Death

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(English Sonnet) Somber as death doth pace about her room The sadness cloaks with black the loud silence Gone souls she’s loved wait there at her cold tomb The orb of death prepares silent cadence My heart weighted with words that go unsaid Whisper a hushed farewell, my last goodbye The sentinel, I wait, beside her bed For death to come and thus release my cry From there her eye one tear I see the sheen As each wave of her chest I wait the last Her breaths come now so deep and long between With one last breath the stillness she has passed I see her soul take leave in that minute The tears come now as death takes her with it. Written for “DEATH” Contest Sponsored by Craig Cornish October 24, 2017

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 1/15/2018 10:24:00 AM

Poignant and powerful this beautifully sad poem be, Judith. Witnessing the precise moment of life passing to death is the ultimate solemn gray time-lapse experience. Such a great write. You took us to the pen edge of oblivion and back. Love and joy always.

Judith S
Date: 1/15/2018 2:23:00 PM

Thank you so much Freddie!!! Coming from you these comments mean so much!! Really appreciate your visit :) ~ Judy

Ricky Muse

Date: 12/31/2017 3:28:00 PM

Poetry read is a joy, poetry spoken is an experience. "My heart weighted with words that go unsaid" is lovely. Thanks for sharing............peace!

Judith S
Date: 1/10/2018 5:24:00 AM

Thank you Richard :) I so appreciate your visit. ~Judy

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/5/2017 5:36:00 PM

Judy, such sadness expressed with poetic dignity. Your somber lines with their mournful tone and wonderful rhymes made your write feel very intimate to me. A beautifully written sadly emotional sonnet. Your recorded piece was awesome as well, the tone and cadence of your voice was perfect for your poem. Excellent and enjoyed both!!!

Judith S
Date: 11/6/2017 8:59:00 AM

Susan .. Thank you for your amazing comments and for taking the time to read it. I always love the sincerity with which you comment. Best, Judy

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/28/2017 8:37:00 AM

I already see an improvement in your writing. Also you did justice to the piece with your recording. Bravo!

Judith S
Date: 10/29/2017 11:02:00 AM

Richard ... Thank you so much for your kind words, and for taking the time to read all of my work. Your encouragement means the world to me!! Best, Judy

Elaine George

Date: 10/26/2017 7:36:00 PM

You have captured the deep emotion surrounding the death of a loved one in this English sonnet, dear Judith...Also I thank you for your kind comments on my poem, Violin. Elaine

Judith S
Date: 10/27/2017 8:57:00 AM

Thank you so much Elaine!! You have posted so many poems on PS and I'm looking forward to working my way through them all. Such talent!! You inspire me ;) ~ Judy

John Hamilton

Date: 10/26/2017 12:47:00 PM

The recorded voice definitely enhances the readers experience, nice soft voice, matches the somber tone of the poem!

Judith S
Date: 10/26/2017 2:25:00 PM

Thank you John Hamilton!!! Exactly what I wanted to accomplish.

Frances Schiavina

Date: 10/25/2017 10:08:00 AM

Beautiful poem. Very well done.

Judith S
Date: 10/25/2017 10:37:00 AM

Thank you Frances :)

Silent One

Date: 10/25/2017 6:02:00 AM

Can't comment on Iambic pentameter, I'm not good at it.. However this is a good sonnet.. it flows and rhymes well..

Judith S
Date: 10/25/2017 6:40:00 AM

Thank you SO !

John Hamilton

Date: 10/24/2017 8:16:00 PM

Wow really well done Judith, this is a great sonnet, although of course a somber theme, but very emotive.

Judith S
Date: 10/26/2017 11:32:00 AM

I've now attached a spoken version of my sonnet. Please let me know what you think... honestly. Does it take away from the interpretation of the reader?

Judith S
Date: 10/24/2017 9:58:00 PM

Thank you John Hamilton !!!