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Dust in the Breeze

There I leaned against the iron railings
of the high ridge overlooking the bustling port,
where a large ship hooted its loud warning,
It was waiting to depart to far-off lands.

My love was surely one of the passengers,
waiting to depart forever. A small breeze
blew around me but provided no solace.
She will be gone forever, my heart ached.

A hot tear fell along my unshaven face.
"Hi there," she exclaimed. I was excited.
She was there beside me. "I could not leave you."
"Crying?" “No,” I said.  “Just dust from the breeze.”
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Maverick Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 12:56 PM
A good pick me up to read Victor I trust you are well.?
Edmonds  Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 9:37 AM
What a lovely story/poem Victor, sad at the start but with a very happy ending… Hugs, Beryl
George Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 9:03 PM
Oh what a happy twist. I feel so glad that she didn't leave. So the tears of grief gave way to tears of joy. Heart touching poem, dear Victor.
Rodrigues Avatar
July 24, 2024 at 5:52 AM
Like a chill in the air, her next to you, but not…a longing… Hugs ~ Kim
Romios Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 8:26 PM
Perfect, Harry! Pangie.xx
Romios Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 10:10 PM
Sorry Victor! I was reading a poem by the late Harry Hausman right before yours and his name jumped right into my head by accident. I’m very sorry.. but I thank you for correcting me.Pangie
Buhagiar Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 9:58 PM
Who is Harry?
Fernandez-Garcia Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 1:05 PM
Beautiful love story, Victor. Lucky you in the end, she decided to stay by your side. It's always something nice about those boats too. I love to watch them. Wonderful to read you. Blessings!.
Roper Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 3:55 AM
Just dust from the breeze, such a man thing to say :) Lovely poem. Hugs my friend, hope you are doing well
Greenhough Avatar
July 22, 2024 at 11:35 PM
"Dust from the breeze" was a good cover. I'm glad all worked out well. May the cruise have been romantic.
DiMino Avatar
July 22, 2024 at 4:12 PM
Very cute, appealing to the heart and senses. Life does have its pleasant surprises. Love it!
Goldsmith Avatar
July 22, 2024 at 1:57 PM
WOW!!! What a powerful write. Great picture/great ending. So sorry...  Have a blessed day writing away...............
George Avatar
July 22, 2024 at 1:21 AM
Leaving or watching a loved one leave is a hard thing to do, but staying is harder. A hard uncomfortable choice that shows the depth of love we have for that person. The people who stay love us the most. ". "I could not leave you." The best word anyone can get. Lovely one dear, Victor.
Buehler Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 6:41 PM
Sadness turned to tears of joy! A captivating tale. I love your stories, Victor.
May Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 5:53 PM
A pleasant surprise, Very nicely penned
Rose  Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 2:47 PM
ah, may she never leave your heart, in life and in death the closeness of real love never dies nor goes away Victor. :)
Manassian Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 12:46 PM
Oh! Delighted with the ending!!! But oh that he was brave enough to tell her the truth. ;) Thank you for your visit to my page. I enjoy having you visit.
Hind Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 11:45 AM
How romantic- loved the happy ending
Proxenos Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:24 AM
I love poem or stories with a happy ending. This was was just up my alley. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer
Anaya Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:17 AM
Her love for you proved, together you'll stay. I enjoyed some romance today and the image of the boat took me away as well, Victor. ~Very sweet~
One Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 8:41 AM
Just dust from the breeze.. A profound poem..
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 8:06 AM
This is so heartfelt and so evocative dear victor how youv written this in such a moving manner as always! “ She will be gone forever, my heart ached.” this is so poignant and really hit so deep and saying goodbye sometimes is never easy, sometimes tears speak more than words can.. the ending made me feel alot , but all your poems are so very touching, and so well articulated and this is no exception. Pleasure reading you. Sending you light always
Rolland Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 5:53 AM
a wonderful poem, enjoyed the romance here, thanks Victor
Kitchin Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 5:00 AM
Victor, a sweet poem and ending. - Hugs
Cunningham Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 3:49 AM
An enjoyable read Victor, and a happy ending too. Tom
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 2:56 AM
Tears have a voice of truth where silence learns its place. Aloha William
Mcintosh Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 11:23 PM
Oh, I just love this one! Amazing. God bless you. love, Gina
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