Malabika Ray Choudhury Poet Free verse

Hear the Blowing Wind

The old rusty gate CREAKS open,
                        I hear the blowing wind WHOOSH and HOWL,
                          blazing autumn leaves waltz MURMURING
                                  stories from a forgotten past,
                      The lonely owl HOOTS, SHRIEKS TU-WHIT TU-WHOO,
                             rain falls DRIP-drop…PITTER-PATTER
                                A door shuts BANG somewhere
                                     making me SHUDDER!

                          The desolate staircase is dusty and empty -
                      lamenting for footsteps of CHATTERING, GIGGLING 
                              children playing hide-and-seek,
                   dry leaves CRUMBLE under my feet in the orchard
                                  which once smelt ambrosial!

                       The place WHISPERS an exuberant childhood…
                                 my heart FLUTTERS to recollect
                          the HUMMING music of the quaint hamlet…
                         bees BUZZING around the colourful flowers,
                            butterflies flirting with roses and dahlias,
                            birds CHIRPING melodious tunes which
                           serenade to far-away RIPPLING streams.

                         The swing has stopped, birdsongs are gone!
                                 The rusty gate SQUEAKS open..



                                            July 3, 2021
                             "Onomatopoeia" Poetry Contest
                                      Sponsor: Emile Pinet
                   23 Onomatopoeia words (In Bold) have been used.
                                                22 Lines 
                                            THIRD PLACE

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Tania Kitchin July 31, 2022 at 7:07 AM Mala, wonderfully penned, love the imagery, congratulations on your winning placement! Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:47 AM Thank you, Tania, for reading my poem, and congratulating me warmly. What a great poet-community I am part of! Love ~ Mala

Len Gasun July 31, 2022 at 5:33 AM Wow! Congratulations on your 3rd place win and for this wonderful write my dear friend! Thanks a lot for sharing. Blessings! Hugs Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:45 AM Thank you, Dear Len. I am so delighted you have read this humble poem of mine. BW ~ Mala

Valsa George July 31, 2022 at 2:06 AM The old house recalling a beautiful time of affluence and splendor now remains the spectre of bygone glory. The courtyard where children romped and played is now covered with dry leaves that rustle and crumble under the feet. Only nostalgic memories remain. The swing has stopped and the birds no longer sing ! Beautiful onomatopoeic poem. Congratulations Mala on your trophy win ! Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:44 AM WOW, Valsa! Your glorious comment has so much depth, understanding and kindness, I just feel over the moon, although I did not really win the trophy. Is trophy going to be always a mirage for me? The comments from my fellow poet-friends are most precious in my poetic journey. The story behind this poem is a true story from my childhood, which lingers in my heart for ever. Thank you for being so kind to me, My Dear Friend. Love and blessings ~ Mala

Shane Thacker July 30, 2022 at 7:35 PM Wonderfully written! Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:35 AM Thank you, Shane. I am so delighted to receive your inspiring comment. BW ~ Mala

Jenna Logan July 30, 2022 at 3:39 PM Congratulations on having written a trophy winner, Mala. Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:32 AM Dearest Jenna, I feel so honoured with your uplifting kind words. I did not win the trophy, but I feel truly blessed to receive comments like this from my fellow poet-friends. I am over the moon! Love ~ Mala

Regina Mcintosh July 30, 2022 at 2:42 PM Wonderful write! This is so good... love this line "blazing autumn leaves waltz MURMURING"... Just love it all. Glad it was a winner. Congrats and God bless you, Love, Gina Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:30 AM Dear Gina, Thank you so much. You are a great poet yourself - comments from you are very precious! Love ~ Mala

Connie Marcum Wong July 30, 2022 at 1:00 PM Wow is this poem impressive Mala. I loved your ending “The swing has stopped, birdsongs are gone! The rusty gate SQUEAKS open..” mentioning that the swing has stopped is such a clever way to let us know, the children have gone, along with their happy chatter and laughter in a melancholy way. I can tell you are a true writer, not just a poet by the way you have expressed not only the sweet scenes but the feelings inferred. This is excellent and I am putting it into my Faves Mala. Congratulations! Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:28 AM Dearest Connie, I am so glad you are feeling better. You are right, there is a true story from my childhood behind this poem. We had to leave a beautiful house in one night because of an accident to my mother. The memory of that house and that garden lingers in my heart for ever. Thank you so much for the FAVE! These comments from my fellow poets are so precious! I am so honoured. Love ~ Mala

Linda Alice Fowler July 30, 2022 at 12:34 PM Such a nostalgic feel to this work Mala. You certainly captured the spirit of the contest in this. Congratulations for such a fabulous win in Emile's contest! hugs, Linda Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:24 AM Thank you, Dear Linda, for reading my poem, and leaving such a glowing compliment. Love ~ Mala

Emile Pinet July 30, 2022 at 11:15 AM Congratulations Malabika! Your amazing poem "Hear The Blowing Wind", has placed "Third" in my Onomatopoeia Poetry Contest. You should take pride, for it was a difficult contest to judge for I was very strict, but your poem rose to a podium placing. Very well done my friend, Emile. Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:23 AM Thank you, Emile. I am honoured to be placed in such a highly competitive contest. BW ~ Mala

Paula Goldsmith July 26, 2022 at 10:00 AM WOW!!! What a story/write. I love this one. Hope you are OK. Have a blessed/fun day writing away............... Malabika Ray Choudhury July 31, 2022 at 8:21 AM Dear Paula, I am okay, a bit engaged with a few other writing projects. Thank you so much for reading my poems. I am truly blessed to have friends like you. Love ~ Mala

Michael Tor July 24, 2022 at 7:49 PM A favorite Mala, wow! 9/6/2015 I wrote a Childs First Home on my list of poems here. This reminds me of my poem. It reminds me but it doesn't compare to your meticulous creation here of so many images and details. I am so impressed Mala. god bless you Mala and if you have a chance read what I wrote. Thank you and God bless you Mala... Malabika Ray Choudhury July 26, 2022 at 7:17 AM Thank you, Dear Michael. Your Fave! I am so honoured! I will definitely read your poem "Child's First Home". Sounds like we have a lot in common - to me, poetry doesn't need being meticulous that much, it is more of expressing emotions and soul. God bless you, Dear Poet-Friend.

Bill Baker July 8, 2022 at 5:14 PM What a wonderful showcase of Onomatopoeia, Mala. A masterpiece! Thanks for sharing this great entry for the contest with us. Bill Malabika Ray Choudhury July 26, 2022 at 7:21 AM Dear Bill, how did I miss your glowing compliment? Thank you so much. I am so delighted to have your support. You are a brilliant poet and an awesome friend!

Mystic Rose Rose July 5, 2022 at 3:23 PM Hauntingly beautiful memories that come to life with the opening of the creaking gate, gl in the contest, you have your own very special talent my dear, and it shows in this glowing poem of yours, :) Malabika Ray Choudhury July 7, 2022 at 9:22 AM Dear Rose, Thank you for visiting and reading my humble effort. Your comment is kind and generous - I feel over the moon coming from a gifted poet like you.

Andrea Dietrich July 5, 2022 at 9:50 AM Great use of onomatopeia, Mala. I think you did an outstanding job of it here. Malabika Ray Choudhury July 7, 2022 at 8:30 AM Thank you, Andrea. A wonderful compliment coming from you - feel over the moon.

Valsa George July 4, 2022 at 8:52 AM You have incorporated quite a lot of onamatopeic words and they don't seem laboriously fitted in ! They come naturally and create an atmosphere of lost glory with some refreshing sounds of the chirping of birds, buzzing of bees, whooshing of wind and the pitter patter of rain ! Much enjoyed.... So eligible for a top win dear friend ! Malabika Ray Choudhury July 4, 2022 at 1:56 PM Dear Valsa, Thank you for your visit, and thoughtful encouraging comment. I am delighted to know you have enjoyed this piece of writing - comments from my fellow poets are the true gifts. Love and best wishes ~ Mala