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Downhearted

"Behind gleams of sunshine, remember, there are dark shadows lurking" ~By Poet At times, our heart becomes, A labyrinth of dark thoughts Letting no rays of hope in Making our world seem a wilderness. Tangled with nettles and brambles. The road we travel may appear circuitous, Taking us nowhere, leaving us fatigued Sometimes weariness sets in Like molten lead into our brain Sending out smoke and heat Like an overheated pan Even the drops of consoling words Instantly evaporate with a hiss Causing scalding and burning. Downhearted we become, For reasons unknown! Feb. 8.2023 Writing Challenge- D Words, Poetry Contest Sponsor- Constance La France

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Constance La France

Date: 2/21/2023 2:16:00 PM

Valsa, excellent poem and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - D Forms, well done, I like the quote also blessings, Constance

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 2/11/2023 8:35:00 PM

beautiful poetic writing; nice to read; congrats for 1st placement

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/11/2023 4:45:00 PM

Back with congratulations on taking first place; this is a really well-written piece that demonstrates both skills and knowledge...dear friend.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/11/2023 2:02:00 PM

Back with congratulations on this winning work. Way to go. Sara

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 2/11/2023 12:00:00 PM

A very dark write Valsa. Congratulations on your win! :)

Ann Peck

Date: 2/11/2023 10:58:00 AM

A very thoughtful take on when gloom overtakes us. So many lovely phrases! Congratulations!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/11/2023 7:23:00 AM

- Back with congratulations :) - hugs

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 2/11/2023 1:56:00 AM

Excellent poetry Valsa, I’ve been downhearted for some time as it’s been a difficult period for over a year now, but at last the sun is starting to peek through. Congratulations on your win in Constance’s contest.. Belle

Speaks Volumes

Date: 2/8/2023 7:04:00 PM

Your words reap truth and a bevy of emotions Valsa. So important to keep the smiles outweighing the tears.. A beautiful read, written so perfectly.

Bill Baker

Date: 2/8/2023 12:47:00 PM

So true, Valsa. Our lives are full of the emotions of life. Deep and moving poetry my dear friend. I've been gone since Nov, but have finally made it back home. My wife is getting better and her shoulder is almost healed. Just physical therapy twice and week now, for another couple of months. I lokk forward to reading and commenting on your poetry again, I've missed it. :-) Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/8/2023 12:30:00 PM

A powerful "D" write/quote. Good Luck. Have a great day..................

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/8/2023 11:10:00 AM

Darkness often envelops us but the sun will shine on us again. Good luck Valsa. Tom

Joe Dimino

Date: 2/8/2023 10:39:00 AM

"Sometimes weariness sets in Like molten lead into our brain Sending out smoke and heat Like an overheated pan" -- Marvelous, original expression. The entire poem a masterpiece. Only the bad burns. We learn to welcome such fires...rising as that Great Phoenix. Fire cannot scorch the good, immortal spirit and its soul.

Eve Roper

Date: 2/8/2023 9:30:00 AM

Well written verse, Valsa, good luck in Constant's contest.

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/8/2023 6:27:00 AM

Wonderful poem, Vasa. You have successfully captured an atmosphere that cannot be shaken away. An appropriate picture for such an emotive piece. There are times when our souls change into, A labyrinth of troubling thoughts Keeping any flicker of hope at bay... Life is genuinely awful when there is no brightness or optimism.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/8/2023 6:09:00 AM

Apt tile for this emotive write, Valsa: At times, our heart becomes, A labyrinth of dark thoughts Letting no rays of hope in...Life is indeed dark without hope. Best to you.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/8/2023 5:53:00 AM

Downhearted and fatigued! We must old each other up! Well done, Valsa! I love your poetry. Always a treat!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/8/2023 4:46:00 AM

Very expressive and emotive work that you have penned with the word downhearted. Well done. Your visit to my page was uplifting though. Sara

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/8/2023 3:18:00 AM

- We all know these feelings ... behind the clouds the sky is always blue ... beautifully written, Valsa - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/7/2023 10:23:00 PM

Brilliant poem, dear Vasa. You captured a mood not easily got rid of. Best for a win.