Home » Poems » Suzanne Delaney » Heartache

Heartache

Narrow grows the infinite sky In mind a list of all who've gone before - years passed- so quickly by Enough to prejudice the dawn And little joys and larger griefs Consumed our hearts and minds at will Dared us to question our beliefs Until that moment we grew still.... What was then our consolation? Heaven loomed, larger than before Paradise a mere fixation with death too final to ignore Nirvana, everlasting Eden Heaven waits beyond all reason 2/9/17 For Broken Wings Form H Hybronnet 2nd Place

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/31/2021 7:16:00 AM

I can totally relate ~ lovely poem

Constance La France

Date: 2/18/2017 1:25:00 PM

Suzanne congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely poem

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 2/18/2017 2:04:00 PM

Thankyou Constance: I enjoyed trying the Hybronnet form. Sending smiles, SuZ

Charlie Smith

Date: 2/18/2017 8:46:00 AM

Terrific use of form Suzanne. The depth of your piece was amazing, congratulations...

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 2/18/2017 9:17:00 AM

Than you, Charlie:So nice of you to visit. Hugs, SuZ

Agnes Krampe

Date: 2/18/2017 7:58:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Suzanne. Interesting form, you did that very well.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 3/31/2017 2:39:00 PM

Thankyou, Agnes: I appreciate your kind comment.

Robert Lindley

Date: 2/13/2017 8:28:00 PM

The depth and greatness of this poem makes me want to investigate this new form and write in it soon (if only I can remember to do so). Truly a 7 and a fav as this is a real beauty..

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 2/15/2017 5:45:00 PM

Thank you Dear Robert: for reading and commenting. This form is listed under H in the Forms link. I used rhymezone.com to choose my end rhymes. The 8 syllables make it a bit tricky but when I write in rhyme and meter, I naturally do Iambic tetrameter, I'll look forward to seeing what you write. Hugs, SuZ

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/10/2017 8:55:00 PM

wow, what a stunning example of this form, Suzanne. I was thinking of going haiku but now I might want to try this hbyronnet form for the challenge. Excellent.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 2/15/2017 5:48:00 PM

Hi Andrea: Been so busy renovating I haven't checked back, Will see if you have written to this challenge soon. My kitchen renovation has been so intensive, Be so happy when it is finito, Hugs, SuZ

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/10/2017 4:13:00 PM

- A great poem with strength, SuZ - Well done - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 2/15/2017 5:50:00 PM

Thanks so much Ann-Lise: Lately if I can get a poem out I am so very thankful and more thankful to have old friends to visit. Hugs, SuZ

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 2/9/2017 10:18:00 PM

Great write, Suzanne. Very real to those who experience doubt and confusion. Love the middle lines: "Until that moment we grew still... / What was then our consolation?" And also the last. "Heaven waits beyond all reason" Super reading this late evening.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 2/10/2017 7:38:00 AM

Hi Reason: Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I don't often try new forms but this was a great experience. Life is too scattered at the moment so I appreciated this grounding. Best always, SuZ

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/9/2017 10:14:00 PM

Mrs Suz, I could have a long conversation about this poem. Extremely well written and thought provoking write. Also, debatable, depending on one's belief. I love poems that make me think:)

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 2/10/2017 7:38:00 AM

Good Morning, Daniel: Your comment makes we wish we were in a real live Poetry Circle that meets around a table. Cyber discussions are cumbersome and sometimes lead to lengthy texts without benefit of voice inflections and quick clarifications. I sure do appreciate your thoughtful comments and greatly admire your writing. SuZ