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There I leaned against the iron railings of the high ridge overlooking the bustling port, where a large ship hooted its loud warning, It was waiting to depart to far-off lands. My love was surely one of the passengers, waiting to depart forever. A small breeze blew around me but provided no solace. She will be gone forever, my heart ached. A hot tear fell along my unshaven face. "Hi there," she exclaimed. I was excited. She was there beside me. "I could not leave you." "Crying?" “No,” I said. “Just dust from the breeze.”

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Date: 8/1/2024 12:56:00 PM
A good pick me up to read Victor I trust you are well.?
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Date: 8/1/2024 9:37:00 AM
What a lovely story/poem Victor, sad at the start but with a very happy ending… Hugs, Beryl
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Date: 7/25/2024 9:03:00 PM
Oh what a happy twist. I feel so glad that she didn't leave. So the tears of grief gave way to tears of joy. Heart touching poem, dear Victor.
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Date: 7/24/2024 5:52:00 AM
Like a chill in the air, her next to you, but not…a longing… Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 7/23/2024 8:26:00 PM
Perfect, Harry! Pangie.xx
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Panagiota Romios
Date: 7/23/2024 10:10:00 PM
Sorry Victor! I was reading a poem by the late Harry Hausman right before yours and his name jumped right into my head by accident. I’m very sorry.. but I thank you for correcting me.Pangie
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 7/23/2024 9:58:00 PM
Who is Harry?
Date: 7/23/2024 1:05:00 PM
Beautiful love story, Victor. Lucky you in the end, she decided to stay by your side. It's always something nice about those boats too. I love to watch them. Wonderful to read you. Blessings!.
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Date: 7/23/2024 3:55:00 AM
Just dust from the breeze, such a man thing to say :) Lovely poem. Hugs my friend, hope you are doing well
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Date: 7/22/2024 11:35:00 PM
"Dust from the breeze" was a good cover. I'm glad all worked out well. May the cruise have been romantic.
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Date: 7/22/2024 4:12:00 PM
Very cute, appealing to the heart and senses. Life does have its pleasant surprises. Love it!
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Date: 7/22/2024 1:57:00 PM
WOW!!! What a powerful write. Great picture/great ending. So sorry...  Have a blessed day writing away...............
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Date: 7/22/2024 6:03:00 AM
Awesome twist Victor. Seen this scene played out in many a movie. The title made me think of one on my fave rock ballads - Dust in the Wind
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Date: 7/22/2024 1:21:00 AM
Leaving or watching a loved one leave is a hard thing to do, but staying is harder. A hard uncomfortable choice that shows the depth of love we have for that person. The people who stay love us the most. ". "I could not leave you." The best word anyone can get. Lovely one dear, Victor.
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Date: 7/21/2024 6:41:00 PM
Sadness turned to tears of joy! A captivating tale. I love your stories, Victor.
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Date: 7/21/2024 5:53:00 PM
A pleasant surprise, Very nicely penned
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Date: 7/21/2024 2:47:00 PM
ah, may she never leave your heart, in life and in death the closeness of real love never dies nor goes away Victor. :)
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Date: 7/21/2024 12:46:00 PM
Oh! Delighted with the ending!!! But oh that he was brave enough to tell her the truth. ;) Thank you for your visit to my page. I enjoy having you visit.
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Date: 7/21/2024 11:45:00 AM
How romantic- loved the happy ending
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Date: 7/21/2024 9:24:00 AM
I love poem or stories with a happy ending. This was was just up my alley. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer
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Date: 7/21/2024 9:17:00 AM
Her love for you proved, together you'll stay. I enjoyed some romance today and the image of the boat took me away as well, Victor. ~Very sweet~
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Date: 7/21/2024 8:41:00 AM
Just dust from the breeze.. A profound poem..
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Date: 7/21/2024 8:06:00 AM
This is so heartfelt and so evocative dear victor how youv written this in such a moving manner as always! “ She will be gone forever, my heart ached.” this is so poignant and really hit so deep and saying goodbye sometimes is never easy, sometimes tears speak more than words can.. the ending made me feel alot , but all your poems are so very touching, and so well articulated and this is no exception. Pleasure reading you. Sending you light always
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Date: 7/21/2024 5:53:00 AM
a wonderful poem, enjoyed the romance here, thanks Victor
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Date: 7/21/2024 5:00:00 AM
Victor, a sweet poem and ending. - Hugs
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Date: 7/21/2024 3:49:00 AM
An enjoyable read Victor, and a happy ending too. Tom
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Date: 7/21/2024 2:56:00 AM
Tears have a voice of truth where silence learns its place. Aloha William
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