Premiere Contest WinnerI See You Says the Moon

They'll have you believe she was lost to the sea,
But the moon would beg to differ.

She was always lost,
Always looking for which way to go.
Or was that always looking for where she came from?
The moon couldn't really tell coming from going;
To a celestial body both look pretty much the same.

She wanted to be found asserts the moon.
Or was that to be seen?

She had confided at every turn,
Every phase,
I see you,
Do you see me?
I am but a sliver today, how about you?
A crescent, that's exactly how I'm feeling too!
I see you,
Do you see me?
No, not this moonless night;
I don't see myself either.
I see you,
Do you see me?
I see you.

I know you see me too.
You are the full that fills me.



She was not lost to the sea insists the moon.
It was not the sea that swallowed her
But my reflection.








18.01.03

Composed for Gregory R Barden's
Water and Sky
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Harp Avatar
December 16, 2024 at 3:07 PM
Oh, Maureen, I really love this poem. It's my name sake. I think I'll make it a fav. Moon
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December 17, 2024 at 6:48 AM
And I love your name! Thank you so much. :))) xomo!
Paulinho Avatar
December 16, 2024 at 2:12 PM
Robust, vivid imagery of moon and sea -- I liked reading this poem very much.
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December 17, 2024 at 6:48 AM
Thank you Gabriela! xomo
Scorpio Avatar
November 29, 2022 at 9:38 PM
WOW just plain wow! Amazing love it
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November 30, 2022 at 6:25 PM
Thank you! I have to credit the contest sponsor for pulling this one out of me. I love it too :) xomo
Shaw Avatar
February 23, 2022 at 6:42 AM
Blessed be for contests, Mo, you pulled a right cracker out of the box with this one, love it . . . ; )
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February 25, 2022 at 7:33 AM
Truth! It would not have been otherwise. Hugs you! xomo
Lattimore Avatar
May 21, 2020 at 3:48 PM
So very powerful and visceral. Amazing !
Pigeon Tart Avatar
May 21, 2020 at 8:04 PM
Thank you so much Marcus! This one's the people's choice, not my typical style or subject; plied my muse for a contest, she surprised even me! Cheers, mo
Hicks Avatar
May 8, 2020 at 1:18 AM
Apparently this is your #1 poem ... and it's a doozy of a read! That last line was so powerful, falling into one's reflection. And, of course, the back and forth dialogue of the moon and you was both charming and unique. A pleasure to read, my friend. As a side note: this is also the longest one I've read of you yet.
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May 8, 2020 at 8:40 AM
When I read your soupmail on minimalism I thought of this one, that word I still fret over editing but since it's a people's favourite I feel obliged not to touch it. My muse was the contest sponsor, that's how I managed to write such a long one ;), xomo!
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March 3, 2020 at 3:50 PM
Hi Maureen, I feel seriously guilty for not reading more of your works. WOW! You are a real writer. I have read a few of your works right now. You are the real deal. Great stuff! I feel honored to have you comment on my works. Have a wonderful day. I hope you become famous. Earl
Pigeon Tart Avatar
March 4, 2020 at 8:08 AM
Thank you for visiting my page and your warm comment my poetry friend! xomo
Knowlton Avatar
December 26, 2019 at 10:22 AM
Such a great poem Maureen. Congrats on being one of the best.
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December 27, 2019 at 8:14 PM
Thank you Charlie, xomo!
Burch Avatar
November 23, 2019 at 11:21 PM
A clever tale, gently told. Nice work!
Pigeon Tart Avatar
November 24, 2019 at 8:26 AM
Thank you Michael. This is not representative of my usual style; it was work ;) I really probed my muse for this one for a contest prompt. xomo
Foster Avatar
August 6, 2019 at 10:26 AM
What a wonderful narrative about one of my favorite topics, the lovely night lamp in the sky. Your words, about being lost, so true. She is such a traveler indeed. Sweet words you have, every one measured and perfect. Excellent writing. Ann
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August 7, 2019 at 1:13 PM
Thank you so much Ann! xomo
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April 8, 2019 at 9:08 PM
I absolutely love this one, Maureen. Children would like this one too. I can see why this made the top 100. FAVED
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April 9, 2019 at 7:33 AM
Wow, you think so? I had not thought of that, a little dark, but even as a kid I liked that ;) Thank you Carole! xomo
Barden Avatar
February 23, 2019 at 10:08 PM
Had to visit again ... not so different at all, Dear Friend, (in my very humble and biased opinion). Much love and respect, as always. ;-) <3
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February 23, 2019 at 10:32 PM
Giggles~ I tried to be you writing this one ;o*
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February 22, 2019 at 8:27 AM
Hello Maureen, this is an asome poemI get it. Have a nice day my friend.,
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February 22, 2019 at 9:15 AM
Thank you my friend, a lovely day to you! Warm hugs, mo
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February 19, 2019 at 7:04 AM
Hello Maureen. I just received an email, "The Top 100 Best Poems"; and this poem was 55. Amazing!!!, but nor surprising. Simply wonderful. Always the best.
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February 19, 2019 at 8:42 AM
Thank you Jeff! Hugs from my muse and I :) xomo!
Keen Avatar
January 15, 2019 at 11:12 PM
I can see why this one won. The talk gives the moon a new makeover, one it's needed for awhile--maybe as far back as Sir Philip Sidney.
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January 16, 2019 at 7:59 AM
Thank You Bill! :))) xomo
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September 8, 2018 at 10:01 PM
I found this to be a super poem on the stages that the moon goes though. It shows imagination, imagery, and rhythm. Congratulations on your win.
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September 9, 2018 at 5:57 PM
Thank you Bette :) xomo
Lindley Avatar
March 9, 2018 at 6:04 AM
Truly outstanding poetry my friend! I see this gem won first place and rightly so, as its depth , beauty and appeal are all tops.. A fav...
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March 16, 2018 at 10:05 AM
Thank you dear poet. Love and hugs and well wishes my friend <3 xomo
Gauthier Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 1:26 PM
Back with most deserved congrats, Maureen. Well done.
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March 4, 2018 at 6:28 AM
Yhank you Line :) xomo!
Ashley Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 7:20 PM
Returning with congratulations Maureen for your excellent win with your brilliant and beautiful poem.. ~Susan
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February 28, 2018 at 7:43 AM
Thank you Susan :) xomo!
Barden Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 1:15 PM
Yes, yes, yes - another win for this favorite of mine ... awesome stuff, My Dear Mo! LOVE it!!! :-) <3
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February 28, 2018 at 7:42 AM
Muchos mugs!!! <3
Hamilton Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 9:41 AM
I loved this even more second read, congrats on a fine win, your placement is a testimony to the quality of this write!
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February 28, 2018 at 7:41 AM
Thank you John :) xomo!
Hamilton Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 6:22 PM
Congrats Maureen on a fine win!
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January 31, 2018 at 9:14 PM
Thank you John :)
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January 26, 2018 at 5:12 AM
For awhile I was lost, then suddenly it dawned. Twas the moons reflections that hid her, phew! I thought that she had drowned. Loved it Maureen, congratulations on well worthy win... Mick
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January 26, 2018 at 7:51 AM
In my, in her mind, suicide was never her intention... but an immutable outcome. Thank you Mick :) xomo!
Behm Avatar
January 26, 2018 at 12:09 AM
Powerful, with a great ending! Kurt
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January 26, 2018 at 7:37 AM
Thank you Kurt :) xomo!
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January 25, 2018 at 6:48 PM
Maureen, congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win for this awesome poem! Hugs, Sandra
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January 26, 2018 at 7:33 AM
Thank you Sandra! I wrote my heart out on this one :) Blessings my friend xomo
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