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July- 10- 2025
Pick A Title- Vol. 53 Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Edward Ibeh

 

On a dusky evening long time ago, When shadows huddled at every corner, When rain had gone and birds had roosted, You held me close and whispered in my ear; “In your eyes I see, the blue of the sky, In your soul, you hold the depth of the seas, Love swells, like tides on rise, My life, I vow, by Jove, never to part” Your voice, like a tremulous rivulet gurgled, We stood staring at each other in a warm embrace. With passion sweet, your eyes glowed. Like a blue lagoon, they were deep and peaceful. On your dimpled cheek, a kiss I planted, A gesture warm with abiding love. Crisscross lain as warp and weft, We hoped to weave the garb of life. Words and deeds that served as balm to the soul! Still, they repeat, gushing a flurry of thoughts, But alas! To a far unknown land you fled, ‘From whose bourn, no traveler returns’, My life has moldered and mildew grown, Where my Love! Whither have you gone? Who bid you slink into death’s secret hide? Why left me to languish in a world of shadows? Seasons roll and years glide, Youth has withered and memory fails, Now I wander through a dim shadowy world. I feel so trapped and lonely, as twilights grips. Through the corridors of night as I tread, Your shadow chases me wherever I turn. I feel, I can't escape from those memories Of a time when we followed each other like shadows. Like embers flickering low, yet stocked by breath of fire, I hope, we shall meet one day at the Golden gate, Where no shadows shall lurk and time shall stay eternal And silence sparks the language, the ears want to hear. _______ _____________ _______ When rain is gone and sky gets clear, When night turns deeper and silence creeps, I transverse back to that dusky eve, To retrieve those moments, I sadly cherish!

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Date: 7/11/2025 10:04:00 AM
Dear sweet valsa, This is so poetic, and i love the cadence and rhythm of your poem and how youv painted imagery and woven metaphors too! It had a very catchy vibe to it that i cant help but be in awe of! I wrote a poem too today on rain listening to the rain: and i must say your poem is absolutely gorgeous especially with lines such as "When rain is gone and sky gets clear, When night turns deeper and silence creeps, I transverse back to that dusky eve" a big fave for me! I just got back from dubai and catching up a little on here: taking it slow still. Hope you are doing better! Sending you light always
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Date: 7/11/2025 12:41:00 AM
This is so beautiful Valsa, a gripping sad love story. It is incredible <3
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Date: 7/10/2025 4:44:00 PM
"Seasons roll and years glide, Youth has withered and memory fails, Now I wander through a dim shadowy world. I feel so trapped and lonely, as twilights grips." -- Very spiritually moving. I know, life is often hard, and may never bring us the answers we desire and deserve! Like you, somehow I feel ultimately all will be made right. Blessings my friend.
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Date: 7/10/2025 2:45:00 PM
Dear Valsa, I was moved by the way you capture the intimacy of that dusky evening, the embrace, the vows, the blue of the sky reflected in your beloved’s eyes. I think you show love as something vast and deep, as endless as the sea, and yet so delicate like a kiss on a dimpled cheek, a promise woven like fabric. It’s the kind of love that feels both timeless and heartbreakingly fleeting. A Fav! Summer Blessings, My Dear Valsa, Daniel
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Date: 7/10/2025 1:22:00 PM
Soupmail. Sara K
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Date: 7/10/2025 11:28:00 AM
A heartfelt poem on painful memories and the shaows of death. Thanks for sharing this memory.
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Date: 7/10/2025 10:07:00 AM
- Deep thoughts, feelings and hopes, Valsa - The shadows of death and memories that you can't run away from - A sensitive, beautiful poem - Best wishes in the contest - hugs
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Date: 7/10/2025 4:11:00 AM
Ahh!! I can feel the pain in this one. If this one is based on truth from the past, I feel for you in the disappointment, betrayal, and loss that you must have felt. Thanks for sharing this memory with us. It made a great poem. If you would like to see and hear from him again, I hope that it happens. Sara K
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