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April 27, 2024

~ Third Place ~
Premiere Contest: Psychedelic
Sponsor: Kai Michael Neumann

~ Seventh Place ~
Premiere contest: No 1308
Sponsor: Brian Strand

~ Second Place ~
Premiere Contest: Surreality
Sponsor: Tom Woody


 

The girl and her smile straddle the rainbow neon hair the fluid cascades of northern lights seafoam cloak the ripples outgrown by the shore she adores the breeze adorned with gems emeralds fly from silk strings in the wind kites made of ruby and sapphire and pearl sit on a picnic checkerboard in envy-green grass betting on play-dates with zephyrs —dice cubes roll beady-black-eyes at their folly she chases books as they sail from trees fingers stretch to net helter-skelter hummingbirds she leafs through slices of fruitcake each nutty page a silver frame of insane; crows croon Crosby tunes two baby paisley owls drive a car the car does a hop-scotch down bourbon street field-mouse-flowers meow the moon jumps over the cow …she sings the world needs more bumblebees! a two-masted schooner scries water for its soul the palm of a leaf offers a diamond ring palm trees pull up anchor and hover the sunset she laughs as nuns ride upside-down the roller-coaster rim her dreamcatchers sticky and tricky as spiderwebs as virgins lose the reins of sugar-cookie-colored horses tilling confetti rain and puppet gardens where wild-child wombs and peacock plumes bloom

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Date: 12/7/2024 1:31:00 AM
Hi Susan. Congratulations on your win. Wonderful poetry. Sending you loving wishes, Kai
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Susan Ashley
Date: 12/7/2024 1:30:00 PM
Dear Kai, thank you the honor of my poem’s placement in your contest. Your kind comments and congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 12/5/2024 6:36:00 AM
Dearest friend and poetess Susan, this is a fantastic poem on the tempting pull of psychedelic substances and the following spiral into addiction and sorrow. It depicts a journey from the first pleasure and escape they provide to the ultimate turmoil and agony they wreak on the individual. Congratulations on your contest win!
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Date: 12/5/2024 10:05:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, it's always wonderful when your grace my poem with your gracious visit. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me. Your sincere congrats are truly heartwarming, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 12/5/2024 3:32:00 AM
I remember having read this fanciful poem sometime ago. Glad I could read it once again. This exploration into the whimsical, dreamy and surrealistic world of the little girl is rewarded with unexpected thrills over and again. "she laughs as nuns ride upside-down the roller-coaster rim/ her dreamcatchers sticky and tricky as spiderwebs" This reference to the nun's roller coaster ride made me smile. Congratulations on your great win, dear Susan.
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Date: 12/5/2024 9:44:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, indeed, you have visited my poem twice to share the beauty of your comments. I revel in the gift, the double dose of delight for your poetic presence gracing my poem. Thank you for your uplifting words, kind congrats and for sharing in this whimsical world with me. I'm glad the rollercoaster nuns made you smile, my sweet friend. Your visit makes me smile. Warmest wishes dearest Valsa.. ~Susan
Date: 12/4/2024 9:16:00 PM
congratulations dear poet. refreshing read it is. cheers.
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Date: 12/5/2024 8:36:00 AM
Dear Thriveni, it's wonderful to see you! We haven't crossed poetic paths for a while and I revel in your visit. Thank you, for your kind congrats and heartwarming words, they are a delight to receive. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 12/4/2024 6:43:00 PM
This gem exudes a whimsical energy with vivid imagery that paints a psychedelic world capturing the contest's theme so gracefully! The blending of natural elements creates a surrealistic ambience yet underlying it is a subtle mystery of life's uncertainties. Congratulations on your awesome win. A fave for me. Stay prolific and warm as you are. ^__^ JCB
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Date: 12/5/2024 8:34:00 AM
Dear Jcb, soulful poet friend, it's wonderful to see you! It's been way to long since our poetic paths have crossed. Thank you for joining in the "whimsical energy" and imagery of this poem with me. I revel in your enjoyment of my verse. Thank you for your beautiful thoughts and heartwarming congrats. I am honored by the gift of your fave. Your are ever appreciated my sweet poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 12/4/2024 10:02:00 AM
Haha! I see you're getting some mileage outta this bad girl. I have a confession: my last three entries were all old poems. Been lazy of late
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Date: 12/4/2024 4:27:00 PM
Dear Tom, I am haha! I have a soft spot in my heart for this poem. I’ve come to really appreciate it. My last three contest entries were/are old poems too lol! But hey, if they fit the contest bill, why not? It gives older poems a chance to shine in the sun again if they make it on the win list. Thank you for stopping by. Your both visit and confession are appreciated :) Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Suze
Date: 5/27/2024 1:32:00 AM
A splendid poem, dear Susan!
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Date: 5/28/2024 12:39:00 PM
Dear Gregory, thank you for your gracious visit and heartwarming comments. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/14/2024 7:44:00 PM
Hi Susan, Words fail me having read this engaging and indeed most enchanting piece. Thought-provoking, image rich, poetic devices abound, immaculate transition between lines are among the many salient features. Congratulations on your success in Brian Strand contest. Your kind review of my entry is much appreciated Warm regards Howard
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Date: 5/16/2024 6:03:00 PM
Dear Howard, it's a thrill to receive your valued thoughts. Thank you for sharing in the whimsy of this poem with me and for your kind congrats. It's gratifying to receive such wonderful praise from one whose poetry I hold in such high regard. Your poetic artistry is striking and enchanting. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/11/2024 11:34:00 AM
Dear Susan, Back with hearty congratulations on your well-deserved win with this fantastic poem
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Date: 5/14/2024 5:46:00 PM
Dear Sotto, I relish your return visit and your warm-hearted congrats. Thank you for your kindness, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/6/2024 6:40:00 PM
I am lost in a world of chimera.... ! What all varied scenes are knit together to form a sunny, glowing surrealistic panorama. "she chases books as they sail from trees fingers stretch to net helter-skelter hummingbirds she leafs through slices of fruitcake each nutty page a silver frame of insane;" In her world of fancy, there are things to quench her mind's appetite and things to titillate her tongue! Here images cascade down one on another in an unbroken chain. I feel so humored and delighted by your freak of fancy. Great poetry as always, my highly gifted friend. Congratulations on your great win, dear Susan
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Date: 5/7/2024 6:34:00 PM
Dearest Valsa, I am simply overjoyed by your amazing response to my poem. I revel in your generous spirit and your willingness to explore the "glowing surrealistic panorama" with me. I am humbled and honored by your presence, by your kindness, by your uplifting words. Thank you, my dear friend, poetess extraordinaire. Your comments and congrats are cherished, your friendship is treasured and your stellar poetry is ever admired. Warmest wishes to you, dearest Valsa.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 8:33:00 PM
Holy Salvador Dali, but isn't this the knees' bees?! I recommend a long rest, Susan, and no more 'bikini-weenie-teenie' or 'bored-ing surf'~ Dr. Q B Ism
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Date: 5/7/2024 6:24:00 PM
Dear Gershon, your comments are certainly surreal lol! Thank you for mentioning "Salvador Dali" on my poem's page and for sharing your grand thoughts with me. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/4/2024 11:53:00 AM
Whoa this is beyond creative and artistic! I felt like i was observing a moving panorama of an artwork painted by one that has seen so much and beyond and captured them all into one! Surrealism at its finest! I bet if an artist sees this they would get inspired to paint what your words did convey! You have a way with words and inspiring readers. And this is no exception! Just love it! Especially “ nuns ride upside-down the roller-coaster rim dreamcatchers sticky and tricky as spiderwebs” made me smile hah! So clever! And brilliant! Your use of poetic techniques too here is impeccable. From assonance to metaphors and imagery to alliterations! Very imaginative take and can see why this scored well! Congratulations! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/5/2024 5:40:00 PM
Dear Ink, golden poetess, I am gratified by your thoughtful and thrilling response to my poem. How wonderful it would be if an artist could paint my poem! That would truly be amazing. I'm so glad to know you especially enjoyed "nuns ride upside-down the roller-coaster rim/dreamcatchers sticky and tricky as spiderwebs" - I got a kick out of it too when it came into my mind haha! Thank you for your kindness, dear Ink, your shining presence never ceases to inspire me.. you are ever appreciated my sweet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/2/2024 5:57:00 AM
This poem is awesome and reminds me of a handful of songs that are not linear in composition. Imagery flows from your fantasy and emotions are high. Your poetry is of so high a quality that I'm always afraid to read, knowing my poor specimens. Best for a win.
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Date: 5/2/2024 12:43:00 PM
Dear Victor, I’m curious about what you mentioned.. what songs does this poem remind you of? I would love to listen to them.
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Date: 5/2/2024 7:44:00 AM
Dear Victor, it's wonderful to see you. I'm so happy to know you enjoyed my poem. Your comments are a thrill to receive and bring a big smile. Thank you for sharing in the surreal, fantastical imagery of this piece, it was a lot of fun to create. I am humbled and honored by your kind words as I am always amazed by the soulful depths of your enchanting poetry. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 4/30/2024 11:35:00 PM
Wow. This is awesome. Congrats in the contest
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Date: 5/1/2024 5:59:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. Your gracious visit and kind congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/29/2024 6:01:00 PM
What a wonderful whimsical write with lots of fun imagination imagery that kept me engaged! Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 4/30/2024 10:34:00 AM
Dear Karen, I'm delighted by your gracious visit and wonderful response to my poem. Thank you for sharing your uplifting thoughts and for sharing in the imagination of this piece. Warmest wishes my poetry friend.. ~Susan
Date: 4/29/2024 11:47:00 AM
Congratulations... WOW!!! What a wonderful/creative write. Love It... Have a fun day writing away.....................
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Date: 4/30/2024 10:19:00 AM
Dear Paula, your kind congrats and uplifting comments are received with joy. Thank you my sweet friend for your wonderful words. I'm glad you "love it", that means the world to me. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/28/2024 12:52:00 PM
I am thrilled you entered my humble little contest, yet not surprised you would place high. I wouldn't have guessed this gem was yours as it's not really your style so much, which makes it all the more pleasant. So fanciful and dreamy. Is there anything you can't write? Nicely done Suze
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Date: 4/30/2024 10:17:00 AM
Dear Tom, I couldn't resist entering your fun and fantastic contest. Composing this piece was a wonderful learning (poetic) experience. Thank you for the honor of my poem's placement in your challenging contest. Your comments are a joy to receive. It's truly gratifying to share the podium with the gifted poets/poetesses on your esteemed list. Aww, I'm so glad you enjoyed the little "moon/cow" twist :) Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Suze
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Date: 4/28/2024 1:18:00 PM
PS. Love the twisted take on the cow jumped over the moon. Way cool
Date: 4/27/2024 1:48:00 PM
Susan…..what an amazing poem of magic and enchantment …..vivid wonderful imagery! You are one gifted lady! Debx
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Date: 4/30/2024 10:11:00 AM
Dear Deb, I'm delighted by your gracious visit and humbled by your wonderfully kind comments. Thank you my sweet friend for gracing my poem with your lovely presence. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/27/2024 12:03:00 PM
Dearest Susan, you crafted a magical poem centered on a girl's exploration of her environment, which is filled with artistic and surreal themes, and which praises creativity, whimsy, and the beauty of nature. Your use of colorful metaphors and detailed words transports the reader to a fantastical realm. The use of the words "neon," "northern lights," "emeralds," "ruby," and "sapphire" conjures up images of fairytale magic. When inanimate things are personified, such in "crows croon" and "palm trees pull up anchor," they become alive. "The world needs more bumblebees" and "the moon jumps over the cow" are a couple of absurd and witty lines that add to the poem's whimsical tone.
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Date: 4/30/2024 10:02:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, I am delighted to see you! Thank you for your amazing remarks on my poem. I'm so glad you enjoyed this girl's fun journey through surrealistic realms where the real and the unreal blur in an abstract haze of unrestrained imagination. Your wonderful presence and inspiring words are treasured my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/27/2024 11:54:00 AM
i think i may've just read the top winning poem! your writing never ceases to amaze me, and this is such an enjoyable (and trippy!) tour de force, all leading to that last line with its stellar internal rhyme :)
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Date: 4/30/2024 9:57:00 AM
Dear Charlotte, I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem. Your poetic presence is inspiring and truly appreciated. Thank you for the honor of your most generous comments. I am humbled by your words, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

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