In Rhymes Sublime

In rhymes sublime I dream that I’m in summer time,
recalling green and the lake pristine where we would go.
To find the lake, a trail we’d take and then we’d climb!
With no worry, in no hurry – we took it slow.

Chipmunks we’d see; we’d laugh with glee as they would flee.
How they would scurry – cute and furry – from our sight.
Wildflowers too were plucked by you – to give to me.
A queen was I and you - my guy - a shining knight!

Just us, the trees and feeling ease in summer’s breeze!
One sweet July with clear blue sky I think of still.
Oh, what you’d planned! Ring on my hand. You asked me please
to be your wife for all our life. I said, “I WILL!”

Wind was blowing; I was glowing with the knowing
that we two would say “I do” at summer’s end.
Our lake we found (no one around!) With joy showing,
you gave a grin; I jumped in with my true-love friend!

Nov. 11, 2020 for Joseph May's In Rhymes Sublime Poetry Contest
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Goldsmith Avatar
November 22, 2020 at 8:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I am in your wonderful story/write. Chipmunks are running everywhere. Love this fun and playful day. Enjoy your win................
Watt Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 3:53 PM
This was really well written, Andrea, and I'm happy to see it earn you a first place win. Congrats!
Kendrick Avatar
November 20, 2020 at 7:55 AM
Congrats on your top win with this fine rhymer. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
Proxenos Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 10:29 AM
Oh Wow congratulations my friend a top win - so well penned and so cute! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Kauffman Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 9:27 AM
Simply sublime rhyme Andrea! Congratulations on your win! Time for a swim?
Fowler Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 7:53 AM
Very sweet and romantic Andrea. Congratulations on the win! Linda
May Avatar
November 19, 2020 at 5:57 AM
Love this romantic write Adrea..Congrats on your win..
Faulkner Avatar
November 17, 2020 at 8:31 PM
Hi Andrea, you tell this with such class and cleverness, I really like the 'scurry/furry' chipmunks, I'm sure that July afternoon is a warm, beautiful memory, best wishes for the contest.
Downing  Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 7:04 PM
WOW!! You’re the second person I’ve read their rhyme contest poems, both are beautifully written. And the story behind yours is enchanting. Great poem, Andrea :)
Brul Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 6:47 PM
Your rhymes are sublime, too dear Andrea..How could I resist this not to FAVE? Very much alluring!!!!
Watt Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 5:01 PM
Andrea, asking you to rhyme is like asking a dolphin to swim. You make it appear so easy, but we all know it isn't. Like Freddie says, you are a master poetess of your craft. The tale you weave is so heartwarming, that of falling in love and marrying your true-love. A real delight to read, and a fave for me to enjoy in the future ~ John
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November 13, 2020 at 11:38 AM
Beautiful poem, Andrea! Such intricate weaving of rhyme. It seems simple, yet it is a very hard thing to poetically do. But, you are a master poetess of your craft, as evidenced by your superb handiwork. As for this lovely poem, I'm sure it brings you such fond memories. Love and more love always.
Theraven Avatar
November 12, 2020 at 8:17 PM
Andrea, 'Wind was blowing; I was glowing with the knowing that we two would say “I do” at summer’s end.' A sublime feeling felt here in your summer's swelter in Rhyme. -Richard
Dome Avatar
November 12, 2020 at 3:13 PM
love thee kind of writes. Very well done. great images. hope you are ok. stay safe.
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November 12, 2020 at 3:40 AM
This is simply fabulous, Andrea!! Gentle words; great imagery; perfect rhyming; and sooo smooth flow. I adore this poem "from its head to toe".
Gregory Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 6:12 PM
this is a piece with the flow thats reminiscence of many beautiful moment spent in love's idyllic glow. I truly apreici-love reading it. nicely done
Flood Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 4:32 PM
Andrea, I don’t do, ‘Nah, just something in my eye’ but damn it, there’s something in my eye. Lovely poem, lovely sentiment, good luck in contest. Terry
Y. Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 10:50 AM
WoW! Andrea, You penned an outstanding entry for the contest theme. Stellar content , rhymes and imagery. I found it to be romantic as well. It looks a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest:-) Alexis
La France Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 9:48 AM
Andrea, this is truly a wonderful poem, the rhyming is beautiful and I am sure this is a winner _Constance
Ashley Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 9:29 AM
Andrea, your poem in rhyme is simply sublime! The emotional artistry and imagery of your golden pen knows no bounds. I love the triple rhymes in the first lines of each stanza. Poetic excellence! Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan
Mcintosh Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 8:33 AM
Love this!! A true inspiration found you. God bless you dear Andrea!! You're a amazing artist :)
One Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 8:25 AM
Nice internal rhymes, really like this one: Wind was blowing; I was glowing with the knowing...
Macfarlane Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 7:52 AM
Sublime indeed!!! Amazing rhymes that tell a wonderful story. Beautifully written. Hugs
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