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I Guess I Woke Up Too Soon!

I Guess I Woke Up Too Soon! The train was coming after me again. I, a helpless little girl, the evil train tracked. Like so many times before, the distant sounds warned. Chugga, shugga, chugga, whoo whoooooo! Off the rails down the trails, no longer on the track It crosses the highway just like before. Again…getting closer, closer, louder and louder. Chugga, shugga, chugga, whoo whoooooo! Terrified, I run around the house to find safety. Looking frantically for a hiding place. I scamper about to no avail…terrorized. Chugga, shugga, chugga, whoo whoooooo! I can hear it rumbling down my street, now. My alarmed heart races as I run from place to place. But there is no stopping that dreaded train. Chugga, shugga, chugga, whoo whoooooo! That incessant whistling getting louder…Louder! Much louder than before, my…fright grows. Strength perishes while fears increase. Whoo whoooooo! Whoo whoooooo! Across the lawn, through the front door, The train barges in. But it doesn’t see me hiding I breathe softly and crouch behind the couch. My “evil enemy” in silence rolls into the kitchen. No more chugging, no more whistling… The train in stealthy pursuit seeks as I hide. From one concealed place to another, I flee. In silent horror, I run for cover…room-to-room. The train steadily searches methodically hunting— No more chugging, no more whistling…only seeking. Finally, I scamper behind the couch, again. The train heads for the front door just as I hide behind it. He leaves. Chugga, shugga, chugga! Chugga, shugga, chugga, chugga, shugga, chugga! Finally, in the distance I hear it. Whoo whoooooo! Thankfully, I escaped the dreadful...once again. If only I could fly with the birds— I guess I woke up too soon! © © Dane Smith-Johnsen March 13, 2010

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Date: 4/1/2010 7:24:00 PM
Trying to catch up with congratulations. A good write this, I enjoyed reading Dane Ann...cheers Margaret
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Date: 3/30/2010 7:17:00 PM
Congrats for the win. I enjoyed the dream.
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Date: 3/28/2010 9:48:00 PM
A very tiring adventure in your dream and kept the readers to be excited in anticipation of the climax. Well done and a well-deserved win, Dane Ann. Congratulations! (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 3/28/2010 10:29:00 AM
What a exciting adventure your dream took us on! Congratulations on your win, Dane Ann! Love, Carrie
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Date: 3/27/2010 9:46:00 PM
Oooo being chased like that, what a frightmare Congrats Dane Ann
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Date: 3/27/2010 8:04:00 PM
Big congrats on your winning poem in the I Dreamed contest.. such a wonderful write and win and victory to so enjoy .. lovely Dane Ann.. luv .. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 3/27/2010 6:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this scary dream poem. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/27/2010 3:51:00 PM
Congratulations, Dane Ann, on fourth place in my contest, I Dreamed, with this scary and fun poem... you have some interesting dreams, dear heart... love Constance
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Date: 3/12/2010 9:25:00 PM
Wow...a bad nightmare I guess...but enjoyed the read...Marty
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Date: 3/12/2010 3:46:00 PM
An awful nightmare it seems .... but awakening to a new day and to be able to pen the story ... awesome..luv.. Linda-Marie ... warm milk before bed now..
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Date: 3/12/2010 2:44:00 PM
Very good. Enjoyed reading
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Date: 3/12/2010 2:00:00 PM
This was a frightful dream, Dane Ann....so well-written, I felt I was right in there with you! Excellent job as usual. Thanks for reading mine and leaving your warm, kind, comments for me. I truly appreciate your kindness, always. Peace, love, Audrey
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Date: 3/12/2010 1:08:00 PM
enjoyed readig today!!
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Date: 3/12/2010 10:52:00 AM
Hi, there, Dane Ann. This is very descriptive writing of fear. I have several poems on fear and/or high anxiety. haha. I'll have to check and see if I can use one of those in the dream contest. She gave so many topics that did not fit with my own dream topics. UG! loved this one, Andrea
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Date: 3/12/2010 7:26:00 AM
Thank you for your welcome blog comments today Dane.Rgds Brian
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Date: 3/12/2010 5:48:00 AM
The image of this train pursuing you through your house is frightening. Wish you'd had time to "fly with the birds" before waking up, Dane Ann. Sounds like a terrible nightmare! You created a lot of suspense and had the reader rooting for the little girl to escape the train. Nice work, my friend! Love, Carolyn
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