Heart To Heart

Mother, I feel the weight the spinning world. I feel each parental nudge, as a rock, in the cairn of my life, the weight coats my fragile fleeing thoughts, dulling. The spinning child teeters to adult whirlwind, still, sloughing stale nudges. Worlds appear and disappear within the turmoil of my roiling mind feel each parental nudge declined, as a rock standing firm against a gale of fright in the cairn** of my life, I will reign. Son, I know I ask too much, am too much, give too much, hold me. I know, you know, I too spin, and teeter in the winter of my years. I ask only that you see my love, in the absences, as we grow. Too much of mewling mother has melded with you, I weep. Am too much, and in being so, feel never enough. Give too much of my own fear, though unintended, it bleeds. Hold me close as my time is ending, and the rocks of my reign fall.
* This is my original form called Et Cetera a subcategory of Free Verse **cairn is a pile of rocks made to blaze a trail
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Johnson Avatar
August 2, 2012 at 4:55 PM
Nice form Debbie. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Macmillan Avatar
August 2, 2012 at 11:17 AM
Congratulations, Bet. Stunning stuff and I really must write another Et Cetera. I enjoyed the brainstorming your form ... unleashes. :-) I hope you read my blog. I wrote it around 1 am... in retrospect, now, I am concerned that my comments on this masterpiece may raise your eyebrows. What I meant, to clarify, is that this reads as classic, that the theme is universal. I can picture this on a stage, the white masks and flowing gowns, the every woman aspect of this revealing piece. LOVE IT. xox
Sweetheart Avatar
August 2, 2012 at 8:12 AM
congrats Debbie on a fantastic write and win for this challenge luv.. top notch as always..
Brown Avatar
August 2, 2012 at 5:27 AM
Congratulations on your 3rd place win in Cyndi's 'You Do Understand" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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August 1, 2012 at 11:48 PM
Debbie,, congratulations with your wonderful win in Cyndi's contest... xox~PD
Hunter Avatar
July 16, 2012 at 3:57 PM
Some strong stuff here....I very much enjoyed it.
A   Avatar
July 16, 2012 at 3:50 AM
Nice work DG, i'm thinking of your contest.. will you judge it toughly... just wondering... i feel as if i can do your newest contest...good night..pd
Dietrich Avatar
July 15, 2012 at 9:56 PM
this is lovely the way it fits so well the title: heart to heart, Debs. I sure like this subcategory of free verse.
A   Avatar
July 15, 2012 at 9:54 PM
A very interesting coversation...you end it very deeply...luv * pd
Harrell Avatar
July 15, 2012 at 8:48 PM
I love it. It's so good, Debbie. Feel love and sadness at the same time. We all hope that our parents will live long to be with us. We will be sad when their time comes. They raise us with the best way they know how. Love ya, Toquyen
Henderson Avatar
July 15, 2012 at 5:54 PM
My Dad didn't live long enough to be a pain to me. But, my mom lived a long life. I'm thankful for the fond memories that linger. I no longer remember the bad ones.
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