Carolyn Devonshire Poet Free verse

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Into the Weeds

Young girls’ bright eyes widened
Behold our wild wheat field
Playground for imaginative innocents

Gracefully swaying amber stalks
Feathered with grain centers
Ostrich plumes reaching for azure sky

Such was the ideal venue
For hide-and-go-seek
Catch of a summer’s day

Plans dashed through my mind
When I grow up, I want to live here
Right here in this sun-kissed field

Thatched weeds can be my roof
Rain will not seep through
As I play host to God’s creatures

I’d want for naught
Grain could sustain me
While windswept shadows dispelled heat

Two decades passed swiftly
Before my eager return
To revisit youth's field of memories

Stinging sadness overcame me
As I stared at an empty mall
That had replaced our weeds

But I will always remember
Gracefully swaying, bowing stalks
With grain centers that shot up like ostrich plumes

Casting shadows on little girls’ faces
And lives

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Carol Sunshine Brown February 25, 2012 at 7:03 AM Congratulations on your win in P.D's "Free Verse~Poem" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol"

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 24, 2012 at 8:54 PM congrats Carolyn on a wonderful write and win.. amazing lines of intensity luv..

Robert Pettit February 15, 2011 at 7:40 PM What a sweet write this is! This I like very much.

Daniel Cwiak July 9, 2010 at 10:25 PM What a beautiful memory for you! This is truly my type of nostalgic write. I can see the wheatfields now, swaying with that gentle breeze. Keep it up!! Dan C

Tim Ryerson July 9, 2010 at 4:39 PM 'What is there about a bulldozer that doesn't like a meadow'...Mercy me, Carolyn...great lines! All those wonderful places from my childhood are gone now too, but isn't it amazing how vivid these images remain in our minds? - Tim

Nicole Hardwick July 9, 2010 at 2:37 PM What a lovely peom. Your words have brought back to life that meadow to live for ever now.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen July 9, 2010 at 7:06 AM This is beautiful as always, Carolyn. Your poetic skills are unsurpassed. By the way, I am going to try to start commenting again. I have just been too weepy these past three months (on and off)…commenting became difficult. (No more excuses) I do enjoy reading your wonderful poetry and I appreciate your strengths. Thanks for understanding. God be with you and keep up the excellent writing. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Joe Flach July 8, 2010 at 6:53 AM Carolyn, I absolutely LOVED this poem. Very creative. Very descriptive. A joy to read. My contest had many wonderful entries, but this poem clearly stood out above the rest. Thank you so much for entering it and giving me the honor to enjoy your talent. Joe

Carol Sunshine Brown July 8, 2010 at 6:52 AM Congratulations Carolyn on your win in Joe Flach's contest "A Poem That Doesn't Rhyme". Love, Carol

Canny Amah July 7, 2010 at 5:45 PM ... simply, a well-deserved win ... Caro-lyn, congras!!! Canny

Virginia Mitchell July 7, 2010 at 4:15 PM I had a special place like that, when I was a kid. Thank you for making me recall a pleasant time: )....Congratulations on your win!

John Freeman July 7, 2010 at 1:04 PM A big congratulations on your ace, Carolyn. Way to go. An excellent presentation. Agape, Moses

Adeleke Adeite July 7, 2010 at 11:43 AM Congrats on your well deserved win in Joe’s contest. your write was great! May you have many more wins as you keep your passionate pen alive… Please keep writing great poems, and enjoy this honor. Love, Adeleke

Sharon Tideswell July 7, 2010 at 11:14 AM Carolyn, super congratulations on your first place win. Very well deserved ~ Sharon :)

Audrey Haick July 7, 2010 at 11:12 AM My warmest congratulations, Carolyn! This Ist Place Win is not only terrific but worthy of Ist Place! Goes to my list of favs. today! Love it. Love you! Audrey

Carrie Richards July 7, 2010 at 11:11 AM A beautiful poem, Carolyn. So funny that you and I had similar themes....different, yet much the same feelings of losing a part of our childhood where our memories still linger on. Congratulations on your 1st place! Love, Carrie

Andrea Dietrich July 7, 2010 at 10:22 AM I really loved this when I first read it, and I see how it got first place. Congratulations, Carolyn! LUv, Andrea

Francine Roberts July 7, 2010 at 9:07 AM wonderful, loved it, Congrats on your win, from one moon child to another

Joyce Johnson July 7, 2010 at 8:30 AM Congratulations Carolyn on the wonderful, nostalgic poem. It doesn't need rhyme to entrance. Great choice. Love, Joyce

Lynette Chachere July 6, 2010 at 6:01 AM i sure wish i had a childhood as great as yours. there are so many things you can create as a child with your imagination and dreams, even now if you keep it with you. ~Always&Forever Lynette

Earle Brown July 4, 2010 at 9:32 PM This is an intriguing read. Nice piece penned!

Grace Eunsong Lee July 4, 2010 at 4:41 PM Great poem, Catherine! I love how there's a stillness to the poem, yet with all the emotions coming through. Thanks for stopping by to comment on my poems :) -Grace

James Fraser July 4, 2010 at 2:54 PM I can tell you really enjoyed Miss Anna's kitchen as you grew up. Best of luck in Joe's contest >> James

James Peranteau July 4, 2010 at 1:50 PM What a fantastic write my dear friend ! Long lost are our pretty dreams...then along comes the competent poet, dreamer of all dreams ! TY dear Carolyn for your lovely insight and, prolonging memories some of us let slip ! *smiles* Have a great 4th ! james

Audrey Haick July 4, 2010 at 12:50 PM Oh, I love this, dear Carolyn! Awesome imagery, and a joy to read. Isn't it a blessing to remember those special moments in our past that have been erased by modern day machines? Beautiful! Goes to my favs. today! God bless and a Happy July 4th to you! Much love to you, always, my real friend, Audrey

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