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Eidolon and Raven, by Suzette Richards - image generated.

FRENCH SONNET: abba abba cc and the last quatrain: ~deed/dccd/dede

All 14 lines in Alexandrine metre (iambic hexameter—12 syllables per line with optional caesurae). Quatrains, couplet (placed after the VOLTA), and ending with a quatrain.

The welcome eidolons that through our conscience flow, bidden by times of trouble and the skills we lack in order to withstand relentless whips that crack over our heads on a daily basis; fears grow. Even restless spirits that manifest soft glow, the portent that’s announced by the ravens as black as the crafts that are punishable on the rack, professed their intentions pure as the driven snow. Hold fast to your daydreams for if these dreams should die Life’s a broken-winged bird which can no longer fly. Life is a barren field so others may seed thoughts, aimed at breaking our will which can’t withstand eerie spectre of ambitions as we become weary of ambiguous praise; their fawning comes to nought.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/8/2023 1:29:00 PM

wow, I need to remember yours when I try this out, as an example of how to do this form. GREAT job.

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/13/2023 9:17:00 AM

Many thanks, Andrea :)

Bill Baker

Date: 10/7/2023 4:14:00 PM

Intriguing form for a sonnet, Suzette. Well written I liked both the flow and the logic of your thoughts in this sonnet. Have a pleasant weekend! Bill

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/7/2023 11:17:00 PM

I love to try the many authentic sonnet variations (opposed to the pseudo forms). Some examples are posted here and most are in my book Su's Little Songs.

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/7/2023 11:17:00 PM

Have a great weekend as well :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/6/2023 12:07:00 PM

I can't wait to try a French sonnet, fascinating!

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/6/2023 2:31:00 PM

Do tag me when you have done one, Anaya :)

Silent One

Date: 10/6/2023 11:56:00 AM

What an excellent sonnet... flows and rhymes so well..

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/6/2023 2:31:00 PM

Thank you, SO :)

Tom Woody

Date: 10/6/2023 8:50:00 AM

Interesting poem Suzette. Iambic meter is a tough nut to crack, but otherwise your poem holds our interest. Got some mystery to it. And I like the line about ambiguous praise. Give me real any day or none at all

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/7/2023 4:58:00 AM

This poem is merely to illustrate the versatility of the alexandrine, and not the premier poem for the contest. I wrote examples of the COUPLETS for this contest and those appear on the contest page. I don't do contest to advertise my poems, but write poems to illustrate a point - contests or otherwise :) Why don't you give it a shot, Tom?

Tom Woody
Date: 10/6/2023 4:22:00 PM

Soupmail

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/6/2023 8:57:00 AM

Thank you for the feedback, Tom. I broke away from the restrictions of metre in this poem as I chiefly concentrated on the rhyme scheme - getting lazy in my old age ;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2023 8:46:00 AM

You sure know many types of forms. I will have to study out your new contest. Very nicely done, Suzette. Let me soupmsil you now.

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/6/2023 8:53:00 AM

I appreciate you ongoing support, Andrea :)