed it to Bittersweet. Many wishes, Kai
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
February 17, 2017 at 10:48 PM
Cool layout and interesting take on the contest theme...very creative with the two different viewpoints! Good luck in the contest...hugs, Rhonda
Neumann Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 12:48 AM
Thank you Rhoda. I am having coffee. With sweetener. Many wishes, Kai
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