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Five Senses In Five Lines

The musk of damp earth after a coating of autumnal rain permeates, Smoke upon distant chimneys, spiralled clumsily, enveloped by the evening sky, Leaves underfoot make a crunching chorus, harmonious in their decay, Mulled wine, offers a welcoming warmth on this crisp night, Eyes feast as the setting sun bids, a blazing farewell to the day. Billie J ©?

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Jeanette Brewin

Date: 10/22/2023 2:49:00 AM

A lovely poem. Well done.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/1/2023 2:23:00 PM

perfect title for your poem. You beautifully captured all the five sense in five lines. Artistic for sure. Enjoyed the read, Sara

Billie Jama
Date: 10/9/2023 6:50:00 AM

I'm grateful for you lovely comment, thank you Sara

Bill Baker

Date: 9/28/2023 5:10:00 PM

Well done, Billie. Very creative and a nice read this evening. Smiles and Blessings to you, Bill

Billie Jama
Date: 10/9/2023 6:48:00 AM

Thank you Bill, your support is appreciated greatly

Ink Empress

Date: 9/28/2023 12:25:00 PM

I love the sound of crunching chorus and the smell and all the other senses you’ve touched with your word weaving here sis! You’ve nailed it! Love that blazing farewell too. So good to see u posting here. Another one of my faves from you! You amaze me with your artistic skills

Billie Jama
Date: 10/9/2023 6:46:00 AM

Oh dear Ink thank you sis for your encouraging and praisful comment. It actually uplifted me. Your support is wonderful

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/27/2023 8:16:00 PM

Ohh wow!! The five senses all incorporated in one write! The smell of petrichor, the feel of smoke, the sound of leaves, the taste of wine and the sight of setting sun.. Wow!! Such a profound and unique poem with descriptive lines and beautiful wordplay.. Absolutely enjoyed reading this.. So artistically inked!

Billie Jama
Date: 10/9/2023 6:44:00 AM

Oh my thank you for this lovely comment. I'm so glad you enjoyed

Karen Jones

Date: 9/27/2023 2:07:00 PM

Love this!

Billie Jama
Date: 10/9/2023 6:42:00 AM

Thank you