Suzanne Delaney Poet Hybronnet

Heartache

Narrow grows the infinite sky
In mind a list of all who've gone
before - years passed- so quickly by
Enough to prejudice the dawn
And little joys and larger griefs
Consumed our hearts and minds at will
Dared us to question our beliefs 
Until that moment we grew still....
What was then our consolation?
Heaven loomed, larger than before
Paradise a mere fixation
with death too final to ignore

Nirvana, everlasting Eden
Heaven waits beyond all reason

2/9/17
For Broken Wings  Form H
Hybronnet
2nd Place

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Line Gauthier May 31, 2021 at 7:16 AM I can totally relate ~ lovely poem

Constance La France February 18, 2017 at 1:25 PM Suzanne congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely poem Suzanne Delaney February 18, 2017 at 2:04 PM Thankyou Constance: I enjoyed trying the Hybronnet form. Sending smiles, SuZ

Charlie Smith February 18, 2017 at 8:46 AM Terrific use of form Suzanne. The depth of your piece was amazing, congratulations... Suzanne Delaney February 18, 2017 at 9:17 AM Than you, Charlie:So nice of you to visit. Hugs, SuZ

Agnes Krampe February 18, 2017 at 7:58 AM Congrats on your win, Suzanne. Interesting form, you did that very well. Suzanne Delaney March 31, 2017 at 2:39 PM Thankyou, Agnes: I appreciate your kind comment.

Robert Lindley February 13, 2017 at 8:28 PM The depth and greatness of this poem makes me want to investigate this new form and write in it soon (if only I can remember to do so). Truly a 7 and a fav as this is a real beauty.. Suzanne Delaney February 15, 2017 at 5:45 PM Thank you Dear Robert: for reading and commenting. This form is listed under H in the Forms link. I used rhymezone.com to choose my end rhymes. The 8 syllables make it a bit tricky but when I write in rhyme and meter, I naturally do Iambic tetrameter, I'll look forward to seeing what you write. Hugs, SuZ

Andrea Dietrich February 10, 2017 at 8:55 PM wow, what a stunning example of this form, Suzanne. I was thinking of going haiku but now I might want to try this hbyronnet form for the challenge. Excellent. Suzanne Delaney February 15, 2017 at 5:48 PM Hi Andrea: Been so busy renovating I haven't checked back, Will see if you have written to this challenge soon. My kitchen renovation has been so intensive, Be so happy when it is finito, Hugs, SuZ

Anne-Lise Andresen February 10, 2017 at 4:13 PM - A great poem with strength, SuZ - Well done - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Suzanne Delaney February 15, 2017 at 5:50 PM Thanks so much Ann-Lise: Lately if I can get a poem out I am so very thankful and more thankful to have old friends to visit. Hugs, SuZ

Reason A. Poteet February 9, 2017 at 10:18 PM Great write, Suzanne. Very real to those who experience doubt and confusion. Love the middle lines: "Until that moment we grew still... / What was then our consolation?" And also the last. "Heaven waits beyond all reason" Super reading this late evening. Suzanne Delaney February 10, 2017 at 7:38 AM Hi Reason: Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I don't often try new forms but this was a great experience. Life is too scattered at the moment so I appreciated this grounding. Best always, SuZ

Daniel Turner February 9, 2017 at 10:14 PM Mrs Suz, I could have a long conversation about this poem. Extremely well written and thought provoking write. Also, debatable, depending on one's belief. I love poems that make me think:) Suzanne Delaney February 10, 2017 at 7:38 AM Good Morning, Daniel: Your comment makes we wish we were in a real live Poetry Circle that meets around a table. Cyber discussions are cumbersome and sometimes lead to lengthy texts without benefit of voice inflections and quick clarifications. I sure do appreciate your thoughtful comments and greatly admire your writing. SuZ