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I See You Says the Moon Premiere Contest Winner

They'll have you believe she was lost to the sea, But the moon would beg to differ. She was always lost, Always looking for which way to go. Or was that always looking for where she came from? The moon couldn't really tell coming from going; To a celestial body both look pretty much the same. She wanted to be found asserts the moon. Or was that to be seen? She had confided at every turn, Every phase, I see you, Do you see me? I am but a sliver today, how about you? A crescent, that's exactly how I'm feeling too! I see you, Do you see me? No, not this moonless night; I don't see myself either. I see you, Do you see me? I see you. I know you see me too. You are the full that fills me. She was not lost to the sea insists the moon. It was not the sea that swallowed her But my reflection. 18.01.03 Composed for Gregory R Barden's Water and Sky

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Date: 11/29/2022 9:38:00 PM
WOW just plain wow! Amazing love it
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 11/30/2022 6:25:00 PM
Thank you! I have to credit the contest sponsor for pulling this one out of me. I love it too :) xomo
Date: 2/23/2022 6:42:00 AM
Blessed be for contests, Mo, you pulled a right cracker out of the box with this one, love it . . . ; )
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/25/2022 7:33:00 AM
Truth! It would not have been otherwise. Hugs you! xomo
Date: 5/21/2020 3:48:00 PM
So very powerful and visceral. Amazing !
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/21/2020 8:04:00 PM
Thank you so much Marcus! This one's the people's choice, not my typical style or subject; plied my muse for a contest, she surprised even me! Cheers, mo
Date: 5/8/2020 1:18:00 AM
Apparently this is your #1 poem ... and it's a doozy of a read! That last line was so powerful, falling into one's reflection. And, of course, the back and forth dialogue of the moon and you was both charming and unique. A pleasure to read, my friend. As a side note: this is also the longest one I've read of you yet.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 5/8/2020 8:40:00 AM
When I read your soupmail on minimalism I thought of this one, that word I still fret over editing but since it's a people's favourite I feel obliged not to touch it. My muse was the contest sponsor, that's how I managed to write such a long one ;), xomo!
Date: 3/3/2020 3:50:00 PM
Hi Maureen, I feel seriously guilty for not reading more of your works. WOW! You are a real writer. I have read a few of your works right now. You are the real deal. Great stuff! I feel honored to have you comment on my works. Have a wonderful day. I hope you become famous. Earl
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/4/2020 8:08:00 AM
Thank you for visiting my page and your warm comment my poetry friend! xomo
Date: 12/26/2019 10:22:00 AM
Such a great poem Maureen. Congrats on being one of the best.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 12/27/2019 8:14:00 PM
Thank you Charlie, xomo!
Date: 11/23/2019 11:21:00 PM
A clever tale, gently told. Nice work!
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 11/24/2019 8:26:00 AM
Thank you Michael. This is not representative of my usual style; it was work ;) I really probed my muse for this one for a contest prompt. xomo
Date: 8/6/2019 10:26:00 AM
What a wonderful narrative about one of my favorite topics, the lovely night lamp in the sky. Your words, about being lost, so true. She is such a traveler indeed. Sweet words you have, every one measured and perfect. Excellent writing. Ann
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/7/2019 1:13:00 PM
Thank you so much Ann! xomo
Date: 4/8/2019 9:08:00 PM
I absolutely love this one, Maureen. Children would like this one too. I can see why this made the top 100. FAVED
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/9/2019 7:33:00 AM
Wow, you think so? I had not thought of that, a little dark, but even as a kid I liked that ;) Thank you Carole! xomo
Date: 2/23/2019 10:08:00 PM
Had to visit again ... not so different at all, Dear Friend, (in my very humble and biased opinion). Much love and respect, as always. ;-) <3
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/23/2019 10:32:00 PM
Giggles~ I tried to be you writing this one ;o*
Date: 2/22/2019 8:27:00 AM
Hello Maureen, this is an asome poemI get it. Have a nice day my friend.,
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/22/2019 9:15:00 AM
Thank you my friend, a lovely day to you! Warm hugs, mo
Date: 2/19/2019 7:04:00 AM
Hello Maureen. I just received an email, "The Top 100 Best Poems"; and this poem was 55. Amazing!!!, but nor surprising. Simply wonderful. Always the best.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/19/2019 8:42:00 AM
Thank you Jeff! Hugs from my muse and I :) xomo!
Date: 1/15/2019 11:12:00 PM
I can see why this one won. The talk gives the moon a new makeover, one it's needed for awhile--maybe as far back as Sir Philip Sidney.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/16/2019 7:59:00 AM
Thank You Bill! :))) xomo
Date: 9/8/2018 10:01:00 PM
I found this to be a super poem on the stages that the moon goes though. It shows imagination, imagery, and rhythm. Congratulations on your win.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 9/9/2018 5:57:00 PM
Thank you Bette :) xomo
Date: 3/9/2018 6:04:00 AM
Truly outstanding poetry my friend! I see this gem won first place and rightly so, as its depth , beauty and appeal are all tops.. A fav...
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/16/2018 10:05:00 AM
Thank you dear poet. Love and hugs and well wishes my friend <3 xomo
Date: 3/3/2018 1:26:00 PM
Back with most deserved congrats, Maureen. Well done.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/4/2018 6:28:00 AM
Yhank you Line :) xomo!
Date: 2/27/2018 7:20:00 PM
Returning with congratulations Maureen for your excellent win with your brilliant and beautiful poem.. ~Susan
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/28/2018 7:43:00 AM
Thank you Susan :) xomo!
Date: 2/27/2018 1:15:00 PM
Yes, yes, yes - another win for this favorite of mine ... awesome stuff, My Dear Mo! LOVE it!!! :-) <3
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/28/2018 7:42:00 AM
Muchos mugs!!! <3
Date: 2/27/2018 9:41:00 AM
I loved this even more second read, congrats on a fine win, your placement is a testimony to the quality of this write!
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/28/2018 7:41:00 AM
Thank you John :) xomo!
Date: 1/31/2018 6:22:00 PM
Congrats Maureen on a fine win!
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/31/2018 9:14:00 PM
Thank you John :)
Date: 1/26/2018 5:12:00 AM
For awhile I was lost, then suddenly it dawned. Twas the moons reflections that hid her, phew! I thought that she had drowned. Loved it Maureen, congratulations on well worthy win... Mick
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/26/2018 7:51:00 AM
In my, in her mind, suicide was never her intention... but an immutable outcome. Thank you Mick :) xomo!
Date: 1/26/2018 12:09:00 AM
Powerful, with a great ending! Kurt
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/26/2018 7:37:00 AM
Thank you Kurt :) xomo!
Date: 1/25/2018 6:48:00 PM
Maureen, congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win for this awesome poem! Hugs, Sandra
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/26/2018 7:33:00 AM
Thank you Sandra! I wrote my heart out on this one :) Blessings my friend xomo
Date: 1/25/2018 1:34:00 PM
This is beautifully penned. Congratulations on a trophy win, Maureen! ...Fran
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/25/2018 2:15:00 PM
Thank you Fran :) xomo!
Date: 1/25/2018 1:31:00 PM
What an enchanting subject, congratulations Maureen...
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 1/25/2018 2:15:00 PM
Thank you Charlie :) xomo!
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