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Counting Ripples

Sadness weeps not for itself rather from broken windows of a child where each piece lay by the tracks of despair where unshaven shadowed men slept in bushes...waiting to board tomorrow in their continuous circle of failure it is the broken sidewalk felt by little feet, through the holes of shoes one step at a time the water fountain of white's only that dripped constantly with hate the scorched eyes that pierced cotton armor sewed by a Mother's hand worn on the body of the bowed head of embarrassment that walked by pointed fingers of laughter never accepted, never welcomed it is the tears that make night longer the rush of blood following a wounded trail it is the soldier that fought a hundred fights of respect and the pounding fist breaking walls the lonely cry of empty nights on narrow bridges with a sad moon counting ripples lapping stones on the banks of tomorrow wondering about fate...listening to crows as they call out the name of darkness wanting death to appear, without regret to find a planted stone in an empty field without footprints...where grass grew to cover any reason that someone lived 2/12/18

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Date: 2/25/2020 5:42:00 PM
Amazing, Frederic. So many fresh phrases woven into the darkness of your imagery and outstanding metaphors. Really touched me! Congratulations So glad you brought it out again!
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Date: 4/18/2018 10:44:00 PM
Frederic, this was honestly the first poem that caught my eye in my contest and was the first to be chosen as a winner. I chose it because of the fantastic imagery from the getgo and the depth required to dive into its meaning. Well done and thank you for the submission.
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Date: 4/18/2018 7:59:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this powerful poem!
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Date: 4/18/2018 9:27:00 AM
"Tracks of despair...fountains that ..drip with hate" on and on".the last three lines...no wonder you deserve congrats.
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Date: 4/17/2018 6:24:00 PM
Congratulation on your win, Frederic, a wonderful write.. Hugs Eve
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Date: 4/17/2018 3:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your podium finish with this lovely poem, Frederic.
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Date: 4/17/2018 2:59:00 PM
What a wonderful poem Frederic, I felt and saw everything, amazing imagery, congrats on another win!
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Date: 2/27/2018 8:22:00 PM
Such a deep poem full of meaning, emotion Frederic. With beautiful use of metaphor, each line is poetically poignant, but for me, the last three lines were especially heartfelt and sorrowful. Congratulations on your excellent win!
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Date: 2/27/2018 3:53:00 PM
Wonderful metaphors and emotion, Frederic. Congratulations on your fine placement on this short list of winners! Sandra
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Date: 2/27/2018 11:55:00 AM
Powerful images a-plenty in this powerful write...I was hooked by lines 3 - 5: So reminiscent of the character of Jurgis in Upton Sinclair's polemic, "The Jungle."...Thank you, Frederic, for this wonderful read, a well-deserved winner. Best of everything, Gershon
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Date: 2/27/2018 11:55:00 AM
Powerful images a-plenty in this powerful write...I was hooked by lines 3 - 5: So reminiscent of the character of Jurgis in Upton Sinclair's polemic, "The Jungle."...Thank you, Frederic, for this wonderful read, a well-deserved winner. Best of everything, Gershon
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Date: 2/27/2018 10:36:00 AM
Frederic, your metaphors are outstanding in this one. It's as impossible to count ripples lapping stones as it is to count a person's sorrows. Excellent write.
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Date: 2/27/2018 9:32:00 AM
Wow, Congratulations for your win with this powerful poem! :)
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Date: 2/27/2018 8:07:00 AM
What a wonderful poem. Congrats on your most deserving win, Frederic.
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Date: 2/27/2018 5:51:00 AM
words can't express how much this touched me. You truly are one of my favorite poets here Frederic. You are so deep and meaningful, full of metaphors and emotion. Everything I love to read! congrats and thank you :)-luloo
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Date: 2/17/2018 6:41:00 PM
Well now......wow..... I almost don't know what to say. This one has almost made me speechless, the poignancy of emotions that wells up from each line is palpable that one can feel the shame, cold, fear, loneliness, hopelessness and despair . One of the best I've read in a long time . Wow
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Date: 4/17/2018 3:00:00 PM
I agree Carrie wow!
Date: 2/14/2018 11:36:00 PM
Oh my gosh, this is SO good, Frederick. Heart felt and reminding me of an old folk song from Russia "when will they ever learn. When will they ever learn?" I think it was called Where have all the flowers gone.
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Date: 2/13/2018 6:41:00 AM
Frederic this is a touching poem, really pulls at the heart strings..
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