Linda Alice Fowler Poet Choka

Her Ruby Lips

Her lips were ruby.
The twilight played tricks with me
and sent me reeling.
One more day…I swore!
Would that allow enough time
to feel her caress?
To breathe her beauty?
To ask for eternal love?
I felt hope inside.
She turned searching eyes
toward my troubled features.
Could she read my mind? 
I gambled a chance
and tugged her within my arms.
"Will you marry me?"
She withdrew from me,
breaking my short reverie.
"Are you serious?
We just met today! 
Are you some kind of crazy?
Get away, you creep!"
Her ruby lips spat at me.

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Sam Kauffman August 20, 2023 at 8:40 PM What an inventive, original story, Linda! So well told using this inventive form! Congratulations and blessings. Linda Alice Fowler August 21, 2023 at 8:20 AM Hello dear Sam. Kim has a way of bringing out fun and creative inspiration. Thanks for your visit and congrats! hugs and blessings. :)

Kim Rodrigues August 20, 2023 at 6:25 PM I wondered at the twilight and the ruby lips. Great twist in the story! Congratulations, Linda, on your placement in my contest! Linda Alice Fowler August 21, 2023 at 8:18 AM Hey Kim - thank you for the fun contest and my gracious placement! Always a pleasure! :)

Speaks Volumes August 20, 2023 at 9:30 AM Love this ! BOL ( I have so many of your poems to catch up on. Best wishes from SV Linda Alice Fowler August 21, 2023 at 8:17 AM Dear Svvie my friend! Thank you! Some say love is all we need - I'm thinking time is all I need LOL! :)

Andrea Dietrich August 13, 2023 at 3:00 PM oh wow, I liked that twist Linda Alice Fowler August 14, 2023 at 1:45 PM teehee. I'm glad you liked it Andrea. Do you ever just write along with the sappy lines and then get the giggles at the end? Thanks for stopping by! :)

Robert Lindley August 13, 2023 at 10:06 AM WOW.. Last verse caught me by surprise. I agree with my friend Bill, it is very well written. God bless.. Linda Alice Fowler August 14, 2023 at 1:44 PM Thank you Robert. I was hoping to catch a few with the ending. I appreciate your time to read and comment. :)

Bill Baker August 12, 2023 at 3:43 PM Not everyone can see what others see, it often leads to an experience of tragedy. Well-written my poet friend. Write On! Bill p.s. Sorry I've taken so long the visit and read your poetry, Linda. Linda Alice Fowler August 13, 2023 at 7:39 AM Thanks Bill. No apologies needed. I was without internet for nearly seven weeks (a product of living in the country LOL) so I'm having a time catching up on my correspondence. Have a good (cool) day my friend! :)

Regina Mcintosh August 11, 2023 at 10:34 AM Aww... Love it. God bless you, Love, Gina Linda Alice Fowler August 11, 2023 at 12:12 PM Hello sweet Gina! So good to have you visit and comment. hugs to you! :)

Valsa George August 10, 2023 at 9:18 PM So sad ! Her reaction is so violent ! She could have just walked away without offending him.... ! A great entry for the contest. All the Best, dear Linda ! Linda Alice Fowler August 11, 2023 at 12:11 PM Well, he was a bit presumptuous, don't you think? LOL Many thanks for the read and comment Valsa my friend! :)

Sara Kendrick August 10, 2023 at 1:18 PM Whoa!! A turn of events in this one takes the reader much by surprise. Way to go for the contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for sharing your creativity and for dropping by my page. Sara Linda Alice Fowler August 10, 2023 at 1:23 PM LOL. Thank you dear Sara. I appreciate your visit and comments! :)

Vijay Pandit August 7, 2023 at 5:56 AM Love at first sight---but not returned it seems. Best to you, Linda. Linda Alice Fowler August 10, 2023 at 8:55 AM Hello my friend Vijay!! I was thinking about you just the other day. I trust all is well with you. Thanks for the read and comment. :)

The Situation August 6, 2023 at 4:13 PM The ending caught me by surprise. Just met today? Well it was only a chance anyway. As far as poetic value. Like I said the surprise ending caught me. Linda Alice Fowler August 6, 2023 at 4:55 PM No real poetic value...just followed the requirements and added a little fun, I hope. Thanks for stopping by. :)

Beryl Edmonds August 6, 2023 at 2:48 PM That’s a really good Choka poem Linda, a winner to me… Belle Linda Alice Fowler August 6, 2023 at 4:54 PM Thank you Belle. I always enjoy your visits. :)

Anne-Lise Andresen August 6, 2023 at 1:19 PM ... her lips were too tempting :))) - A lovely poem, Linda :) - hugs Linda Alice Fowler August 6, 2023 at 4:53 PM Hey dear Anne-Lise! Thank you so much for stopping by today and commenting. hugs :)