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*I normally don't like notes with poems but, a couple of things: I thought it would be interesting to capture the moment of Jesus' execution from the viewpoint of a non-believer. in addition, I wrote it to point out that it is Jesus' death as an integrity keeping man, not his birth as a child, that saves us from our sins. **Disclaimer - the photo is for effect only. I believe Jesus was impaled on a simple upright stake. I was content to pass by on my way to Jerusalem with my basketful of leftover bread. A baker by trade, this is my busiest time of year. The Jews call it Passover. I call it profit. But the sky suddenly grows dark and I'm drawn to this rather bizarre spectacle on a hill called Golgotha by the Hebrews. I have witnessed men being executed here before, but this is different somehow. For one thing, the sky isn't just cloudy but sunless, starless, soulless. There are three execution stakes. The criminals look like scarecrows lit up by torches against an inky expanse. The one in the middle cries out in a tortured voice, "My God, my God, why have you forsaken me." Then I'm sure I hear him whisper, "It has been accomplished. Into your hands I surrender my spirit." There is a sign above his head that reads, "Jesus the Nazarene King of the Jews." Then it hits me. I've heard of this Jesus. Everyone has who is not living under a rock. It is said he has healed people of terrible diseases. Some reports suggest he has even raised the dead. Of course, I have never subscribed to Jewish fables. Just as I am musing it all over the ground below me shakes violently. My bread spills onto the ground, ruined. The Roman soldiers who wore mockingbird faces only a moment ago are now white as ghosts. One of them cries out, "Surely this was a son of the gods." I have never been a person of faith but I can tell you this, I will never forget this day. Some predict he will rise in three days. We shall see. a price paid in blood an end and a beginning faith born on a hill

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Date: 3/27/2024 11:27:00 AM
Jesus was nailed to a cross. His feet were both nailed to a stalk. He had to be loosely tied with strong ropes. Otherwise, I like your effort.
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Tom Woody
Date: 3/27/2024 1:19:00 PM
A common interpretation. Thx for visit
Date: 3/26/2024 8:40:00 PM
Kept my attention! Great work!
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Date: 3/27/2024 5:03:00 AM
Danke
Date: 1/29/2024 3:01:00 AM
Great reflection. Well done. Enjoyed it.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/29/2024 3:20:00 PM
Appreciate your time MM
Date: 1/21/2024 4:19:00 AM
Thanks a lot for the warm welcome here in PS. So grateful for visiting my page, your comment on my poem, "Almost there" is truly appreciated. I just read your poem..it is creatively penned, the imagery, the metaphors are amazing...in the midst of all these, I can see that your faith is growing. All I can say is that Jesus truly made a difference in my Life. I can never imagine my life without Him.
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Date: 1/21/2024 9:39:00 AM
Thx for visit Elena. I'll come see what you have new
Date: 1/19/2024 2:10:00 PM
Can you imagine the horror when they realized. When blood spurt into their eyes and caused them to see. Awesome poem and premise for poetry, Tom. (The Lord's execution, our salvation.) (This poem's execution, a loving ode, done well.)
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Date: 1/19/2024 3:34:00 PM
Much appreciate your commentary
Date: 1/12/2024 10:51:00 AM
Hello Tom. There are times an explanation is needed to explain the entry so never justify that or your work. Whether one is a believer or not the fact remains the story of Jesus will forever remain powerful and then some. Your entry proves that. Thank you for sharing your skilled talent. May today find you well. Happy New Year. Peace and Blessings (smile)
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/12/2024 1:28:00 PM
Thx so much for support Lisa
Date: 1/8/2024 7:38:00 AM
I liked the line about the Roman soldiers wearing mockingbird faces; interesting image--
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/12/2024 1:28:00 PM
Thx for read Keith
Date: 12/29/2023 12:15:00 AM
Interesting that you think that Jesus raising the dead is just jewish fables and yet you seem to believe the other things about him. Besides in the bible other prophets raise the dead to life too i recall so the fuss around jesus seems exaggerated and pointless. I find the bible all too confusing and contradictory. Yet you express things in an interesting impressive way. So Kudos!! ^^^^^^^^^^^>>><<<<<<<<<<<<<>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Plz also read and comment on my newest poem too.
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Date: 12/29/2023 4:58:00 AM
This is just a fictional account. Quite obviously I could not have been present two thousand years ago lol. The Bible can be logical and sensical. You just need help to understand it. Thx
Date: 12/25/2023 12:05:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this one. I tend to disagree with you in that I believe he was crucified on a cross, not put on a stake. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us. Sara K
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Date: 12/25/2023 12:32:00 PM
It's all about the original language terms used as opposed to the later Latin terms. Thx for visit
Date: 12/25/2023 10:23:00 AM
I really like this and told from this perspective
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Date: 12/25/2023 12:31:00 PM
Kewl. Thx
Date: 12/23/2023 12:41:00 PM
We'll it's always good when the good people win in the end from the point of view of the storyteller. Very interesting perspective, and it only adds to the story...making it more real. You have talent!
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Date: 12/23/2023 1:36:00 PM
That's a nice compliment. Thx
Date: 12/20/2023 1:53:00 PM
Narrative runs in your blood, Tommy, and Haibun poems are ideal to showcase your talents. Whether impaled on a stake or on a cross, I'm certain I'd fail the test! Regards // paul
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/20/2023 2:25:00 PM
Yes, I'm a storyteller at heart. Thx Paul
Date: 12/20/2023 6:33:00 AM
Hi Tom, I love how you wrote this from the perspective of a non-believer who seems very pragmatic. It is so impressive and truly shows your innate ability as a writer. Thanks for crafting it.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/20/2023 2:25:00 PM
Much thx Nancy
Date: 12/20/2023 12:57:00 AM
Wow your storytelling is top notch always, as if your reader is transported where the scene has actually happened. I loved the haiku at the end son much, faith born on a hill.. ah, what a soul-stirring moment captured in a simple verse! Lucky are the ones who witness something this huge and faith has been gifted to them.. truly brilliant as always! I always respect you for your strong faith that reflects in your pieces also.. great work!!
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/20/2023 2:25:00 PM
Very generous thx Ayesha
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Ayesha Iqbal
Date: 12/20/2023 12:58:00 AM
*so much.. not son much Sorry for the typos..
Date: 12/19/2023 11:50:00 AM
Powerful and creative haibun. I dont know much about this story but it surely Is told very well, ensuring your lines flow well and keeps the readers hooked till the ending. Has very dramatic effect too as you quote some lines too. I still need to try a haibun. Pleasure reading this. Well delivered
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/19/2023 1:20:00 PM
Thx ink
Date: 12/19/2023 9:37:00 AM
Well told, Woody; what brings anyone to Christ, is a personal revelation. A Christ presence in one's psyche that cannot not be explained, therefore, difficult to deny. Christ relevance, 2,000 years latter, cannot be because of literature alone -- no literature survives the entanglements of myth for long -- and all believers will attest to Christ being ever present, alive in his experience of life on a day to day basis. Alive enough so that he or she would die before deny. Blessings.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/19/2023 1:20:00 PM
Much appreciate the visit Joe
Date: 12/18/2023 6:27:00 AM
As always, Tom, your haibuns are thoughtfully written and filled with imagery. The term ‘non-believer’ is very misleading without definition. One can either be saying they don’t believe that a person by the name of Yeshua (Hebrew) who some called the Messiah existed, or one could be saying they don’t believe Jesus (Latin translation) called Christ is the son of a god that a religion is named after, and the religious belief that Constantine 1 of the Roman Empire converted to in 312 AD, which in 380 AD became the state religion of the Roman Empire and brutally enforced throughout. Or maybe both, Jesus Christ never existed, and was not the son of the God of Abraham, Isaac, and Jacob, or god incarnate.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/18/2023 12:51:00 PM
I think the key is the phrase, "Jewish fables." In other words, he apparently didn't believe the stories of the miracles being performed. On the other hand, maybe he eschewed the notion of a Jewish Messiah. Either way. Thx for stopping Dennis, and yes, I'm aware of Constantine and his fusion of church and state, hence the birth of Christendom
Date: 12/17/2023 9:29:00 PM
What a beautiful and powerful way you have contemplated on the crucifixion of Jesus Christ from the angle of a non believer! You have described it in such a way that it seems you have been a real eye witness there. Yes, it is His death that has bought redemption for all of us. But to die , one has to be born. ... :) Happy Christmas dear Tom.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/18/2023 5:17:00 AM
Thx so much Valsa. Yes, we can be thankful a savior was born into the world. Sadly, for most children (and perhaps adults) Santa has become more important
Date: 12/17/2023 8:02:00 PM
Very powerful write and well penned my friend. I've wondered sometimes in the past, if I was there at the time what would I done or felt. May you and your family have a wonderful Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. Hugs eve
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/17/2023 8:03:00 PM
I'm sure I would have wept profusely. Thx Eve for visit
Date: 12/17/2023 3:33:00 PM
wow this was so creatively done Tom, I can only imagine what really happened back there, your words are very effective, thanks for sharing, :)
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/17/2023 3:41:00 PM
Always another angle to consider. Thx Rose
Date: 12/17/2023 12:47:00 PM
I almost thought you were really there Woody. Nicely narrated. "The sky isn't just cloudy but sunless, starless, soulless." I loved these, It was indeed soulless.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/17/2023 1:14:00 PM
Yes it was. Have a nice week Tonye
Date: 12/17/2023 10:48:00 AM
Your story telling is exceptional, Tom and the Senryu was powerful and full of hope for all of humanity. A FAV my friend. I also want to wish you and yours, a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year Bill & Sara Baker
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/17/2023 12:19:00 PM
Yessir and thx for visit
Date: 12/17/2023 8:18:00 AM
I agree with Charlotte... you write very well... not try a one with lust.. lol
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/17/2023 9:21:00 AM
Thx SO
Date: 12/17/2023 5:05:00 AM
Your story resonates in echoes of faith and miracles. Splendid write, Tom.
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/17/2023 5:15:00 AM
Appreciated Veej
Date: 12/17/2023 3:13:00 AM
is this your antidote to the plethora of christmas poems currently being posted? i don't generally comment on religious subject matter, so i'll just focus on the writing itself, and say your prose writing is strong, as always, and you tell an engaging story
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/17/2023 5:15:00 AM
Ha! You know me too well. I usually post this around the Spring, but felt moved to do so now. Thx for compliment
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