Valsa George Poet Rhyme

If I Were Immortal

 One may think what a boon it is to be immortal
Defeating death may at first seem the greatest victory
When ill health plagues, striving for a cure, seems pivotal
No doubt, longevity of life in many eyes is savoury

When time no more becomes a severe constraint,
What all wonderful things one can do and plan
With colors many, the canvas of the sky, he can paint
What all chances will unfold within his limitless time span

Through the years, one can garner knowledge and wisdom
Read books at will and focus on anything one likes to do
Needn’t hurry, linger on in places one wishes to be with freedom
Before him unfolds endless chances and pleasures to woo

The immortal will be much ahead of others in thoughts and deeds
But even among dear ones and neighbors, won’t he feel isolated? 
Can anyone understand what he really needs? 
There could be chances of him, being seen as antiquated 
 
How painful, it is to watch dear ones falling dead one by one
Won’t he feel crest fallen when he can’t mix with men of his age? 
An endless life on this strife ridden world, most of us would shun
I am sure one who is immortal may feel perpetually shut in a cage 

Time without halting, drags him on and on to eternity
Months and years will hang on him like crushing weight 
Sure he will be treated like an existential absurdity
How miserable life would be for one without an expiry date

In the eternal flux of life, I don’t want to be ever on the move
Being pushed in and out of time will be a terrible bore.
It would be like a rolling stone knocked off by every passing wave
Death may scare me, but immortality scares me even more!

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April.24.2022
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Silpika Kalita April 25, 2022 at 12:57 AM A spot on composition dear Valsa. Best wishes

Victor Buhagiar April 24, 2022 at 11:11 PM Your last line is perfect. It reminds me of the Wandering Jew saga. Very well written, dear Valsa Best for a win. Blessings

Gershon Wolf April 24, 2022 at 3:16 PM Just love the way you found your way to the conclusion, Valsa! Great write! :) Gershon

Andrea Dietrich April 24, 2022 at 11:54 AM Wow you knocked this one out of the park. One of the best I've seen on this theme

Rico Leffanta April 24, 2022 at 11:29 AM As Methuselah surely discovered, a lifetime spent experiencing the rise and fall of Hitler, Idi Amin, Putin et al, would surely extol an expiration date! Well thought and done, Valsa! Aloha!

Sotto Poet April 24, 2022 at 10:48 AM How miserable life would be for one without an expiry date? Death may scare me, but immortality scares me even more! Valsa, you've brought up some fantastic ideas about why everlasting might not be all that enjoyable! And you've done a fantastic job of artistically explaining those reasonable notions. My friend, you've written a fantastic piece.

Malabika Ray Choudhury April 24, 2022 at 6:29 AM "It would be like a rolling stone knocked off by every passing wave Death may scare me, but immortality scares me even more!" - incredible lines, Dear Valsa. You have raised excellent points why immortality may not be really fun! And you have brilliantly explained those logical thoughts poetically in rhymes - how impressive! Dear Friend, you always amaze me! Love and blessings ~ Mala

Vijay Pandit April 24, 2022 at 5:57 AM Death may scare me, but immortality scares me even more! ----So well said--the essence! No one wants to wander forever exploring the unknown. Excellent depiction, as always, Valsa. You deserve a TOP win my friend.

Edward Ibeh April 24, 2022 at 5:37 AM Wow, we really do think alike, Valsa:-) I love life but I don't want to live forever! Heck no, lol. I couldn't agree more about immortality. It's super scary and lonely! Spectacular write, my friend. Congratulations in advance!

Harry Horsman April 24, 2022 at 2:32 AM LOve how you have created this wonderful poetry, so many aspect you bring up. Yes God knew when he created the human race, we needed a sell-by date. Or should i say ('A Die-By date'). Valsa George April 24, 2022 at 4:28 AM If you feel this is good poetry I am so happy and am encouraged .Thank you dear veteran poet!

Anil Deo April 24, 2022 at 1:28 AM I agree with Poet Tom, great questions in rhyme. amen and shalom, shalom dear Sis in Jesus Valsa George April 24, 2022 at 4:27 AM Thanks a lot Anil brother .... ! Peace and Love !

Tom Cunningham April 23, 2022 at 11:07 PM You raise some interesting points Valsa, we'd have no sense of urgency to get anything done and a life of immortality would become boring. Tom Valsa George April 24, 2022 at 4:26 AM Definitely Tom ! We may not be able to do everything in a short life time ! But immortality will lead to procrastination and living for ever in this world will be terrible ! Thank you so much !