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Dead Winter

innocent years, childhood dreams left behind in verdant fields I once traversed summertime, in my prime seaside picnics and surfboard rides all have vanished now before me lay the dark woods where creatures struggle for survival colors of fall fade in memories for this is the winter of my life thrashing through vicious vines blood stains the pristine snow beneath my feet each day the challenges loom larger insurmountable obstacles animals tearing at my flesh stones embed in my knees when I fall hearing winds that howl, screaming at me words that echo in my soul “Repent, make haste, seek forgiveness” as through the forest my shaky legs move forward dried limbs, weak branches foretell the destiny that awaits frosty fate consumes all hope as I fall face down on the frozen stream finally reaching the end of life’s winter days
*Entry for Sidney LeeAnn’s “Dead Winter” contest By Carolyn Devonshire

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 1/29/2012 3:07:00 PM
I am judging my contest tonight.. I noticed u had your entry marked as Senryu instead of Haiku.. could u please change the form.. so I can select it as one of my winners.. thankxx Carolyn.. whre is your soup mail icon>?
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Date: 1/18/2012 1:30:00 PM
You need to rent a belly whopper comedy [you and me both!] Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 1/16/2012 11:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Sidney~LeeAnn's "DEAD WINTER" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/16/2012 10:28:00 AM
Congrats on your superb win, bl
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Date: 1/16/2012 1:45:00 AM
A great win Carolyn congratulations x
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Date: 12/14/2011 9:36:00 AM
Sad but beautiful piece, my dear
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Date: 12/13/2011 2:39:00 PM
comes the mood of sadness, don't give up the fight, keep writing yes your poetry, with the words that you incite, breathe deep a spirit bright!
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Date: 12/13/2011 11:06:00 AM
sky diving--YES!!!!!! Oh YES!!! You spring chicken u! Love, Gwendolen
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Date: 12/13/2011 3:11:00 AM
Laughing at Deb's comment below...how appropriate. I second her tho'ts. You can't be in the winter of your life...you are a spring chicken, darling. Come to Dayton and we will go sky diving on my next bday 2gether...u will change your season for sure. lol. A great entry for this Dead Winter contest...u really got into character well. Will u check out mine...I was thinking of your poem about your grandmother when I wrote it...luv, Gwendolen
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Date: 12/13/2011 12:23:00 AM
Carolyn i have sent you soup mail..)
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Date: 12/12/2011 8:26:00 PM
You have made Sidney's judging chore a bit more difficult with this fine entry. Another fine work Carolyn.
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Date: 12/12/2011 5:53:00 PM
yikers!! you OK?? stop dreaming that stuff think of candy canes and kittens!! right now! [a sure winner] Light & Love
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Date: 12/12/2011 1:42:00 PM
Dead winter for sure - a trek through the dark, dark forest, Expertly told. I sincerely hope that you will be traveling the sort of path Robert Frost has written about. You have many miles to go. I don't know how to get my picture into the soup. It must take a special sort of equipment. I'm way behind lately. Can't spend as much time on the internet as I'd like. Merry Christmas, priceless friend. Love, daver
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Date: 12/12/2011 8:32:00 AM
Wow, this poem is almost frightening in as much as a night mare i can recall having not long ago. this is poetry at it's best Carolyn. harry
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Date: 12/12/2011 12:36:00 AM
Well written Carolyn,, wishing you a great result in the contest..)
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Date: 12/11/2011 6:12:00 PM
I cannot think that any poem will beat this one. I have not entered as I didn't want to go there. Love you Carolyn. Joyce
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Date: 12/11/2011 11:46:00 AM
You have sketched the beauty of the dead winter on the canvas of life so wonderfully that it is difficult to go away from the scenes of the dead winter. Great write my friend from your well crafted pen. I am reading and writing after a long absence but I really missed all of you. My good wishes for your wonderful entry in the contest. Love and best wishes always ... Ravindra....C Devonshire
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Date: 12/10/2011 5:58:00 PM
Wow, now this is a very powerful write over Dead Winter's world! I like the slow advancement throughout the poem, making anticipation ever increasingly growing! Then the climax, the eventual demise of this adventurer! Very Awesome Work!!
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Date: 12/10/2011 5:59:00 PM
Sorry I forgot.....Good luck in the contest!!
Date: 12/10/2011 5:47:00 PM
greatness in ability
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Date: 12/10/2011 4:21:00 PM
Emotive work that reads like winners' circle for sure..Very creative work that tells how it is at times in old age or ill health..Good luck in the contest..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenting on my work..I appreciate the time spent there..I am still remembering the time spent ooouing, ahhing at the lights and the joy when we all felt the emotion to sing along...Sara
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