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I Need a Change

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With pain I gasp but something must be done, I need to breathe again soft, dewy dawn, Not grieve alone upon a setting sun, Whisper and pray that sadness will be gone. I have often tried to utter goodbye, I tried my best to forget the past, but Thoughts murmur “All's lost”. My heart and mind sigh. Change seems impossible, I'm in a rut. Day after day, this soul breaking routine, Gone are sweet days of happiness and joy Many events have happened in between Our love, I assure you, none can destroy. Yet time has come, leave sadness and enjoy, Walk, dance, swim and behave like a young boy. 28 April 2021 Writing Prompt - Breathe - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France Syllables Per Line: 10 Placed 3

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Constance La France

Date: 5/11/2021 5:11:00 PM

Victor, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt - Breathe - Challenge with your wonderfully penned poem, well done, peace _Constance

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 5/9/2021 8:41:00 PM

Brilliantly written, as always Victor! Congrats on your win!

Judy Ball

Date: 5/2/2021 9:09:00 PM

Wonderful piece Victor. Really well thought out and well done. Also I agree, when you are really feeling down a change of pace and even place is a good tonic. God Bless, JB

Eve Roper

Date: 4/30/2021 3:05:00 PM

Constance will love this one, great use of the 6 words. Hugs

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 4/29/2021 6:43:00 PM

Wonderful Victor, the love you had will always see you through, remember to enjoy life though you are bereft, your love would wish you all that is best... Belle

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/28/2021 10:43:00 PM

Love how you turn the sentiments around with your last two lines..The whole poem so sad and yet full of love.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/28/2021 6:39:00 PM

Grieving is a hard thing... hugs, Kim

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/28/2021 4:43:00 PM

Hi Victor, I enjoyed reading your lovely nicely penned Sonnet with a lot of deep emotions, I see that you excelled at using those pre selected words, I see a top win here, wish you good luck dear Freind Victor

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/28/2021 4:42:00 PM

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 4/28/2021 1:19:00 PM

Lovely piece Victor filled with good imagery and expression. Take care, Gordon

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/28/2021 11:24:00 AM

Hi Victor, You composed a good poem with the chosen words in this well-written Sonnet. You expressed good emotion in this sad piece. Best wishes in the contest-Alexis

Ann Gilmour

Date: 4/28/2021 9:52:00 AM

Beautifully written sonnet so full of emotion dear Victor and you cleverly incorporated the required words. Well done and good luck in the contest my friend. Wih kindest thoughts Ann xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/28/2021 9:52:00 AM

I hope that you enjoy some of your youths fun times. This one reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Your visits inspire me as do your poems. Sara

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/28/2021 9:50:00 AM

Marvelously expressed, with beauty and eloquence, with an ending that is so right. I can certainly see this poem winning. :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 4/28/2021 8:27:00 AM

Hello Victor - Anyone looking for a change and who is lost and or feels lost who has tried to say goodbye to yesterday and hello to today will understand your every word. Trust me they will. Your emotions and thoughts describe this these emotions. Best of luck with the contest. It is wonderful to see your work once again.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 4/28/2021 8:07:00 AM

Lovely write, friend, I enjoyed. God bless you always, Love, Gina

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/28/2021 6:11:00 AM

Sad, yet profound in its deep thoughts of melancholy and the longing to escape it.. which is finally achieved in the end:) nice use of the words given, Victor:)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 4/28/2021 5:51:00 AM

Much melancholy words evoke sadness--apt write for the contest theme, Victor. And your poem takes a turn towards the end in uplifting words. Well done, as always.

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 4/28/2021 2:28:00 AM

Beautifully expressed Victor... those five words aptly fit in your sonnet... Am yet to think what to write for this wonderful contest...I hope I will get an idea soon... God bless.. ~ Ani

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/28/2021 1:33:00 AM

You rose well to the challenge Victor, using the allocated words.. Tom