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Her Dream Boy Was Full of Joy

This is my FIRST attempt at a limerick. Its for a contest, so please let me know what you think. Suggestions are appreciated. She's longing for love and affection So she tried to grab his attention She let her "girls" go free They were bigger than peas He suddenly got an ******** 05/08/2014

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/14/2014 12:27:00 AM

Hi Robin,, :) Congratulations, on your win. "Luv Linda"

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/9/2014 6:09:00 PM

I may copy and paste congrats but I have read your work and find it exceptional…Sara

Elaine George

Date: 6/9/2014 1:14:00 PM

lol!!!!! bigger than peas...tooooo funny. Lainie

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/9/2014 7:33:00 AM

very funny good limerick Robin congrats on win hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/8/2014 8:36:00 AM

Are we talking about nipples or breasts??? Either way she got the desired effect. Congratulations.

Skat A

Date: 6/8/2014 7:32:00 AM

Robin,, Congrats, on your "Bawdy, Bawdy, Bawdy, Miss Clawdy" win........ Enjoyable Limerick :) LOVE ~SKAT~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/7/2014 9:51:00 PM

hey, way to go. I really like yours, Robin. Great humor. Congrats for your win.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/7/2014 9:51:00 PM

Congratulations on your fine win with this well humored limerick, robin

Skat A

Date: 5/15/2014 9:31:00 AM

love the Limerick girl...SKAT

Jan Allison

Date: 5/13/2014 4:42:00 PM

very witty limerick. hugs as ever Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/13/2014 8:41:00 AM

hey, you have not changed it yet. Come on, Robin. It's so close to being perfect!!

Jake Ponce

Date: 5/11/2014 7:32:00 PM

I've never written a limerick but this sure made me giggle. It's fun and it flows well so I think you did great!

Jack Horne

Date: 5/11/2014 5:57:00 PM

I remember writing my first limerick. Had a chuckle here, my friend. I see Carolyn has pointed out the last line always rhymes with the first two. Apart from that, I think you did great : )

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/11/2014 2:06:00 PM

Ahh, your FIRST limerick! Love the way her "girls" were set free! I'm not qualified to judge the meter, but I got quite a laugh from this very funny poem, Robin. I used to sponsor many limerick contests, but I judged based on the quality of humor, not the meter. (Last line should rhyme with the first two - my only suggestion) Enjoyed this very much! Thanks for your kind comments. Happy Mothers Day, Carolyn

David Williams

Date: 5/11/2014 4:27:00 AM

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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/10/2014 4:11:00 AM

hahaha funny funny write.. :D this one is good i think .. :) i hope it will place high on the contest.. :) just i think with the rhymes.. :O ?

Deborah Shiells

Date: 5/9/2014 10:37:00 PM

Hi Robin, I think its good just as it is. But then I don't know a lot about limerick.Rather how to write it perfectly. But I think your writing is great:-) thanks for sharing with us~ Best of the best in the contest my friend. Peace, Deborah Peace,

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/9/2014 4:30:00 PM

The content is pretty funny, Robin. The meter started out really good and then kind of got lost in the middle. You mostly need to rework lines three and five. I can't think right offhand how to make three work, but for line five, you definitely have to change "glee" for a word that rhymes with lines 1-2. Oh, I got it:: He suddenly got an erection! hahaha. Now that is bawdy!!! Oh, I got line 3: So her "girls" she let free (da da DAH da da DAH)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/9/2014 9:31:00 AM

Enjoyed the humor,robin. You have quite succeeded at first attempt,

Robert Pettit

Date: 5/9/2014 12:22:00 AM

This was an entertaining write. Just for your information, the rhyming scheme for a true limerick is AABBA. Your fifth line in this write should end rhyme with a word ending with "tion". Here's a mere suggestion: how about replacing that fifth line with "He surprisingly shouts happily without hesitation"?