Judith S Poet Iambic Pentameter

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Death

(English Sonnet)

Somber as death doth pace about her room
The sadness cloaks with black the loud silence
Gone souls she’s loved wait there at her cold tomb
The orb of death prepares silent cadence

My heart weighted with words that go unsaid
Whisper a hushed farewell, my last goodbye
The sentinel, I wait, beside her bed
For death to come and thus release my cry

From there her eye one tear I see the sheen 
As each wave of her chest I wait the last
Her breaths come now so deep and long between
With one last breath the stillness she has passed

I see her soul take leave in that minute
The tears come now as death takes her with it.


Written for “DEATH” Contest
Sponsored by Craig Cornish
October 24, 2017

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Freddie Robinson Jr. January 15, 2018 at 10:24 AM Poignant and powerful this beautifully sad poem be, Judith. Witnessing the precise moment of life passing to death is the ultimate solemn gray time-lapse experience. Such a great write. You took us to the pen edge of oblivion and back. Love and joy always. Judith S January 15, 2018 at 2:23 PM Thank you so much Freddie!!! Coming from you these comments mean so much!! Really appreciate your visit :) ~ Judy

Richard Evans December 31, 2017 at 3:28 PM Poetry read is a joy, poetry spoken is an experience. "My heart weighted with words that go unsaid" is lovely. Thanks for sharing............peace! Judith S January 10, 2018 at 5:24 AM Thank you Richard :) I so appreciate your visit. ~Judy

Susan Ashley November 5, 2017 at 5:36 PM Judy, such sadness expressed with poetic dignity. Your somber lines with their mournful tone and wonderful rhymes made your write feel very intimate to me. A beautifully written sadly emotional sonnet. Your recorded piece was awesome as well, the tone and cadence of your voice was perfect for your poem. Excellent and enjoyed both!!! Judith S November 6, 2017 at 8:59 AM Susan .. Thank you for your amazing comments and for taking the time to read it. I always love the sincerity with which you comment. Best, Judy

Richard Lamoureux October 28, 2017 at 8:37 AM I already see an improvement in your writing. Also you did justice to the piece with your recording. Bravo! Judith S October 29, 2017 at 11:02 AM Richard ... Thank you so much for your kind words, and for taking the time to read all of my work. Your encouragement means the world to me!! Best, Judy

Elaine George October 26, 2017 at 7:36 PM You have captured the deep emotion surrounding the death of a loved one in this English sonnet, dear Judith...Also I thank you for your kind comments on my poem, Violin. Elaine Judith S October 27, 2017 at 8:57 AM Thank you so much Elaine!! You have posted so many poems on PS and I'm looking forward to working my way through them all. Such talent!! You inspire me ;) ~ Judy

John Hamilton October 26, 2017 at 12:47 PM The recorded voice definitely enhances the readers experience, nice soft voice, matches the somber tone of the poem! Judith S October 26, 2017 at 2:25 PM Thank you John Hamilton!!! Exactly what I wanted to accomplish.

Frances Schiavina October 25, 2017 at 10:08 AM Beautiful poem. Very well done. Judith S October 25, 2017 at 10:37 AM Thank you Frances :)

Silent One October 25, 2017 at 6:02 AM Can't comment on Iambic pentameter, I'm not good at it.. However this is a good sonnet.. it flows and rhymes well.. Judith S October 25, 2017 at 6:40 AM Thank you SO !

John Hamilton October 24, 2017 at 8:16 PM Wow really well done Judith, this is a great sonnet, although of course a somber theme, but very emotive. Judith S October 26, 2017 at 11:32 AM I've now attached a spoken version of my sonnet. Please let me know what you think... honestly. Does it take away from the interpretation of the reader? Judith S October 24, 2017 at 9:58 PM Thank you John Hamilton !!!