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Do I Exist Aka More Automat

Do I exist without shadow Am I anything without light He talks of my decadent glow Should I step out into the night Frozen with knowledge and foresight No trust in words he does bestow No doubt of love he does incite Do I exist without shadow I risk everything if I go To stay misery I invite But to live life on a plateau Am I anything without light Need this thinking time in twilight My heart to dictate where I go Decision is not black or white He talks of my decadent glow Without him life will be hollow I become in his line of sight With love my heart does overflow Should I step out into the night The ending, just I, cannot write Cannot know about tomorrow Commence ricochet of delight Relinquish to the undertow Do I exist Double The Fun Poetry Contest 7th March 2023 Sponsored by: Joseph May Rhymezone.come Syllablecounter.net

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Joseph May

Date: 4/6/2023 11:33:00 AM

We are nothing without light, Very nicely crafted, Congrats on your win

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/6/2023 11:36:00 AM

Thank you Joseph, I enjoyed it once I'd figured it out

Hat Bueckert

Date: 4/6/2023 11:06:00 AM

Thoughtful writing, repeating lines work great, congrats on your win!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/6/2023 11:29:00 AM

Thanks Hat, taking the time to comment is really appreciated

Speaks Volumes

Date: 4/6/2023 10:09:00 AM

Congratulations DD A great poem and well deserved winner. Well done.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/6/2023 10:13:00 AM

Thanks Wen :)

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/11/2023 8:56:00 AM

This is so beautiful, I really like 'do I exist without shadow' and 'relinquish to the undertow' - this should be high on the winner's list!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/11/2023 9:08:00 AM

Thank you Michelle, I hope so but there are some good ones rolling in :)

Valsa George

Date: 3/7/2023 7:26:00 PM

You have written an excellent poem in Rondeau Redouble. I am amazred at your perfection in handling this form and fitting your thoughts into it. I find this form very difficult. All the Best Dilly in the contest

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/7/2023 10:54:00 PM

I have to admit I was very surprised when it worked out! I think I just got lucky. I felt like I was watching a horse race writing it, willing the next line to appear haha! Thank you for your kind words - I'm definitely getting into poetry!