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September. 7.2023
Dark or Decayed Words Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Constance La France
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As I stand before this old, dilapidated house, A structure fast decaying and about to crumble, With its walls painted grey and white, And the plaster bearing cracks and marks, Memories leap out, From the moss-grown crevices of my mind, Like snakes uncoiling, rather like bees swarming, Fragmented, scented, and sour! I remember my old maternal uncle, Who had turned a widower at forty-one, The presiding deity of a joint family of sixteen. Most of the time he sprawled in the armchair, In the enclosed patio of this big house. In the living room was an old grandfather clock Ticking away like the faint heartbeat Of that decadent house with crumbling plaster He had seen heydays with many ceremonies of great fanfare, When the house used to board all kith and kin, And the granary was full of paddy and tons of black gold But as time slowly weakened his torso The house too lost its onetime splendor. His children got scattered far and wide. They went to hoard fortunes abroad. But grand uncle refused to move away. One day he left the house orphaning it for ever. Now the house is sadly left to total decay. Its life gone, its soul frozen, A fragment of an old memory. Though once I thought I had escaped, The compulsions of the past Now I discern, I am still pinioned by it! As I stand before this house, my ears perk up, For the lovely sounds this house once produced And pine for the love That once so luxuriously bloomed around!

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Date: 9/11/2023 7:38:00 AM
Valsa, I REALLY love this poem~~the vivid descriptions (an expressive blend of literal and figurative language). This is nostalgia at its very best. CONGRATS on your win! Janice
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Date: 9/10/2023 11:02:00 PM
Valsa, wonderful writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, and I love the image too, Constance
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Date: 9/10/2023 9:10:00 PM
Great memories and reflections on the theme Decayed with a dilapidated house as a symbol. Very beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/10/2023 8:46:00 AM
Back with hearty Congratulations on your podium win, Valsa. Well deserved with your lovely poem.
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Date: 9/9/2023 4:46:00 AM
This is so moving, you are truly a brilliant storyteller, this surely left an impression, and made me sad, as i read this. Kind of reminds me of my grandmothers house. And how empty it is , etc. the imagery and depth of this poem is soul hitting, so poignant and well delivered. I especially love the ending, “ its life gone soul frozen” sigh! Really heartfelt. Definitely a top winning poem. Goodluck for the contest. This is beyond brilliant
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Date: 9/9/2023 2:41:00 AM
Your descriptions are stupendous. How can one forget the joys that this mansion produced? Their ghosts haunted me as I read your poem. Blessings.
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Date: 9/9/2023 1:00:00 AM
Reminiscent like petrichor beautifully written
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Date: 9/8/2023 11:44:00 PM
Dear Valsa, your words are a true work of art. The old house, with its weathered exterior and worn interior, seemed to possess stories to tell waiting for a willing ear to hear them. Within the walls of this aged house lie cherished memories, a testament to a once vibrant and joyous estate. Your storytelling prowess has transformed this decaying abode into a grand mansion, evoking a sense of wonder and nostalgia. This topic has sparked your creative genius in a truly exquisite piece of writing.
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Date: 9/8/2023 7:54:00 PM
Wow, dearest poetess, you certainly captured my attention and took me to the dimension where the soul of the house was narrating the tale of its forlorn past.. Your storytelling skills are just beyond magnificent and I can't help but be in awe of the sheer eloquence with which you've carefully and precisely carved every word.. Sigh, it's too aching as well especially "its life gone, its soul frozen", " Ticking away like the faint heartbeat " Truly breathtaking and heartfelt this is..love it!
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Date: 9/8/2023 3:36:00 PM
Wonderful story telling. This seems to have been a great creative topic, for I have read so many well crafted entries, this one standing out. I can relate, to the house, to my own old body in need of repairs that can't be had -- Time is the only winner. Excellent read! Thank you.
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Date: 9/8/2023 7:39:00 AM
Love it, love your story telling, so captivates the mind to seek the true depths and meaning of your wonderful God giving spirit to awaken ones soul : )
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Date: 9/8/2023 6:38:00 AM
You are a storyteller/poet extraordinaire Valsa. What a nice piece of nostalgia mixed with present day reality. Interestingly, I had the privilege recently of restoring a historic home on the national registry. It was built in 1850 and in bad shape, but we restored the old and modernized a bit. It took five months but the community seemed to love it
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Date: 9/7/2023 11:55:00 PM
Beautifully written my dear friend. The old house had so much to say, if only someone would listen. A lovely poem, Best wishes from SV
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Date: 9/7/2023 11:58:00 AM
Hello Valsa George, you have a lot of good memories ofo this house. Hugs. /Darlene\
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Date: 9/7/2023 10:24:00 AM
Yeah, the old house brings lots of good memories. A decaying house symbolizes a happy mansion which stood there.
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