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First Date

clouds sail across the sky-
my life     weather-stained
with years
the drums   of time   slowed now

my cane clicks on the path as I walk
to my favorite park bench
by the river's edge
where ducks   drift   in serenity

the quiet is disturbed suddenly
by the roar of a motorcycle
and a couple come to sit
on a bench   not far   from me

he is no typical teenager for sure
a black leather jacket
and a bad boy look
so he says,  "what do you    like to do?" 

the girl is young and just blushes
I could tell this was a first date
he leans over for a kiss
and she    turns    away

he says, "your hair is so pretty"
(I look) her hair is a flowing river
she seems awkward and shy
unsure    of this   wild boy

suddenly he says " we should take a trip!"
"a trip? where? she seems scared
"yeah, we could go down to Daytona Beach"
her eyes look at me wild

and I could not help myself and spoke up
"go home little girl to your parents"
they both seem shocked that I spoke
he mutters,   "noisy    old lady!"

then,  he jumps up and yells "forget it!"
and roars away on his bike in anger
the girl sits for a time
then smiles    at me    and leaves . . .

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August 16, 2017

Free Verse/First Date
Copyright Protected, ID 930137


Written for the contest, First Date
sponsor, Kim Rodriques

Second Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Roper Avatar
August 20, 2017 at 10:29 PM
Congratulations on your win , Broken Wings. Beautiful descriptive write.
Canerdy Avatar
August 18, 2017 at 2:08 PM
I LOVE this, Constance. Congrats on your well-deserved win! Janice
Allison Avatar
August 18, 2017 at 1:15 PM
What a fabulous descriptive story you penned Constance congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
Lane Avatar
August 18, 2017 at 9:26 AM
well done on this one, Constance... so much better than.....
Rodrigues Avatar
August 18, 2017 at 8:45 AM
He was obviously not looking for love, just a fling. Congratulations on your win!
Pigeon Tart Avatar
August 17, 2017 at 10:34 AM
Nice! :) xomo
Sivey Avatar
August 17, 2017 at 4:38 AM
Excellent write Constance! I surely loved reading this exceptional poem this morning! You have delighted me by your "First Date" poem, it was so spectacular I read it several times and was enthralled each time, Great story line! Awesome Work!!
Parker Avatar
August 16, 2017 at 5:41 PM
excellent write, a very visual poem, at least you didn't have to hit him with your cane
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