Eden

-Eden's Ending Eulogy- Proceed here today, Eden's Ending Eulogy Gentle gracious her garden, the guidance I can't recall what was with the warm, sincere smile, and sunrise Lost at ease and clarity.......I Sleep! Forever In Peace, this dark, damp den, coffin will do at last, a parting powerful, reunion and resting resort Amen ~SKAT~

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Simon King

Date: 3/14/2020 6:11:00 AM

Beautiful and poignant

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/6/2016 12:09:00 AM

Well done, Skat. The alliterations were spot on. You have your pen working some special skills on this poem. It was very paradisio. Ty for sharing w/us. Love and peace.

Space Cadet

Date: 9/27/2016 2:09:00 AM

With each read, I discover this poem to be more and more interesting/wonderful (for lack of a better/different word). The line: "I can't recall what was with the warm, sincere smile, and sunrise..." seems so sarcastic in some odd way (which I love). w

Abdul Hakim Genius

Date: 6/28/2016 2:49:00 AM

Wow.. Nicely inscribed. . Well organized thoughts into a message.. More blessings and success ahead

Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/14/2016 10:33:00 AM

Hi Skat, an excellent work once more. Eden with a difference, the Skat difference. Eden and dark, you wouldn't quite expect that to be a winning combination at all. Well, i wouldn't have believed it but here is the work before me. You have pulled it off my friend. A seven once more for your flowing words. Your Friend Vladislav.

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/7/2015 11:08:00 PM

A dark Eden...and so it was after the Fall. Then every life is both paradoxically Eden in the Spring and Death in the winter. You captured it. Sliced those words up nicely. The alliteration worked here along with all the contrasts, metaphor, and sad ending. Nice one. Decided to be "Snoopy" too. Of course, IT'S IMPOSSIBLE to be snoopy when we are Posting for this VERY THING...to share, be read, work it! Good one here Skat!

Alesia Leach

Date: 9/29/2015 7:21:00 PM

An interest use of alliteration as an eulogy, it was wonderfully done!

Kp Nunez

Date: 6/28/2015 12:24:00 PM

Never though one can get quyite gothic with a subject like Eden but you pulled it off...lovely write too with such unique alliteration. hugs!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/3/2015 12:46:00 PM

Loved your use of alliteration, Skat....Eden's Ending Eulogy...How special is that? Thanks for being so kind to visit and leave comments on my work. I'm here to check YOU out! :)

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 5/30/2015 1:26:00 AM

Excellent pen Skat!!I truly enjoyed reading this nice piece of yours dear friend.A 7! And thank you so much for visiting my page and all, I truly appreciate it all a lot.I'll be back to read more of your work.Wishing you a very lovely weekend!In his light!God bless you! Hugs!:) D."

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2015 3:37:00 PM

thanks for showcasing my Midnight Pearl in another of your old contests, Skat. It is always a nice feeling to see my name on one of those golden oldies contests.

Beejadhur Sewumber

Date: 5/10/2015 5:25:00 PM

A wonderful reflective and well-alliterated poem. I like it much

Thomas Martin

Date: 4/11/2015 12:55:00 PM

Hi Skat, Have been looking over your work, and admire much of it. Love your expression of your feelings and your use words. Especially liked this one!

Cherl Dunn

Date: 2/15/2015 7:37:00 PM

PS SKAT'S HAPPY VALENTINES BACK AT YOU GIRL, GLAD YOU ENJOYED MY SHORT MESSAGE TO THE SOUP SO MUCH, CHERI

Cherl Dunn

Date: 2/15/2015 7:36:00 PM

Dear Skat, i love to sleep, for I enter the realm of rem dreaming, and here fantasy's can be lived without any limitations to desire or passion, you can be whom ever you wish, and do what ever strikes your fancy. Here no one can tell you nope, you can't do this or that, and you can travel where ever you wish. Love your work girl keep it up,cheri

Darren Knight

Date: 2/13/2015 4:48:00 AM

The alliterations in this piece are fantastic. Each line rolls effortlessly from the tongue. Beautiful imagery with a sprinkle of darkness.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 1/18/2015 9:37:00 AM

I love alliterations and this is such a wonderful example of how it should be done! Dark yet beautiful in imagery and flow! Warmest regards. Pandita