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Gone With the Pies

Last Christmas I made ten plum pies To donate to poor homeless guys But my kids ate them all You should have heard me bawl Bed early, there’s no compromise! The next morning they all had sore tums A result of eating all those plums With green faces and sad eyes I made THEM bake some more pies They would not even touch the pie crumbs! They helped carry the pies to the poor We gave them in at the shelter door When they saw the poor men They will now think again Of eating all the pies from mom's store FICTION POEM Punny holiday pies contest Sponsored by Michelle Faulkner 11/16/18

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Mark Toney

Date: 12/17/2018 12:52:00 PM

Jan, kudos on the win! I love the ten plumb pies and the moral lesson for kids :) ~Mark

Jan Allison
Date: 12/17/2018 1:07:00 PM

Thanks Mark. I never know how a poem will end I just let my muse have free rein:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/17/2018 8:50:00 AM

Hi Jan, I liked the message within in this write. Congratulations on your win it the contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 12/17/2018 12:26:00 PM

Thanks so much Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 12/16/2018 9:48:00 PM

A fun poem, Jan. Congrats on your win.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/17/2018 12:26:00 PM

Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 12/16/2018 4:33:00 PM

Very warm message here (gotta laugh at 'with green faces and sad eyes') well done, congratulations on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/16/2018 6:15:00 PM

Thanks Michelle, it was a fun contest:-) hugs jan xx

Damian Keady

Date: 11/22/2018 6:43:00 PM

Plumbs and Tums .. Sounds like Tom Thumb... I love a pie me, but normally Steak and Kidney..! Ahh I hear you say, those were the days... Or was it little Jack Horner who sat in the corner...... Or was that just me... If so can I have the recipe? Love DAMO x

Jan Allison
Date: 11/22/2018 6:48:00 PM

ooh steak and ale pie for me with a puff pastry top mmmm you cant beat it!:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 11/20/2018 3:53:00 PM

Lovely limericks woven into a fine story. Enjoyed this one, Jan! :) gw

Jan Allison
Date: 11/20/2018 4:08:00 PM

Thanks so much Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 11/20/2018 7:49:00 AM

so who hate all the pies then ?

Jan Allison
Date: 11/20/2018 3:26:00 PM

Not me lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2018 7:48:00 PM

that is just adorable, Jan. Having the kids learn a lesson from it. I think this looks like such a fun contest There are like twelve contests for me to get to . God help me!!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/18/2018 7:59:00 PM

I just wait for my muse to kick into action if she doesn't behave I don't write for any contest:-) good luck Andrea, you deserve all the accolades you get I know how hard you work at crafting your poems:-) just came across an old comment from Darren - wonder what happened to him I miss his humour and friendship:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/17/2018 2:58:00 PM

What a perfect series of limericks Jan! I think you are but one of a few who have mastered this form so expertly! I loved the poem and the lesson that comes with it! : ) xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 3:16:00 PM

oh what a comment to treasure Connie!!! My aunt and uncle both wrote witty poems especially limericks so I guess its in my blood it just took my hubbies cancer for me to pick up the pen, that said I have learned so so much since joining soup:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/17/2018 2:56:00 PM

- A lesson to learn ... "for your children" - - A great theme of good deeds, values in life Jan :) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 3:15:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 11/17/2018 2:26:00 PM

Hi Jan, I really enjoyed your limericks. You do these writes so well. Wishing you all the best in the contest, this one reads like a winner. Now, to stop giggling would be nice. Have a wonderful end to your Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 2:50:00 PM

I just love the limerick form and find it so simple to write:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 11/17/2018 10:36:00 AM

Jan, I love your Pie poem, those bad fictional kids, but what a wonderful thing that would be to do for the poor, best of luck in the contest ~

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 12:28:00 PM

well have to invent a bake a pie for the needy day Constance - they have so many other days so why not, it could be for homeless or just for the elderly who wouldn't normally have a homemade treat and a visit too!:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Hauser

Date: 11/17/2018 9:59:00 AM

Wonderful imagination and rhyme as always my friend!

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 12:27:00 PM

pure imagination of course:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Way

Date: 11/17/2018 9:19:00 AM

Great poem, Jan. Nice weekend! Charlie

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 12:26:00 PM

thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels

Date: 11/17/2018 6:56:00 AM

Great limerick, Jan!! A hard lesson for the kids to learn... but learn, they will!! All the best for the contest. Regards, John.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 12:26:00 PM

thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 11/16/2018 5:31:00 PM

G'day Jan … could be one of the best lessons in life these kids will ever have Jan - great set of limericks - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 12:26:00 PM

Wish it wasn't just made up Lindsay:-) hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 11/16/2018 3:34:00 PM

There are so many hungry people out there, its nice to share pies with them, I think that would be a great tradition to start. Giving the poor home made pies, nice poem Jan, have a great weekend.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 12:22:00 PM

It would be lovely pixie!:-) hugs Jan xx

Jack Horne

Date: 11/16/2018 1:04:00 PM

lovely sentiments here

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2018 12:20:00 PM

Thanks Jack. I never ever dreamed we would have foodbanks on our Island (but I am told by someone in the know that they are being abused which is even more sad) hugs Jan xx