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January 27, 2024
Placed 1st: Before the Day Turned Into Night Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Charles Messina
Form: Quatorzain; Rhymes: AAAA, BBBB, CCCC, DD
Eight syllables per line (HMS.com)


 

Before the day turned into night You I saw, what an awesome sight! A smile of eve, of love and light, A lovesome theme, my dream did write. Up high blazed pink arc of the sky, A spark of joy in purple dye, A gleeful vibe of sun’s goodbye, When love in your eyes moon did vie. You my love, are a dream come true, For life with you, is life I woo; On cusp of night, where stars lure you, To clues of love, the sunset drew. Pray I now, you will steer my way, Before this night turns into day.

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Date: 3/28/2024 12:17:00 PM
Lovely and romantic with your flowing words Vijay. Filled with emotion. Congratulations! :)
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Date: 3/27/2024 11:52:00 AM
Excellent writing, Vijay. Very romantic! Congratulations on your top win! Hope all is well...All the best, Charlie
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Date: 3/27/2024 11:14:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a lovely/colorful write. Love the end of the day with the pretty sky colors... Have a blessed day...........
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Date: 1/31/2024 7:08:00 AM
So sweet and romantic. The rhythm and flow of your words. I especially like "Up high blazed pink arc of the sky, A spark of joy in purple dye," - very nice. :)
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Date: 1/29/2024 10:53:00 AM
ahh, this is romantic and very rhythmic. well done, vijay
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Date: 1/29/2024 7:36:00 AM
Dear Vijay, this is so beautifully romantic. So well written with your gifted pen. Your rhymes are perfect - studying this new form to me, I presume it’s like a monorhyme but with a restrictive eight syllables and you have done it so majestically. Such a tender write. The lines, ‘ Up high blazed pink arc of the sky’, When love in your eyes moon did vie’ is divine. So enjoyed reading this poem with an air of heavenly romance! Good luck in the contest. Blessings to you :):)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/5/2024 1:04:00 PM
Your kindness exudes trough your remarks, Christina. Always a joy when you visit. Much appreciate. Many thanks.
Date: 1/28/2024 6:15:00 PM
Moments are always magical in a pink sky, while the sun shares a gleeful goodbye. This is beautiful in every way. So dreamy and romantic. Your thoughts bring a smile, Vijay. Keep reaching for the stars, and your dreams will come true. :) Hugs, Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/5/2024 1:02:00 PM
Glad you liked the poem, my friend. Delighted by your presence on my page, Brandy, and your kind insights. Many thanks. Hugs to you as well.
Date: 1/28/2024 8:42:00 AM
Love and rhyme. crown this "sonnet" so well woven and appropriate. Best wishes for the contest.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/5/2024 1:01:00 PM
Thank you Victor--much appreciate.
Date: 1/28/2024 6:54:00 AM
Oh my, what a mystical and magical poem this is! The love-filled ambience here is so heartwarming especially your poetic craftsmanship is so spellbinding! "Up high blazed pink arc of the sky", "When love in your eyes moon did vie", "To clues of love, the sunset drew" Ahh, gorgeous descriptions throughout! It's always such a delight to read your beautiful words, hued with enchanting splendor...Absolutely enjoyed reading this, sending many best wishes for the contest, keep writing and shining!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/5/2024 1:01:00 PM
Always a joy to read your feedback, Hiya. I am delighted by your insights and your FAVE. Much appreciate. Many thanks.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 1/28/2024 6:55:00 AM
A FAV this is, marvelously knitted!
Date: 1/28/2024 6:50:00 AM
Awwn this is so sweet and romantic dear vijay! I always enjoy reading your rhymes and also, your romantic poems are my fave the way you expressed is so moving and poetically eloquent, i love how descriptive it is and the flow of your word weaving is so gorgeous along with colors that enhance the imagery that youv painted in such an artistic manner. I especially love the line “ You my love, are a dream come true, For life with you, is life I woo;“ how lyrically captivating! catchy cadence! FAVE
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/5/2024 12:59:00 PM
You are always so very kind, my friend. Honored by your remarks and your FAVE, Ink. Many thanks for being there!
Date: 1/27/2024 9:30:00 PM
Very romantic poetry, Vijay, in an interesting form of poetry. I like it! Have a pleasant Sunday, my friend. Bill
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:59:00 AM
Glad you liked the poem, Bill. Much appreciate you stopping by, my friend. Many thanks for being there.
Date: 1/27/2024 3:48:00 PM
a captivating love poem so beautifully constructed. The sunset imagery was captivating leaving me a bit breathless...I especially liked "clue of love, the sunset drew." So hopeful like love itself. Nicely done...have a great evening, Sara
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:59:00 AM
Yes--I liked that line as well. Such is love! Much appreciate--many thanks, Sara.
Date: 1/27/2024 3:12:00 PM
A beautifully wrought tale of a 'sunset dreamer.' I enjoyed the stunning images. This gem is a fave.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:57:00 AM
So succinct, and to the point. Always a joy when you visit, Evelyn. Many thanks, my friend. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 1/27/2024 12:29:00 PM
Very artful. I spent yesterday looking at the orange sunrise before it turned painfully white. so I can relate to this piece but in an oppisite way
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:55:00 AM
Many thanks--much appreciate you stopping by with your kind feedback.
Date: 1/27/2024 12:17:00 PM
The poem nicely revolves around the beauty of love and the natural world, as well as the idea of longing and yearning for the presence of a loved one, Vijay. Your diction is so rich with vivid imagery and romantic vocabulary. Your use of words like "awesome sight," "lovesome theme," "spark of joy," and "gleeful vibe" creates a sense of wonder and admiration. Best wishes for the contest my friend.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:55:00 AM
So special to read your detailed thoughts, my friend. Your feedback is much valued and appreciated, Lasaad. Many thanks for being there.
Date: 1/27/2024 11:22:00 AM
Very nicely done Vijay, best wishes
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:53:00 AM
Glad to hear it. Much appreciate--many thanks, Joseph.
Date: 1/27/2024 10:49:00 AM
Great rhythm and rhyme. Love rules the day.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:53:00 AM
Thank you Richard--much appreciate you stopping by.
Date: 1/27/2024 8:32:00 AM
Dear Vijay, your deep rich poem is utterly beautiful! Your brilliant verse framing vivid romantic imagery is endlessly poetic, my friend. Wonderful rhymes and creative phrasing. Your artistry outshines sunlight! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:52:00 AM
So nice to hear that from a gifted writer. Much appreciate your kind insights, Susan. Many thanks.
Date: 1/27/2024 8:31:00 AM
Very romantic verse Vijay, you are the master of it here. Best of luck in the contest and enjoy your weekend. Tom
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:52:00 AM
Glad to see you Tom. Much appreciate your presence on my page, as always. Many thanks.
Date: 1/27/2024 7:44:00 AM
This is perfect for the contest! What a beauty too! Well written and flows well. A Fave for me :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:51:00 AM
Thank you for being there, my friend. Much appreciate your kind remarks and your FAVE. Always special when you visit, Heidi.
Date: 1/27/2024 6:22:00 AM
I love how your poem paints a vivid picture of love and longing against the backdrop of a transitioning day. Through its imagery of the twilight sky and the tender exchange of glances, it evokes a sense of wonder and enchantment. The opening lines immediately drew me into the scene, setting the stage for a moment of awe and admiration. The portrayal of the sunset, with its pink arc and purple dye, captures the vibrant hues of nature's canvas and infuses with a sense of joy and anticipation.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:49:00 AM
Thank you for your supportive feedback, SO. Your detailed insights are much appreciated, my friend. Glad you liked the poem.
Date: 1/27/2024 6:18:00 AM
Second love poem I read this morning. Beautiful poetry, awesome form. "For you, my love, are a dream come true." What gal wouldn't blush upon hearing those words?
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:47:00 AM
Delighted to see you here, Tom--honored by your presence. Much appreciate--many thanks.
Date: 1/27/2024 5:59:00 AM
Ahh!! I enjoyed reading your post..So romantic. Thank you for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. This one reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Sara K
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2024 5:46:00 AM
Thank you for being the first to comment on this poem, Sara. Your presence on my page is much valued and appreciated.

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