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Fleeting light streams through the broken window pane. Flickering, as the only movement trying to bring life in vain. The stillness is dense and dust lays thickly as all is grey. The old house utters the softest moan, resisting evident decay. There is an aura of shame, that it has been discovered this way, Yet a distinct welcoming can be felt, its coupled with dismay. The peeling paper on the walls, its former charm subsided, The floorboards dry and cracked, beliefs of safety are misguided. A yearning can be felt, a plea to resurrect it to its former glory. Neglect has cruelly buried many a wonderful forgotten story. The old house stands defiant against the storms the wind and flood. One hundred years ago it was built with sweat, tears and even blood. From its eaves and rafters to its foundations, it was built with pride. A murmur comes from each empty room, heard faintly from deep inside. Tears of its soul are felt. Whispers “rescue and restore me” it implores. Gone are the wonderful stories, as the oncoming bulldozer roars.

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Date: 9/10/2023 11:03:00 PM
Speaks, wonderful writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, and I love that image too, Constance
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Date: 9/11/2023 7:33:00 AM
I am waiting for the day you say you don't like my image!! LOL (just kidding) Thanks for your congrats and the placement in your contest. Best wishes from SV
Date: 9/10/2023 9:12:00 PM
"A murmur comes from each empty room, heard faintly from deep inside"- Beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/11/2023 7:36:00 AM
Thank you so Much Christuraj I am delighted that you liked this poem. Its one I like too. I am not always pleased with my posts, but this one just seemed to fall into place nicely. Best wishes from SV
Date: 9/10/2023 8:45:00 AM
Dear friend, SV. I am thrilled to extend my heartfelt congratulations on your well-deserved win in the contest podium. Your poetry is nothing short of breathtaking, as you articulate your thoughts with such precision and eloquence.
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Date: 9/10/2023 10:52:00 AM
Thanks my friend, your kind words are appreciated as always. SV
Date: 9/6/2023 10:00:00 AM
Seeing old deserted houses is always painful. My ancestral home is in such a state now. After my parents' death and my siblings' staying away, there is none to take care of it and it is waiting for its inevitable end.The picture of decay is so complete here in your poem and your description of its old imposing glory, so real. Its plea for renewal is heart rending. Lovely poem dear SV.
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Date: 9/6/2023 10:35:00 AM
Thanks Valsa, I don't often really like my poems, but this one did turn out OK and I kinda like it . I think you and I have similar preferences in Poetry. Now I just have to learn to write as well as you do.
Date: 9/5/2023 7:48:00 AM
"From its eaves and rafters to its foundations, it was built with pride. A murmur comes from each empty room, heard faintly from deep inside." Brilliant poem! Classic in presentation and sense. This one will live on. You get a FAV from me! Delightful read though the sad but relatable ending.
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Date: 9/5/2023 12:59:00 PM
Thanks so much Joe, what a lovely comment, Your encouragement is really valued.
Date: 9/5/2023 6:54:00 AM
What a magnificent poem, SV. Its beauty is so profound, like a radiant gem that eclipses all else. Every time I encounter those aged and enchanting houses, my heart becomes heavy with sorrow. There they stand, isolated and crumbling, like a fragile specter longing for affection. They are transparent vessels, revealing the depth of their existence, yearning to be embraced by love. Your words have painted a truly exquisite picture, capturing the essence of these dilapidated yet soulful abodes.
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Date: 9/5/2023 1:02:00 PM
I am so glad you liked this one my friend. Your comments are often more poetic than my poems. Its with such pleasure that I read your remarks. They lift my heart and make me smile.
Date: 9/5/2023 3:15:00 AM
ahh... so sad yet so beautiful a poem. God bless you with a win... this is shadowed by brilliance. Love it. Love, Gina
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Date: 9/5/2023 4:00:00 AM
Thank you Gina. I already have my win, with wonderful comments like yours, Anne-Lise's and Bill's. There is nothing nicer than being appreciated by your peers. Keep smiling & best wishes from SV.
Date: 9/5/2023 1:58:00 AM
- I always get sad when I see old, beautiful houses standing alone and decaying - A "transparent" house with a soul, needs love - A lovely poem, S.V. :) - hugs
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Date: 9/5/2023 6:56:00 AM
- Yes, it's exciting to think about ... houses have their history :)
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Date: 9/5/2023 3:55:00 AM
Always makes me wonder what stories it could tell. We were the first to live in our house, but a very large aboriginal tribe lived in this area over a hundred years ago, and I often wonder who lived on this land, what they were like. Thank you for your lovely comment Anne-Lise. Best wishes from SV. You are so sweet to be such support to so many. Its appreciated.
Date: 9/4/2023 8:27:00 PM
An unpleasant outcome, in many cases. People are just in too big of a hurry to put in the work required to restore old houses. They put money into it instead. Bulldoze them down and build modern replacement houses. Thanks for visit SV. I enjoyed reading your poetry today. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 9/4/2023 8:31:00 PM
Thanks Bill I really appreciate it when folk let me know I'm on the right track. I can say "ditto" cause I really love your style of writing. I am getting too old to have to try to work out what it all meant. Cheers SV

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