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Fractured Family

broken families like fractured glass scattered, sharp edges cutting, bleeding once-perfect images of harmony now lives severed by pain mom at one end of the boxing match dad on the other side torn children shuffled in between into a holiday lens they once smiled picture-perfect family greetings discarded in shards joyful season ends

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Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 8/5/2014 4:29:00 AM

7 rate too!

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 8/5/2014 4:28:00 AM

just rereading my short list of favorite poems this morning and want to remind you how awesome this piece is Carolyn:)

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 6/25/2011 10:34:00 AM

Such a sad but true commentary on the many fractured families today. Hope your recovery is fast Carolyn.

Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/25/2011 3:44:00 AM

Dear Caroly, I also hope that your health will improve soon! I was deeply moved by this poem!....All the best and let us both hope for our improvement of health!...Love, Gert

Robert Ball

Date: 6/24/2011 12:06:00 PM

God knows that I like your poetry all the time, hope this finds you in good health, I pray that you are going to be fine. In God's plan all is possible, just posted a poem. Thought you of all people would like it, God bless my friend.

James Peranteau

Date: 6/22/2011 7:34:00 PM

If you only knew dear poet, how this write has affected this soul this day ! I was in court once again, pressing on on Noah and my togetherness...it is lasting so God did judge ! Blessings dear one...much love, james

Sidney Hall Mad Poet

Date: 6/22/2011 1:48:00 PM

WOW Carolyn you caught explained my marriage perfectly. Thanks for you lovely comments

James Foulk

Date: 6/22/2011 10:21:00 AM

thank you for putting Not in Vain in your favorites i am honored by that. will be putting on my new poems in a little awhile

Wilma Neels

Date: 6/22/2011 9:47:00 AM

You bring the lost of family connection across brilliantly in this write of yours Carolyn.. All the best for the contest hun.. Love you Wilma

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 6/22/2011 9:38:00 AM

You have painted such a true and realistic image of a broken and fractured family. A great painting from your skilled and evergreen pen showing the sad colors of a broken and scattered family. The poem leaves the reader to think on such a situation very seriously. My good wishes for your entry in the contest my friend and thanks for your kind and precious comments on my poem on father's day. Love and best wishes...Ravindra...Carolyn Devonshire

Kacey Greenlee

Date: 6/22/2011 8:13:00 AM

Very intense write.Truly poetic....And again it is a wonderful feeling I get when I feel connected to a poem.Thanks again for your support and understanding on my''Never Finished'' poem.Happy to have shared a moment with you.It will forever be difficult to not have our mothers' anymore but I know we carry their spirits with us.Have a great day love....

Audrey Haick

Date: 6/22/2011 7:39:00 AM

Perfect entry for the contest, Carolyn. You paint this picture very well with all the colors and shades of a fractured family. Painfully realistic. This will do very well. Not only is it well written but I am sure as many can relate. Soup mail. Love, Annalise

James Foulk

Date: 6/21/2011 8:51:00 PM

thank you for commenting on my poetry. Please check your soup mail.

James Foulk

Date: 6/21/2011 2:26:00 PM

this was a great and moving piece of poetry. good luck in the contest. thank you for commenting on Rain drops yes it was hard at times growing up without my dad there, all of my friends had dads, but mine would come around every two or three years. sometimes more but not often.

Joe Maverick

Date: 6/21/2011 2:12:00 PM

A most feeling and moving piece Carolyn, hope it does well in the contest.!Most of all may it make that (difference) to some peoples live's..

Jack Horne

Date: 6/21/2011 1:45:00 PM

This is very powerful, Carolyn - a sure fire winner : )

Diane Locksley

Date: 6/21/2011 12:46:00 PM

This describes perfectly the way broken families suffer. There's a lot of emotion in this poem and I like the use of broken glass as a metaphor. Good luck in the contest.

Daver Austin

Date: 6/21/2011 11:56:00 AM

As an ex-school teacher, I have seen the results of family boxing matches. Your "fractured glass fits so well. "Discarded in shards." HOw sad. LOve, daver

Zzzzz Zzzzz

Date: 6/21/2011 11:16:00 AM

This is a brilliant write, Carolyn! The poetic mood is suitably sombre and well paced. The metaphors and imagery are perfect. It will take something really special to beat this...you could be heading for another gold medal here! Love, Robert. P.S. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work.

George Aul

Date: 6/21/2011 10:19:00 AM

Great thought...good luck in the contest.... George

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/21/2011 9:53:00 AM

I think, it is from practical feelings without any doubt. It has been happening in the life of families continuing since society comes in to existence. Children can feel the pains of that discarded shards with whom such things happened where others can hear only about that pain but feels less. Nice, very nice your pen is and your writing.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/21/2011 9:24:00 AM

thankxx so very much Carolyn for my 9th place in the co-sponsored contest with Jack .. a wonderful chap.. am honored to have been chosen with so many wonderful winners..much appreciation..luv..

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 6/21/2011 8:26:00 AM

almost forgot to put my money where my big mouth is ....7 ALL DAY! I'd forget my head if my neck wasn't superglued to it!

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 6/21/2011 8:23:00 AM

Well, as a person whose free verse personal collection fills several shoe boxes, I may be a tad bias....But HOT DANG! This is a very, and I do mean very...Amazing poem. I thought my poem had a good chance to do well in this contest, but I am not feeling so confident after reading this!I'd love to see some more of these from your catalog! I will check your archives. Please give me a heads up if you have more of this nature. WOW> 7 rate, and to my very short list of favorites. I have less than 10!

Renee Kelly

Date: 6/21/2011 7:38:00 AM

This poem perfectly depicts the shattering of divorcing families. I can feel the pain. Good luck in the contest, Carolyn!