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My NEW form. "Charlie Hai-lim-ku" (lol)  a hagrandma-cooking-260nw-577755676.jpg (260×280)iku followed by a limerick followed by a monoku..

five hours on the stove garlic, onion, tomatoes the great smell of sauce My grandmother in the kitchen all day Cooking dinner while her kids were away Nobody ever knew She always used Ragu And drank a bottle of fine cabernet the fine cabernet hidden, inside a vat of red wine vinegar

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Date: 2/7/2022 8:17:00 AM
I like your Grandma! I would like to try this form sounds like a lot of fun "Charlie Hai-lim-ku" But first thinking of spaghetti and a glass of wine!
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Date: 1/27/2022 5:42:00 PM
your Granny sounds like my kind of woman. I think we all picked this trick up from Julia Child’s cooking show. Lol Love this new form and will try to think of one. SuZ
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Date: 1/27/2022 2:36:00 AM
Nice Form Liked n Enjoyed Sure to try Have a good day
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Date: 1/23/2022 4:23:00 PM
Haven't been to poetry soup in over a decade. Dude did you just create a new form of poetry??? Awesome! Much agree with Jan A. very clever that lim and ku. The structure of the haiku first is the brilliance of Sir Charles. When I read Hai-lim-ku just assumed it was a centuries old form.
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Date: 1/24/2022 7:45:00 AM
Hey Johnny, after a decade I feel honored that you had come across my poem. Thank you for stopping by and for commenting. Hey dude, at 62 I'm old but not yet ancient (lol). Welcome back...stay well. Charlie
Date: 1/23/2022 11:29:00 AM
LOVE the form you created and the monoku and limerick are very witty:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/21/2022 2:00:00 PM
Love your "Grandmother's Secrets." Now let's eat. Have a great day/weekend...............
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Date: 1/20/2022 4:09:00 PM
Crazy me, I read your poem a few days back and I noticed I forgot to leave a message. Love the poem and great example. Even at my age my memories of my grandma have always been sad. I miss her because she was always supper for a young girl. She used to spoil me rotten since I was the oldest of all the grandchildren.
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Date: 1/20/2022 7:20:00 AM
Charlie, so much fun to read and a great example for your new contest, it reminds me of my Mom she would send me to the store for red wine, I always thought it was for cooking until I saw her taking drinks from the bottle as she cooked, I don't think any wine ever made it into the thing she was cooking _Constance
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Date: 1/8/2022 8:07:00 PM
Funny. I think all grandma's had their little secrets. It was life's solution at the time especially if you had a herd of kids and were a housewife!! Thank you for your comment.. Have a great day.
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Date: 1/8/2022 7:46:00 PM
Grandma's secret was better hidden than Victoria's Secret! lol. Cheers, gw
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Date: 1/8/2022 8:01:00 AM
She is so so clever...Like the many condiments added to her dish, she took some condiment to boost her spirits up. Love this combination of different forms Charles.
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Date: 1/8/2022 6:14:00 AM
Bless your grandmother with her cheeky secret! Love it! Great poem Charlie. Debx
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Date: 1/8/2022 7:13:00 AM
Oh, I wonder how many more secrets she has that I never knew about (lol) Thank you, Deb. Charlie x
Date: 1/8/2022 5:24:00 AM
You gotta watch those grandmas! Fantastic tale!
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Date: 1/8/2022 7:14:00 AM
For sure...those little old sneaky women (lol) Thank you, P.S. enjoy the weekend! Hugs
Date: 1/8/2022 1:56:00 AM
I love cabernet. Must be DOCG. Not the best but almost.
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Date: 1/8/2022 4:26:00 AM
Goes well with a pasta dinner! My choice as well!
Date: 1/7/2022 8:37:00 PM
Ahhh, that red wine vinegar! That must be what's missing in my sauce...lol Fun read.
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Date: 1/8/2022 4:31:00 AM
LOL- I do like it in my salad, with oil, salt, pepper & oregano...but in the sauce a touch of cabernet will never hurt. Hmm maybe I'll try it tonight (lol). Thank you, Virginia.
Date: 1/7/2022 6:28:00 PM
Hello Charles ... you could have started a trend here. The topic is great - thank you Charles - Lindsay
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Date: 1/8/2022 4:32:00 AM
Thank you, Lindsay...ya never know (lol) Cheers my friend. ~Charlie
Date: 1/7/2022 4:51:00 PM
Interesting display of poetic skills Charles. I like it. Write On! Bill
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Date: 1/8/2022 4:34:00 AM
Thank you, Bill. I tried to come up with something different. Perhaps I'll use this as a reference for the next contest I sponsor. Happy Weekend. Charlie
Date: 1/7/2022 4:33:00 PM
oh wow, this just got better and better. I really loved the limerick but the one liner at bottom was perfect ending
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Date: 1/7/2022 4:41:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. My personal favorite as well. Have a safe and great weekend. Hugs Charlie
Date: 1/7/2022 1:41:00 PM
An interesting mix of forms, Charles. I enjoyed reading your entertaining poem! I wonder what other secrets grandmother had? lol Blessings, Kim M
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Date: 1/7/2022 2:07:00 PM
Ssh...lol. Thanks for stopping by Kim. Glad you enjoyed! Have a nice weekend. Happy New Year! ~Charlie
Date: 1/7/2022 11:42:00 AM
Great invention Charlie, crafty granny lol. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
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Charles Messina
Date: 1/7/2022 12:51:00 PM
Thank you, Tom. Have a great weekend! Charlie
Date: 1/7/2022 11:37:00 AM
You did it again, Charlie.... Your poem made my day... Nice, cute, sweet...
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Charles Messina
Date: 1/7/2022 12:52:00 PM
Aww... So wonderful to hear :) Thank you, Marilene. Have a wonderful weekend! Hugs x