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Written for the Iron Maiden " Dance of Death" song, contest sponsored by Robert James L. 

Zenith ~ a fatal lie written in forged gold, but to read the bruised ballads I’ve bled upon the palette of pixelated peridots in ominous silence, must I speak the romanticized rhymes of funeral roses? Perhaps then I’ll nestle in the crest of nothingness like a failed poet numb to the power of thorns… O embers of raven’s feathers, I feel the unseen heat of Hades’ wrath, burning the lucid mirage of sakura moon-glade, and my soul sways along the razor edge of a stainless sword, drunk on white-wine illusions, oblivious to the faceless phantoms mimicking Reaper’s requiem in spectral synchrony, summoning wings of dusk within my eclipsed heart, to soar as a fire-dragon kissed by blistering sins, as if ticking sparks of time did melt and merge with psychedelic coals, where I’ll rule as the mistress of Lucifer, hypnotized by the deceased daffodils… But I’m not lost. I crave perpetual peace away from the prying eyes of society that pushed me into a whirlpool of whirling insecurities, a maleficent maelstrom of trickery, dying for a searing sip of afterlife, where ashes of deceit will no longer suffocate the sleep that abandoned me like the splitting stars in my mind sprinkling scorching confetti upon fragile fields… O beloved, save me from the dance of death I long to taste the tears before the sunrise. I am frozen, like an insomniac gasping for love, reaching for tender twilight in a tortured tomb of cryptic tulips, weaving my heartbeat across your horizon, pondering in elegies: If I were thunder’s sigh, and you, the timeless starlight… Why do lifelines still unravel your love in soft, velvety cadence? For amidst jinxed lakes between us, this soul, r e m a i n s achingly tied to your elusive heart…

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Date: 4/9/2025 1:06:00 PM
IE, quite a statement on the feeling of death. It's so difficult to ponder the intensity you so beautifully and passionately describe. I'm just thanking my lucky stars I am in a frame of mind to be able to die and feel I can laugh (and cry) about it. I've realized that life is short, and no one of us will ever have a permanent effect on the universe itself. We only get to visit for a moment and can take time to add some solace for ourselves and others. We can also enjoy each second to the max extent possible by acting responsibly. There are certain people I would seek out if heaven were to exist. You would be one since I love the thought you put into what you feel and write! A real good soul you are.
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Date: 4/7/2025 1:03:00 AM
Beautiful. Congratulations on your big win ...
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Date: 4/3/2025 8:12:00 AM
Wow! Hearty congratulations on your well-deserved trophy win with this stellar poem my dear poet friend Ink! Thanks for sharing! Blessings to you always and your poetry! Hugs!
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Date: 4/3/2025 5:36:00 AM
Dearest Inky! Wow, this is absolutely stunning! The imagery is so intense, so hauntingly beautiful—it feels like stepping into a dream woven from fire and shadows. I love how it dances between despair and defiance, between being lost and craving peace. That last stanza hits deep, like a love that refuses to fade no matter how much time or pain tries to unravel it. Honestly, this feels like something etched into the stars themselves. Just breathtaking! Congratulations on your stunning win...Hugs
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Date: 4/3/2025 4:35:00 AM
"For amidst jinxed lakes between us, this soul, r e m a i n s achingly tied to your elusive heart"…We will ever be longing for the love lost. It will hang heavy in our mind as a burden, sometimes as a sweet ache. It is a slow burning fire that eats up the soul. "But I’m not lost. I crave perpetual peace away from the prying eyes of society that pushed me into a whirlpool of whirling insecurities," Yes, resilience is man's solution in every adversity. As ever, your poem is so powerful and your words striking arrows into the heart. Hearty Congratulations on your well deserved trophy win.
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Date: 4/3/2025 1:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 4/2/2025 7:59:00 PM
Congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!
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Date: 4/2/2025 4:10:00 PM
A truly hypnotizing poem here that you’ve created. I’m glad I can give it the trophy. Please write for my next contest on The Book of Souls.
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Date: 4/2/2025 3:07:00 PM
Beautiful, Ink! ...dying for a single sip of afterlife... ...weaving my heartbeat across your horizon... So many beautiful lines. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/2/2025 1:10:00 PM
a fatal lie written in forged gold, ooo .. must I speak the romanticized rhymes of funeral roses?.. wow these lines papi r on fireeeee.. embers of raven’s feathers, I feel the unseen heat of Hades’ wrath, mmmmmm the intensity is amazing!!! summoning wings of dusk within my eclipsed heart, to soar as a fire-dragon kissed by blistering sins, Oooo that imagery is powerfully!!!! splitting stars in my mind sprinkling scorching confetti upon fragile fields… yaaaz alliteration!!! reaching for tender twilight in a tortured tomb of cryptic tulips, weaving my heartbeat across your horizon, Awwwwn the way to paint perfection with ur weaving of beauty!!! Mmmm ! Mmmmm n that ending !!! Tied to u indeeeed papiii!!!
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Date: 4/2/2025 12:32:00 PM
Awesome poem and win, dear friend. Congratulations.
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Date: 4/1/2025 7:22:00 PM
dear poet, our images are so brilliant and create sincere emotions, they are so numerous too, this is a wonderful piece of poetical architecture have a great day
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Date: 4/1/2025 6:43:00 PM
Dearest Ink, despite cultural expectations and individual hardships, your poetry deftly handles existential issues like love, grief, and the need for tranquility. Encapsulating a profound need for connection and understanding amid an emotionally turbulent inner environment, YOU struggles under the weight of emotional baggage. The theme is replete with images that contrast light and dark, mirroring the intricacies of being human and the yearning for something more. uses words in a way that evokes strong feelings and creates remarkable pictures. Expressions such as "bruised songs," "razor edge of a stainless blade," and "fatal lie inscribed in fabricated gold" depict a combination of beauty and agony. Good luck, and many positive vibes sent to you.
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Date: 4/1/2025 4:39:00 PM
"Perhaps then I'll nestle on the crest of nothingness like a failed poet numb to the power of thorns..." If we fail love, do we fail Poetry, do the thorns of joy become brittle temptations that break upon the surface of exhausted heartbeats? No, we cannot fail, either love or poetry, because our truth continues to speak through desire. "I long to taste the tears before the sunrise..." Yes Poetess, it is very important to know the meaning of our pain...J.A.B.
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Date: 4/1/2025 2:17:00 PM
I envy you your talent/ you weave both sadness and light into everything you compose/ beautiful but sad
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Date: 4/1/2025 8:50:00 AM
Dear Empress, such a masterpiece of haunting beauty and raw emotion. Today I feel transported into a realm of spectral elegance, where pain and power intertwine. Your words dance on the edge of darkness, yet they pulse with hope and resilience. Stunning creation. Good Luck in the contest. Spring Blessings, my Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 4/1/2025 6:50:00 AM
Aching beautiful as always Ink. You write feeling lost and losing hope so well. I absolutely love this line "my soul sways along the razor edge of a stainless sword,." Too know that feeling do well.
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Date: 4/1/2025 4:43:00 AM
Stunning vocabulary IE, quite dark and forboding, good luck in the contest. Hope your week is off to a good start. Tom
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Date: 4/1/2025 3:43:00 AM
While reading your lines, I knew I wanted to mention the one about an eclipsed heart showing the depth of emotional pain, but Ink... your last lines beginning with "If I were thunder's sigh..." THAT IS a stand-alone verse of beautifully written, yet sorrowfully painful heartache.
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Date: 4/1/2025 2:04:00 AM
Beautiful poetry as always Ink, I admire your poetic talent, it’s amazing… Beryl
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Date: 4/1/2025 1:16:00 AM
So powerful Ink! "splitting stars in my mind sprinkling scorching confetti upon fragile fields" and "If I were thunder’s sigh, and you, the timeless starlight… Why do lifelines still unravel your love" just blew my mind! Excellent once again!
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