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This is written for the contest sponsored by tom woodys about titanic. I have actually been in a bit of similar situations as I do travel alot by boat here, I've had experiences where I've been stranded in the middle of the ocean, waiting for another boat to come rescue etc as well as I've traveled in worst of all seas that reminds me of faith and life during those times. So here i focused more on thoughts that run through my head during such situations.. we all think of God especially in such calamities.

 

 

 

To my life that betrayed the butterflies~
          within my chrysalis mind, 
forgive my flawed dialect, 
I no longer look upon sakura skies,
awaiting a ray of fluffy lies, 
I’m more than just a speck of salt
      in this ocean of fluttering deceit. 

As the midnight silence
twists into witching woes, 
I hear the sirens echoing
the sound of  the 
              seventh trumpet,
yet my igloo heart 
screeches louder 
than the roaring waves 
pushing me to the cusp of an 
     inevitable apocalypse.

When raindrop dreams 
I drape on my distressed skin;
a white gold necklace
with heart-shaped sapphires~
shatter into a shadowed
sea of broken emeralds,
I think of life beyond and 
above heavy onyx clouds 
carrying unspoken prayers,
wishing an archangel 
would descend,
wrap me in ivory wings,
take me to a pristine shore, 
where I can rewrite sins
scribbled across 
pages of procrastination,
in an anthology of ignorance.

Perhaps, I could be the voice
for the forsaken faces,
and forgotten phases.
I remember I’ve stayed still~
frozen like the frigid waters, 
shackled by society’s 
    ice green arrogance,
oblivious to the pleas 
                      of the innocent.
Now I weep, 
while rolling memories, 
haunt me in neon refrains,
I’m swimming 
across titanic seas,
like a lost sojourner,
seeking for a glimpse of 
the floral milky-way 
to fill my drowning heart 
with lunar light,
to be the Noah that 
ignites my ark of fire.

But life is a pre-written cruise,
orchestrated by the divine creator,
and tides, they rage and rise,
to fall into flatlined 
    ripples of regrets,
unfurling footprints 
of past journeys,
amidst crestfallen stars 
beneath crystalline 
    currents of chaos. 

I’ve learned through the 
beginning of this end~
a prelude to an 
empyrean symphony,
that destiny has a 
way of dressing 
salt-soaked silhouettes 
with an attire of angst 
And I think of the jewels,
the twinkling trinkets
that couldn’t keep 
me afloat,
the silk that couldn’t 
be my anchor 
nor the vessel 
  that guides me home. 
Although life after this 
temporary madness,
is a coral garden of 
ethereal gravity. 
There I shall build my 
marine tales a paddle raft,
let it glide towards 
a rising sun of saffron
that never sets,
like timeless reefs~
I can slumber within 
the cerulean arms of serenity,
as I fare thee well.
     

Even the grandest  of all the vessels      
            shall come to an infinite halt,
the master of this fleeting journey 
            is the almighty above, 
so when the end comes crawling, 
          surrender to the 
             elysian light beyond~
allow the angels to guide us back
      to a halcyon realm of rose gold eternity. 

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Date: 2/10/2024 8:05:00 AM
Congratulations Ink Empress on gold winning poem masterfully interlacing beauty of nature and colors of emotions.
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Date: 1/18/2024 9:43:00 AM
A fabulous win, Ink in this top-draw Contest. You certainly hit your stride here and all the emotion of that tragedy comes through. Very nice :)
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Date: 1/18/2024 5:02:00 AM
My belated Congratulations on your trophy win dear sweet friend. I knew it would be placed top. I am sorry I couldn't log into poetry Soup as I have been away for a couple of days traveling with my family. Again I have to catch up with so much. I am so proud of you !
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Date: 1/16/2024 6:31:00 PM
I love this poem, one of my all time favorites. I would find it hard to choose a stanza. Each one a contender. Super awesome poem, Ink Empress.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/17/2024 6:20:00 AM
That's high praise from such a talented poet!
Date: 1/16/2024 3:45:00 PM
A well deserved win. Big congrats
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Date: 1/16/2024 7:10:00 AM
Dear Ink Poetess, Congratulations on your first place in Mr. Woody's Titanic contest. The whole poem is superb but I especially liked the "shackled by society's ice green arrogance". I got a touch sea sick also. LOL.
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Date: 1/16/2024 6:59:00 AM
"destiny has a way of dressing salt-soaked silhouettes with an attire of angst" - A very in-depth writing. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/16/2024 3:52:00 AM
Very beautiful and full of emotions! Congratulations
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Date: 1/16/2024 1:00:00 AM
Omg, heartiest congratulations my dear Ink, you're the best!! I'm so happy for your lovely win, keep weaving magnificent poetry :) you deserve all the appreciation and accolades!
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Date: 1/16/2024 12:14:00 AM
My dear sweet Inky, a big congratulations on this Masterpiece. You are so deserving. So happy for you, as Tommy says the last stanza was Gold, I very strongly agree...Love and hugs xxx
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Date: 1/15/2024 10:47:00 PM
Congrats on this masterful piece and your first place finish.
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Date: 1/15/2024 5:49:00 PM
Congrats, INK!
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Date: 1/15/2024 5:06:00 PM
Inky this is the truth, I literally got goosebumps when I read this. You toned down the fluff a bit and wrote one of the best poems I've ever had the pleasure to read. While I personally don't believe in fate or predestination, I recognize many do, and my poem reflected beliefs different from mine too. I'm not one to quote lines back but that last stanza was absolute gold!
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 6:18:00 PM
Thank you so much tomsz, my friend from hong kong is here for holidays with me and she is christian and she loved this poem and she said the same that she loved the last stanza the most. And i told her ill let the judge know haha. Im so honored and truly grateful. I didnt expect to win at all! Thank you again. Truly honored as i know how honest you are in your judgment, whenever i make it with you silent one or craig it just makes me happy! Grateful
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/15/2024 6:05:00 PM
Idk it won't let me do anything else and everything shows finalized so maybe it will update in morning? Idk. I know others have had problems too with contest glitches.
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 5:48:00 PM
Oh wow i woke up to this and i am like , no way! The end must be near i made it in the books of tom woody! Hah Thats an achievement tomsz , thank you so very much. Truly. Ah you noticed the rawness omg! You’ve literally made my day! Btw, why cant i see winners list on winners.. i think theres a glitch. It also says “ NA” for me. You might have to unlock n redo . Im grateful thank you again! Im still speechless.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/15/2024 5:06:00 PM
Congrats on first place win!
Date: 1/15/2024 12:30:00 AM
A pleasure reading this. Always full talent on your writes.
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 2:51:00 AM
Thank you always for your kind and generous support truly grateful
Date: 1/14/2024 1:31:00 PM
Your evocative poem leaves me breathless Ink! Dramatic and masterfully written, the poem's imagery is also quite beautiful, as your images always are. Kindest regards. :)
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 3:11:00 AM
Thank you so much means alot coming from a talented poet like you truly grateful
Date: 1/14/2024 12:01:00 PM
A moving missive with a scriptural feel. A pleasure to have dropped by.
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 3:12:00 AM
Thank you for dropping by
Date: 1/14/2024 11:25:00 AM
A noble poem of beauty, I found the steadying words to give hope. Your poems are always beautiful.
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 3:15:00 AM
You are so kind dear hilda. Thank you so very much always
Date: 1/13/2024 5:52:00 PM
A beautifully written entry for the contest, Ink, a FAV for my list, my dear friend. I've missed reading your soulful poetry and was glad I had some time today to visit poetry soup and your poetry. So many beautiful passages within, a fav for me is, "where I can rewrite sins scribbled across pages of procrastination, in an anthology of ignorance." It would take a long time for me to rewrite all of them. I'll need an eternity of Love and grace to comfort me. Out of space again. Blessings
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 3:19:00 AM
Dear Bill, im so pleased to see you around, i hope you are ok, its such an honor to receive a fave and also your sincere feedback, and i feel the same. I hope to see you posting soon again. Sending you light today and always
Date: 1/13/2024 3:32:00 PM
I ventured similarly by seeing fate as an equal power to my own, accepting the face of it by not dwelling on its eventuality but by prepping the groundwork worthy of entry, well done my good and faithful servant--words that any saint would have loved to hear. Thanks, Fave, Ink Empress, Aloha, William
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 3:19:00 AM
Dear William, what an honor to receive your kind and encouraging feedback. Thank you so much for the fave too. So grateful
Date: 1/13/2024 2:42:00 PM
Ink, absolutely beautiful, so wonderfully penned, a FAV, blessings, Constance
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 3:23:00 AM
Ah dear constance im truly grateful for your visit and fave and blessings, thank you so very much always
Date: 1/13/2024 9:29:00 AM
This poem about the exploration of life's peace, serenity amidst turmoil and betrayal revolves around the struggle with inner conflicts. The poem delves into the themes of resilience, hope, and fate. The diction is rich and evocative, using vivid imagery. The word choice is poignant and reflective, with the use of symbols such as butterflies, sakura skies, sirens, raindrop dreams, and jewels to depict the complexities of life. This a fave. And thanks for my placement in your contest.
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/13/2024 9:32:00 AM
Ah thank you dr sotto im so glad you found my poem good enough as always, im grateful . You deserve the placement, thank you for supporting my contests too
Date: 1/13/2024 8:28:00 AM
Well, I knew you would pull one out for this contest, and it's beautiful like everything else you write, especially showing your emotions upon being in fear. and in the end, we have to give in to the relief that will soon await us.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/14/2024 12:39:00 PM
You are welcome
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/13/2024 9:29:00 AM
Hah silent one said the same, im surprised i managed to do something, just did it to support tom, also i saw titanic song after a long time made me want to do. I loved the movie. Thank you so much dear andrea always for your kindness
Date: 1/13/2024 7:16:00 AM
I don’t know why but these thoughts come to mind ~ Let us simplify the symphony of conflicting emotions by forgiving others as well as ourselves of misdemeanours caused by ignorance for when we recognise the truth of oneness forged by divine magnetism in the bosom of love, all conflicts are resolved automatically and all opposites dissolve magically.
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/13/2024 9:34:00 AM
So good to hear your thoughts on this poem dear seeker, im grateful, and yes forgiveness is the key for healing and inner peace; very deep comment. Thank you so much
Date: 1/13/2024 5:59:00 AM
An interesting approach, only you would be so metaphorically poetic in death.. Your poetic expression in 'To My Life' is a masterful start of emotion, weaving together the fragility of existence, the weight of past regrets, and the profound desire for transcendence. The metaphor of the chrysalis mind and the butterflies within symbolizes personal growth and transformation, while the imagery of sakura skies and fluffy lies conveys a sense of disillusionment.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/15/2024 5:07:00 PM
I love raw!
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/13/2024 9:35:00 AM
Oh i thought this was a bit too raw and not metaphorical as i am usually, i felt w bit exposed, however thank you so much for reading and leaving your thoughts. Im grateful for your support and poetic presence always
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Silent One
Date: 1/13/2024 6:00:00 AM
The vivid language and sensory details, such as raindrop dreams and shattered white gold necklaces, paint a poignant picture of the speaker's internal turmoil. The use of colours and gemstones adds a layer of visual richness, enhancing the depth of the emotional journey... Best of luck in the contest dearest..
Date: 1/13/2024 5:38:00 AM
So these are thoughts that go through your mind during an incident of being on a boat at sea that might go under. Wow~~ Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Sara K
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Ink Empress
Date: 1/15/2024 3:35:00 AM
Thank you for your comment
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